Advertisement— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cevabınızı daha doğal ve etkili yapmak için, cümlelerinizi daha açık ve doğrudan kurmalısınız. Gereksiz tekrarları ve dolgu kelimelerini azaltın. Ayrıca, cevaplarınızı desteklemek için daha spesifik detaylar verin ve bağlaçlar kullanarak akıcılığı artırın.

예시: Yes, when I was a child, colorful advertisements, especially those featuring anime characters, made a strong impression on me because they were very vibrant and exciting.

제안: Cevabınızı daha akıcı ve mantıklı yapmak için, cümlelerinizi tamamlayın ve bağlaçlar kullanarak detayları birbirine bağlayın. Ayrıca, kelime seçiminizi bağlama uygun ve doğru yapmaya özen gösterin.

예시: Yes, definitely. I use the subway every day, and I often see government advertisements about health or the environment. These ads are very common in our subways and help raise awareness among passengers.

제안: Cevabınızı daha net ve anlaşılır yapmak için, cümlelerinizi daha düzgün ve tamamlanmış şekilde kurun. Duygularınızı ve nedenlerinizi açıkça ifade edin ve gereksiz tekrarları azaltın.

예시: Actually, I don't like advertisements because they rarely provide useful information. Nowadays, ads are often too long and interrupt the program, which I find very irritating.

제안: Cevabınızı daha etkili ve anlaşılır yapmak için, cümlelerinizi daha açık ve düzenli kurun. Düşüncelerinizi net ifade edin ve gereksiz tekrarları azaltın. Ayrıca, örneklerle destekleyin.

예시: I prefer serious advertisements produced by government ministries because they are educational and reach a wide audience effectively.

제안: Cevabınızı daha doğal ve akıcı yapmak için, cümlelerinizi daha net ve tamamlanmış şekilde kurun. Duygularınızı ve görüşlerinizi açıkça ifade edin ve gereksiz tekrarları azaltın.

예시: Yes, I often see advertisements when I scroll through Instagram or other social media apps. They are very common and can be quite annoying because many ads are not educational and sometimes contain unreliable information.

× When I was at yesterday's, yeah, yes, it is uh, when I was a child, uh, I would uh, influ, I would impacted uh, by colourful advertisements, uh, like some animes I uh, I remember it's very, uh, very colourful and very, uh, exciting, uh.

✓ When I was a child, I was influenced by colourful advertisements, like some animes I remember which were very colourful and very exciting.

The original sentence has multiple sentence structure errors including unclear phrasing and incomplete thoughts. 'I would impacted' is incorrect; the correct form is 'I was influenced'. Also, 'When I was at yesterday's' is unclear and unnecessary. The sentence should be simplified and clarified to convey the intended meaning clearly.

× I use subway everyday and I came across some government advertisement or environmental advertisement by produced by Minister of Health or Environment.

✓ I use the subway every day and I come across some government advertisements or environmental advertisements produced by the Minister of Health or Environment.

'Subway' should be preceded by the definite article 'the' because it refers to a specific subway system. 'Everyday' should be two words 'every day' when meaning 'each day'. 'Advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements' to match 'some'. 'By produced by' is incorrect; it should be 'produced by'. Also, 'came across' should be in present tense 'come across' to match the habitual action.

× It's very common way our our subways and I.

✓ It's a very common way in our subways.

The original sentence is incomplete and has repeated words 'our our'. It lacks a proper verb and preposition. The corrected sentence adds the article 'a' and the preposition 'in' to make it grammatically correct and meaningful.

× I don't like actually, uh, because, uh, they can't, cannot, uh, conclude, uh, beneficial contents.

✓ I don't actually like them because they cannot include beneficial content.

'Can't' and 'cannot' are redundant; only one is needed. 'Conclude' is incorrect in this context; the correct verb is 'include'. 'Contents' should be singular 'content' when referring to information in general.

× It's not educational right now our, uh, our era, it's very change and uh, advertisement breaks so long.

✓ It is not educational in our current era; it has changed a lot and advertisement breaks are very long.

'It's very change' is incorrect; it should be 'it has changed'. 'Right now our, uh, our era' is awkward; 'in our current era' is better. 'Advertisement breaks so long' lacks a verb and plural form; corrected to 'advertisement breaks are very long'.

× I irritating by them.

✓ I am irritated by them.

The original sentence lacks the verb 'am' and uses the adjective 'irritating' incorrectly. The correct form is the passive voice 'I am irritated' to express the feeling caused by advertisements.

× I like some serious advertisement, uh, which is produced by ministries or governments.

✓ I like some serious advertisements which are produced by ministries or governments.

'Advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements' to match 'some'. 'Which is' should be 'which are' to agree with the plural subject.

× It's very educational, uh, way to, uh, access huge, uh, variety of people, uh, vast majorities.

✓ It's a very educational way to reach a huge variety of people, the vast majority.

'Way' needs the article 'a'. 'Access' is not the correct verb here; 'reach' is better. 'Huge variety' needs the article 'a'. 'Vast majorities' is incorrect; 'vast majority' is the correct singular form when referring to most people.

× I, I try to say, and I, I like that and I can, uh, understand some D.

✓ I try to say that I like it and I can understand some of it.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. It needs to be restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness, removing repeated words and completing the thought.

× Yes, definitely, especially scrolling Instagram or scrolling any social media website or application.

✓ Yes, definitely, especially when scrolling Instagram or any social media website or application.

The original sentence lacks a conjunction 'when' to connect the action properly. Adding 'when' clarifies the timing of the action.

× It's very common way and it is very annoying.

✓ It's a very common way and it is very annoying.

'Way' needs the article 'a' to be grammatically correct.

× I think umm quite common and uh not educational things something it's very uh unreliable content if you uh touch.

✓ I think it is quite common and not educational; some content is very unreliable if you interact with it.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. It needs to be restructured with proper subjects, verbs, and punctuation to convey the intended meaning clearly.