Advertisement— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 你的回答表达了印象深刻的广告，但句子结构稍显复杂且有语法错误。建议简化句子，避免重复表达，并使用更自然的连接词，使表达更流畅。

예시: When I was a child, an advertisement for a milk drink impressed me. It wasn't because it was creative, but because it had a catchy song that stuck in my mind.

제안: 回答内容丰富，但有些表达不够自然，如“Just the day, just in the morning”不太符合英语习惯。建议使用更地道的时间表达，并注意单复数形式。

예시: Yes, definitely. On every train and subway, there are advertisements everywhere. For example, every morning during my commute, I see hundreds of ads along the way.

제안: 回答表达了观点，但句子较长且有语法错误（如重复的“it it”）。建议分句表达，避免重复，并用更准确的词汇描述感受。

예시: No, I don't like advertisements because most of them are boring and noisy. For example, in my building's elevator, there is an ad that repeats the product's name many times, which feels annoying and uninformative.

제안: 回答表达了喜好，但部分句子结构不够自然，如“dedicates her mind in the product”。建议使用更地道的表达，并避免重复。

예시: I like advertisements that are interesting and creative. When I see that someone has put a lot of thought into the product, it persuades me to buy it.

제안: 回答内容具体，但有些表达不够准确，如“there are this kind of pop up ads”。建议注意主谓一致，并使用更自然的表达方式。

예시: Yes, I often see pop-up ads on my phone or computer. Whenever I open an app, the first thing I see is an advertisement. Sometimes, if I accidentally shake my phone, the app redirects me to an ad, which is very annoying.

× It was only because it was accompanied by a catchy and brainwashing song.

✓ It was only because it was accompanied by a catchy and brainwashing song.

The sentence is grammatically correct; 'brainwashing' is correctly used as a present participle adjective modifying 'song'. No correction needed.

× I think on every train and on the subway there's advertisement on every possible corner.

✓ I think on every train and on the subway there are advertisements on every possible corner.

The noun 'advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements' because it refers to multiple ads. Also, the verb 'there's' (there is) should be 'there are' to agree with the plural noun.

× Just the day, just in the morning when I go to work by the metro, I can see hundreds of advertisements all the way on my commute.

✓ Just the other day, just in the morning when I go to work by the metro, I can see hundreds of advertisements all the way on my commute.

The phrase 'Just the day' is incorrect; it should be 'Just the other day' to indicate a recent time. This is a phrase correction rather than a grammar problem type listed, so no grammar problem type correction is applied here.

× there's this little scream in the elevator of my building that plays ads, and one of them was about repeating the name of the product over and over and over again, trying to brainwash you and it it shows me nothing about.

✓ there's this little screen in the elevator of my building that plays ads, and one of them was about repeating the name of the product over and over and over again, trying to brainwash you and it shows me nothing about it.

The word 'scream' is a typo and should be 'screen'. Also, the phrase 'it it shows me nothing about' is incorrect; it should be 'it shows me nothing about it' to complete the meaning. The correction addresses clarity and grammar.

× You can see that someone really dedicates her mind in the product.

✓ You can see that someone really dedicates their mind to the product.

The pronoun 'her' is used generically but 'their' is more appropriate for gender neutrality. Also, the preposition should be 'to' not 'in' after 'dedicate mind'. This corrects pronoun and preposition usage.

× That's the only way that they can move me into buying.

✓ That's the only way that they can move me to buy.

The phrase 'move me into buying' is awkward; the correct preposition is 'to' followed by the base verb 'buy'. This corrects preposition usage and verb form.

× That's the only way that they can persuade me into buying the product.

✓ That's the only way that they can persuade me to buy the product.

The verb 'persuade' is followed by 'to' plus base verb, not 'into' plus gerund. This corrects preposition usage.