Advertisement— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答时语法和表达不够准确，且句子结构较简单。建议使用更自然流畅的表达，并注意冠词和复数形式的正确使用。可以增加连接词使内容更连贯。

예시: Yes, there was a chocolate bar advertisement that impressed me as a child. It showed kids happily sharing chocolate bars with their friends, which made me want to try it too and make new friends.

제안: 回答中存在语法错误，如冠词使用不当和词汇搭配不准确。建议使用更准确的词汇和句式，并用连接词丰富句子。

예시: Yes, I often see many advertisements on buses and subways. They usually promote new products, services, and recently released movies.

제안: 表达不够流畅，语法错误较多，如动词形式错误。建议简化句子结构，使用正确的动词形式，并避免口语填充词。

예시: Yes, I like advertisements because they can convey a lot of information in a short time and attract people's attention effectively.

제안: 回答中有语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，句子重复且逻辑不连贯。建议简化表达，使用清晰的句子结构，并避免重复。

예시: I like food advertisements because they often create a warm and peaceful atmosphere, reminding me of family dinners and gatherings with friends.

제안: 表达不自然且有语法错误，词汇使用不当。建议使用更准确的词汇和句式，避免口语填充词，表达更清晰。

예시: Yes, when I open a new app, advertisements often pop up and distract me, sometimes leading me to other apps or encouraging me to make purchases.

× I remember all the kids on the TV had a great smile on their face to share these chocolate bar with others.

✓ I remember all the kids on the TV had great smiles on their faces to share these chocolate bars with others.

这里“smile”和“face”应使用复数形式，因为主语是复数“all the kids”。“chocolate bar”也应为复数“chocolate bars”，因为指的是多个巧克力棒。

× Yes, I like advertisements because they often use limited time or limited space to, uh, conveying very numerous information and catching your eyes.

✓ Yes, I like advertisements because they often use limited time or limited space to, uh, convey very numerous information and catch your eyes.

动词不定式“to”后应接动词原形“convey”和“catch”，而不是动名词形式“conveying”和“catching”。

× They provide the information about new products, service and newly movies.

✓ They provide information about new products, services and new movies.

“information”前不需要定冠词“the”。“service”应为复数“services”，因为指多个服务。“newly movies”应改为“new movies”，因为“newly”是副词，不能修饰名词。

× So it's a remind me they are remind.

✓ So it reminds me, they remind me.

“remind”是动词，不能用作名词。应使用动词形式“reminds”来表达“它提醒我”。句子结构需要调整以表达清楚意思。

× They remind me of my own memory and I have.

✓ They remind me of my own memories that I have.

“memory”应为复数“memories”，因为通常指多条记忆。句子末尾“and I have”不完整，需补充完整表达。

× Yes, when I start a new uh app, some advertising just pumps out and distract me to another app and do some purchasing.

✓ Yes, when I start a new app, some advertisements just pop up and distract me to another app and make me do some purchasing.

“advertising”应为复数名词“advertisements”。“pumps out”用法不当，常用表达是“pop up”。“distract me to”应改为“distract me from”或“redirect me to”。“do some purchasing”表达不自然，改为“make me do some purchasing”更合适。