Advertisement— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Give a clear topic sentence, avoid hesitations and incomplete thoughts, and add one or two specific supporting details (what the ad was for, why the singer impressed you). Keep the answer to 2–4 concise sentences and use linking words (for example, because and so).

예시: Yes. One advertisement that impressed me as a child featured a famous singer in a perfume commercial. I watched it carefully because I loved her voice and thought she looked very elegant, so the ad felt glamorous and memorable to me.

제안: Directly answer the question about advertising on transport first, then give a relevant detail. Avoid confusing statements (drivers don’t include advertising is unclear). Use linking words like however or although to connect ideas and provide one clear example.

예시: Yes, there is some advertising on buses and trains in my city, mostly posters and digital screens. However, drivers do not display ads on their vehicles; instead, people on board often listen to music or watch videos on their phones.

제안: Start with a direct opinion (Yes or No), then give precise reasons and examples. Avoid grammatical errors and repetitions. Use linking words like because or when to connect reasons and keep to 2–3 sentences.

예시: Yes, I like some advertisements because they are interesting or feature my favorite actors and singers. When a celebrity I admire appears in an ad, I am more likely to watch it and remember the product.

제안: Give a concise topic sentence stating the type you prefer, then explain clearly with one or two specific reasons. Reduce hesitations and repeated words; use linking words like because and for example.

예시: I prefer advertisements that feature my favorite Korean actors and singers because they are experienced performers. For example, their expressive acting and creativity often make the ads more entertaining and memorable.

제안: Answer directly (Yes/No), then add a clear reason and one specific detail (where you see ads and what you do). Avoid trailing off and hesitations; finish your sentence and keep it within 2–3 sentences. Use linking words like because and so.

예시: Yes, I often see many advertisements on my phone and computer, especially on YouTube and social media. I usually skip them because most are not interesting or engaging, but I sometimes watch ones that feature a product I need or a celebrity I like.

× Yes, I still remember this advertisement and when I was child, I always watch this advertisement carefully because I liked umm, I liked the singer uh in this advertisement umm and she was one of the most beautiful and I think she's.

✓ Yes, I still remember this advertisement, and when I was a child I always watched it carefully because I liked the singer in the advertisement; she was one of the most beautiful, I think.

The sentence contains incorrect present tense use ('watch' should be past 'watched') and missing article 'a' before 'child'. Use past tense for past habits. Also improve pronoun reference ('it') and punctuation for clarity.

× In my country drivers don't include advertising, but they always listen to their their favorite umm singer song.

✓ In my country drivers don't include advertisements, but they always listen to their favorite singers' songs.

Plural 'advertising' is better as 'advertisements' (plural noun). The possessive plural for singers is 'singers''; 'song' should be plural 'songs' to match 'singers'. Correct noun forms and possessive pronoun usage.

× Maybe yes, if it will be interesting than other ones and if there's advertisements were filmed by my favorite actress, actors or singers of their career. Maybe because they are advertisements always will.

✓ Maybe yes, if it is more interesting than others, and if the advertisements are filmed by my favorite actresses, actors, or singers. Maybe because advertisements will always attract me.

Use present tense 'is' for general statements, comparative 'more interesting than others', and correct passive construction 'are filmed'. 'There's advertisements were filmed' mixes 'there is' with past; replace with correct structure. Reorder words to form coherent sentences.

× I prefer all of the advertisements with my favorite uh Korean actress and singers as they have a lot of experience experience with performance uh, due to their work, so they will do it easily because because of the uh, it, it will be appear a lot of ideas in their mind.

✓ I prefer advertisements featuring my favorite Korean actresses and singers because they have a lot of performance experience from their work, so they can do it easily and many ideas come to their minds.

Use 'featuring' rather than 'with', plural agreement 'actresses and singers', and 'performance experience' as a noun phrase. Remove redundant words and fix passive/awkward phrasing 'it will appear a lot of ideas' to 'many ideas come to their minds'.

× I always see the various of advertisements in my phone and computer umm when I watch the YouTube, but I often skip them because it's not interesting and engaging. So, uh, but I watch the.

✓ I always see various advertisements on my phone and computer when I watch YouTube, but I often skip them because they're not interesting or engaging.

Use preposition 'on' for devices ('on my phone'), 'various advertisements' without 'the' or 'of', and 'watch YouTube' without 'the'. 'It's' should agree with plural 'they're'. Removed incomplete trailing clause.