Advertisement— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn cần hoàn chỉnh hơn và tránh bị dở dang. Bạn nên kết thúc câu một cách rõ ràng và sử dụng các liên từ để làm cho câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn. Ngoài ra, hãy thêm chi tiết cụ thể hơn về lý do tại sao quảng cáo đó gây ấn tượng với bạn.

예시: Yes, there is. The advertisement called Zinzin was for Milk Kids Milk, and it impressed me because it was very funny. The Zinzin character was jumping, running around, and playing with kids, which made it very lively and enjoyable to watch. This advertisement always made me smile and remember the brand clearly.

제안: Bạn nên sử dụng các liên từ để kết nối các ý trong câu trả lời, giúp câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn. Ngoài ra, hãy sửa lỗi ngữ pháp nhỏ và cung cấp thêm ví dụ hoặc lý do cụ thể để làm câu trả lời phong phú hơn.

예시: Yes, I do. Every day, I see many advertisements on buses, which are usually very expensive because the buses travel around the city, so many people can see them. However, I doubt their effectiveness because the buses move quickly, and people might not have enough time to notice the ads clearly.

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn khá tốt nhưng có thể cải thiện bằng cách sử dụng các liên từ để kết nối các ý và mở rộng thêm chi tiết về quan điểm cá nhân. Hãy chú ý đến ngữ pháp và cách diễn đạt tự nhiên hơn.

예시: Yes, I do. Actually, I studied advertising for my bachelor's degree. However, I think advertisements in Vietnam are not as creative as those in Western countries because of strict rules and traditional values. Despite this, I still find some local ads interesting and effective.

제안: Bạn nên sửa lỗi ngữ pháp và cấu trúc câu để câu trả lời rõ ràng hơn. Sử dụng các liên từ để kết nối ý và cung cấp thêm ví dụ cụ thể về loại quảng cáo bạn thích sẽ giúp câu trả lời tự nhiên và hiệu quả hơn.

예시: Nowadays, online advertising has taken over traditional types like outdoor or TV advertisements. I think online ads are much more straightforward and effective because they can target specific audiences directly. For example, I often see personalized ads on social media that catch my attention.

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn khá tự nhiên và rõ ràng. Tuy nhiên, bạn có thể cải thiện bằng cách sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn và thêm một vài chi tiết cụ thể hơn về cảm nhận của bạn về quảng cáo trên thiết bị điện tử.

예시: Yes, I do. I see countless advertisements on my phone every day, especially when I use social media or watch videos. Sometimes, the ads are so annoying that I decided to buy a premium YouTube account to avoid interruptions. Overall, I think online ads can be useful but also distracting at times.

× There was a Zinzin character jumping, running around, playing with kids.

✓ There was a Zinzin character jumping, running around, and playing with kids.

The original sentence is missing the conjunction 'and' before the last verb in the list. When listing actions, it is grammatically correct to use 'and' before the final item to connect the verbs properly.

× It gives me a lot of.

✓ It gives me a lot of joy.

The sentence ends abruptly and lacks an object after 'a lot of'. 'A lot of' requires a noun to complete the phrase. Adding 'joy' or another appropriate noun completes the sentence meaningfully.

× Every day I see a lot of advertisement on the bus and they are usually very expensive because the bus go around the city so that everyone can see the advertisement.

✓ Every day I see a lot of advertisements on the bus and they are usually very expensive because the bus goes around the city so that everyone can see the advertisements.

The word 'advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements' because it refers to multiple ads. Also, 'bus go' should be 'bus goes' to agree with the singular subject 'bus'. Additionally, 'advertisement' at the end should be plural to match 'a lot of advertisements'.

× because the bus go around the city so that everyone can see the advertisement.

✓ because the bus goes around the city so that everyone can see the advertisement.

The verb 'go' must agree with the singular subject 'bus'. In the third person singular present tense, the verb should be 'goes'.

× But I doubt about its effectiveness because it goes so fast.

✓ But I doubt its effectiveness because it goes so fast.

The verb 'doubt' is not followed by the preposition 'about'. The correct structure is 'doubt something' without 'about'.

× Actually I learned my bachelor in advertisement.

✓ Actually I earned my bachelor's degree in advertising.

The phrase 'learned my bachelor' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'earned my bachelor's degree'. Also, 'advertisement' should be 'advertising' as the field of study.

× Nowadays, online advertising takeover are the types of advertising such as outdoor or TV advertisement and I think online advertisement is much more straightforward as well as effective to the audience.

✓ Nowadays, online advertising has taken over types of advertising such as outdoor or TV advertisements, and I think online advertising is much more straightforward as well as effective to the audience.

The phrase 'online advertising takeover are' is incorrect. It should be 'online advertising has taken over'. Also, 'advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements' when referring to multiple types.

× Yes I do. I see countless advertisement on my phone every day, especially when I use social media or watch video.

✓ Yes I do. I see countless advertisements on my phone every day, especially when I use social media or watch videos.

'Advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements' because it refers to multiple ads. Similarly, 'video' should be plural 'videos' when referring to multiple instances.

× Sometimes the ads are too annoying that I decided to buy a premium account on YouTube to avoid interruptions from advertisements.

✓ Sometimes the ads are so annoying that I decided to buy a premium account on YouTube to avoid interruptions from advertisements.

The phrase 'too annoying that' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'so annoying that' to indicate cause and effect.