Advertisement— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答不够清晰，表达混乱，缺乏连贯性和具体细节。建议简化句子结构，明确表达广告内容和印象，并使用连接词使表达更流畅。

예시: Yes, I remember an advertisement from my childhood for a drink called IOPJ. The slogan was "Fast for more," which meant that once you taste it, you want to drink more. This advertisement impressed me because it was catchy and made me curious about the product.

제안: 回答较为简单，语句中有重复和犹豫词，表达不够流畅。建议减少填充词，使用连接词使句子更连贯，并具体说明广告的类型或效果。

예시: Yes, I often see many advertisements on trains, metros, and buses. These places attract a large number of people, so advertisers use them to promote products effectively and catch passengers' attention.

제안: 回答内容较为简单，存在重复和犹豫词。建议使用更丰富的词汇，避免重复，并用连接词连接观点，使表达更自然。

예시: Yes, I like advertisements because they provide useful information about new products. Moreover, I appreciate the creativity involved in making advertisements, which often makes them interesting to watch.

제안: 回答表达不够准确，语法错误较多，内容重复。建议简化句子，明确表达喜欢护肤品广告的原因，并补充具体细节。

예시: I like skincare advertisements because I often buy skincare products. These ads provide me with useful information about new and high-quality products that I might want to try.

제안: 回答中有很多犹豫词，表达不清晰且不连贯。建议减少填充词，使用完整句子，明确说明在手机和电脑上看到广告的情况。

예시: Yes, I often see many advertisements on my phone and computer. Nowadays, since more people use the Internet on these devices, advertisers target them through online ads.

× When I was a trial to IOPJ's advertisement, the slogan I still remember it is fast for more.

✓ When I was trying IOPJ's advertisement, the slogan I still remember is "Fast for more."

句中 'trial' 应为动词形式 'trying'，且 'it' 多余，应去掉。这里涉及动词形式错误，属于单复数及动词形式问题。

× It just means when you taste a a bit of passage which just elude you to drink more, allow you to drink more.

✓ It just means when you taste a bit of passage which just entices you to drink more, allowing you to drink more.

句中 'a a bit' 重复，且 'passage' 用词不当，应为 'taste' 或 'flavor'，'elude' 用错，应为 'entice'。这里涉及冠词使用和词汇选择错误。

× Yes, of course, uh, I usually see a lot of advertisements on the trains, metro or bus because it is a place uh, can attract lots of uh, people to appreciate and they may have full interest in buying them.

✓ Yes, of course, I usually see a lot of advertisements on trains, the metro, or buses because these places can attract lots of people to notice them, and they may be very interested in buying the products.

'on the trains' 中 'the' 不必要，'metro or bus' 应为 'the metro or buses'，且句子结构不完整，'to appreciate' 用词不当，应为 'to notice'。涉及介词和冠词使用错误。

× Yes, I like it because advertisement can give me some hints to buy some new products.

✓ Yes, I like it because advertisements can give me some hints to buy new products.

'advertisement' 应为复数 'advertisements'，因为泛指多种广告。

× Uh, the second thing is that I like the uh creativity of uh, advertisements made by the people.

✓ The second thing is that I like the creativity of advertisements made by people.

'the people' 应为泛指 'people'，不需要定冠词。

× I like the skin cares advertising because it is the product that I need to buy the the high test skin care product and the advertisement can give me some information of the new product.

✓ I like skin care advertising because it is the product that I need to buy, the highest quality skin care product, and the advertisement can give me some information about the new product.

'skin cares' 应为不可数名词 'skin care'，'high test' 应为 'highest'，且句子中重复 'the'。涉及单复数和比较级错误。

× Uh, I think, uh, they do, uh, I usually see lots of advertisement from, from or computers because nowadays, uh, more and more people use their phone or computer to enjoy the Internet.

✓ I think they do. I usually see lots of advertisements from phones or computers because nowadays, more and more people use their phones or computers to enjoy the Internet.

'advertisement' 应为复数 'advertisements'，'from, from or computers' 语序错误，应为 'from phones or computers'。涉及单复数和句子结构错误。