Advertisement— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be clearer and more grammatical. Start with a direct topic sentence naming the ad, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid vague phrases like "I guess impression" and redundant words.

예시: A clear answer: "Yes, a football commercial impressed me when I was a child. The advert showed young players training together and scoring dramatic goals, which made me excited to play football. Because of that ad, I joined a local youth team and watched matches more often."

제안: Give a direct short answer then specific examples and use linking words to connect ideas. Fix grammar (use present simple: "I usually see"). Avoid repetition and incorrect phrases like "people advertise their promotes."

예시: A clear answer: "Yes, I usually see many ads on public transport, especially on buses and trains. For example, there are posters for mobile phones and posters for local events, so commuters often notice them during their journeys."

제안: Be concise and avoid hesitation. State your opinion directly and support it with one or two specific reasons and an example. Use natural collocations ("I enjoy advertisements" not "advertisement").

예시: A clear answer: "Yes, I like advertisements because they inform me about new products and their features. For instance, a recent ad showed a smartphone's camera quality and convinced me to read reviews before buying."

제안: Start with a direct topic sentence naming the types you prefer, then give brief specific reasons for each. Avoid vague or awkward phrases like "essence of diversity" and "in virtual list."

예시: A clear answer: "I prefer sports and music advertisements because they are exciting and often use catchy visuals or sounds. I also sometimes like ads for home appliances when they clearly show how the product makes life easier."

제안: Answer directly and use correct verb forms and linking words. Be specific about when and where you see ads (e.g., social media, websites, apps) and give a short example of the type of ad.

예시: A clear answer: "Yes, I see ads very often on my phone, especially when I scroll social media apps like Instagram and TikTok. For example, I often encounter short video ads for clothing brands between posts."

× Of course, when I was a child, the sports advertisement that I guess impression on me for a long time and I was fascinated about the sports, which was football and it was a desirable experience.

✓ Of course, when I was a child, a sports advertisement made a strong impression on me for a long time; I was fascinated by the sport, especially football, and it was a wonderful experience.

The original sentence has unclear structure and incorrect word choices: 'that I guess impression' is ungrammatical and 'fascinated about' should be 'fascinated by'. Also articles and noun phrases are incorrect ('the sports advertisement' -> 'a sports advertisement', 'the sports' -> 'the sport' or 'football'). Rearranging into two coordinated clauses with correct prepositions and article usage clarifies meaning. Suggestion: Break long ideas into shorter clauses, use 'fascinated by' for the object of fascination, and choose correct articles ('a' for a non-specific advertisement).

× Of course I usually. Watch several advertisements on public transport, more specifically bus, train and also other transports.

✓ Of course I usually watch several advertisements on public transport, more specifically on buses, trains and other forms of transport.

The original has a sentence break error ('Of course I usually.' then 'Watch') creating a sentence without a verb and wrong plural forms ('bus, train' should be plural). Prepositions are needed before vehicle types ('on buses, trains'). Suggestion: Keep subject and verb together, use correct plural nouns for repeated items, and include appropriate prepositions ('on').

× We see a several people advertise their promotes their product.

✓ We see several people advertising and promoting their products.

Problems include incorrect article + quantifier ('a several people'), wrong verb forms ('advertise' should be 'advertising' as a participle here), repetitive structure ('advertise their promotes their product'). Also 'product' should be plural if referring generally. Use parallel gerunds 'advertising and promoting'. Suggestion: Use quantifiers without 'a' ('several people'), use gerund/participle forms for ongoing actions, and keep parallel structure.

× Absolutely, I enjoy advertisement because it, uh, helps us to know new products and also promotes their quality.

✓ Absolutely, I enjoy advertisements because they help us learn about new products and show their quality.

'Advertisement' should be plural when speaking generally ('advertisements'). Pronoun agreement: 'it' should be 'they' to match plural, and 'helps us to know' is unnatural—use 'help us learn about'. 'Promotes their quality' is awkward; 'show their quality' or 'promote them' is clearer. Suggestion: Use plural nouns when speaking generically, ensure pronoun agreement, and prefer natural collocations like 'learn about'.

× Essence of diversity can be seen when I answer this question.

✓ A variety of types comes to mind when I answer this question.

The phrase 'Essence of diversity can be seen' is awkward and unidiomatic. Use 'a variety of types' or 'there is a lot of variety' to express the idea. Also 'can be seen' is passive and less direct. Suggestion: Use natural English expressions like 'a variety of' or 'many types' to introduce examples.

× To be specific, sports advertisement is one of the most preferable as well as music advertisements also in virtual list.

✓ To be specific, sports advertisements are among my favorites, and I also like music advertisements in online lists.

Problems: 'sports advertisement' needs plural or 'a sports advertisement'; 'one of the most preferable' is unidiomatic—use 'among my favorites'; 'music advertisements also in virtual list' is unclear—'in online lists' is better. Ensure plural agreement between subject and verb. Suggestion: Use idiomatic phrases like 'among my favorites' and correct plural forms for general statements.

× Apart from that domestic appliance advertisement everyone else in a while.

✓ Apart from that, domestic appliance advertisements catch my attention once in a while.

The original lacks a clear verb and has incorrect word order ('everyone else in a while' is meaningless). Use a clear subject and verb and correct quantifier: 'once in a while' meaning occasionally. Suggestion: Provide a verb to show what happens to those advertisements (e.g., 'catch my attention') and use set phrases like 'once in a while'.

× Of course, quite frequently when I encounter a lot of advertisement on my phone, whenever I scrolling social media, at that time, every once in a while advertisement should come.

✓ Of course, quite frequently when I see many advertisements on my phone while scrolling social media, an advertisement appears every once in a while.

Errors: 'encounter a lot of advertisement' should be 'see many advertisements' (countable/plural). 'whenever I scrolling' is incorrect—needs 'I am scrolling' or 'I scroll'. 'every once in a while advertisement should come' is awkward and incorrect modal use; 'an advertisement appears every once in a while' is natural present tense. Maintain simple present or present continuous consistently. Suggestion: Use correct plural forms for countable nouns, use proper verb forms ('I am scrolling' or 'I scroll'), and choose natural verb phrases like 'an advertisement appears'.