Advertisement— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Ответ должен быть более структурированным и естественным. Избегайте повторений и лишних слов, используйте связующие слова для логичности. Например, начните с прямого ответа, затем добавьте детали с использованием связок.

예시: I don't recall any advertisements that impressed me as a child. However, one shampoo commercial stayed in my memory because it featured a model with very shiny, healthy hair, which looked very attractive.

제안: Ответ следует сделать более ясным и связным, избегая грамматических ошибок и повторов. Используйте связующие слова для плавности и конкретизируйте детали.

예시: I don't often use trains, but I usually travel by bus. I have noticed that there aren't many advertisements at bus stations or inside buses, although sometimes a few can be seen.

제안: Ответ должен быть более естественным и грамматически правильным. Используйте связки для логичности и избегайте тавтологии.

예시: Generally, I don't like advertisements and I don't know many people who do. However, if an advertisement is really interesting and spectacular, I might enjoy it. Usually, though, ads disturb me and distract me from what I'm doing.

제안: Ответ должен быть более грамматически правильным и связным. Используйте подходящие слова и выражения, чтобы чётко выразить свои мысли.

예시: I like creative advertisements that are not cliché and can really catch attention. I prefer ads featuring famous celebrities and interesting interpretations of the product, rather than just showing the item and a slogan.

제안: Ответ должен быть более чётким и грамматически правильным. Используйте связующие слова для логичности и избегайте лишних звуков и слов-паразитов.

예시: Yes, unfortunately, I often see advertisements when I use my phone or tablet. However, it depends on the app; if I have a subscription, there are no ads while using that app.

× I don't remember any advertisements from my childhood that made me impressed, but there is an advertisement that stuck on my memory.

✓ I don't remember any advertisements from my childhood that impressed me, but there is an advertisement that stuck in my memory.

The phrase 'made me impressed' is incorrect because 'impressed' is an adjective here, and 'made me impressed' is awkward. Instead, use the verb 'impressed' directly with the object 'me'. Also, the correct preposition is 'stuck in my memory', not 'stuck on my memory'.

× Uh, it was about shampoo commercial.

✓ Uh, it was about a shampoo commercial.

The sentence is missing the indefinite article 'a' before 'shampoo commercial'. Also, 'about shampoo commercial' is incorrect; it should be 'about a shampoo commercial'.

× There was a model models here, uh, and his hair was very shiny and beautiful and healthy too.

✓ There was a model here, uh, and his hair was very shiny, beautiful, and healthy too.

The phrase 'a model models' is incorrect because 'a model' is singular and 'models' is plural. The correct form is 'a model'. Also, commas are needed to separate adjectives in a list.

× I don't usually use a train as a main transport, but usually I go by bus and I can notice that there is not much advertisements that was before in a bus station or in the main bus in general, but if there is some, they can see some.

✓ I don't usually use the train as main transport, but usually I go by bus and I notice that there are not many advertisements that were before in a bus station or on the main bus in general, but if there are some, they can be seen.

'Advertisements' is plural, so 'is not much advertisements' is incorrect; it should be 'are not many advertisements'. Also, 'was before' should be 'were before' to agree with plural 'advertisements'. Prepositions 'in a bus station' and 'in the main bus' should be 'at a bus station' and 'on the main bus'.

× I don't like advertisements and I don't know any people who really likes it.

✓ I don't like advertisements and I don't know anyone who really likes them.

'Any people' is better replaced with 'anyone' for singular reference. 'Likes it' is incorrect because 'advertisements' is plural, so the pronoun should be 'them'.

× But if an advertisement is really interesting and spectacular it, I may like it, but usually it disturbs me and distract me from the main thing.

✓ But if an advertisement is really interesting and spectacular, I may like it, but usually it disturbs me and distracts me from the main thing.

The word 'spectacular it' is incorrect; 'it' should be removed. Also, 'distract me' should be 'distracts me' to agree with singular subject 'it'. A comma is needed after 'spectacular' to separate clauses.

× I like creative advertising that not cliche, that really can stop memory to can impress someone, not just like an item and a slogan.

✓ I like creative advertising that is not cliché, that can really stick in memory and impress someone, not just like an item and a slogan.

'Not cliche' needs the verb 'is' to be grammatically correct. 'Stop memory to can impress' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'stick in memory and impress'. Also, 'cliché' should have an accent and be used as an adjective.

× No, I like when I can see a person that I know like famous celebrity and interesting interpretation of item.

✓ No, I like when I can see a person that I know, like a famous celebrity, and an interesting interpretation of an item.

Missing articles 'a' before 'famous celebrity' and 'an' before 'interesting interpretation'. Also, commas are needed to separate clauses and items in a list.

× Yes, unfortunately I frequently see advertisements when I'm on phone or on a tablet.

✓ Yes, unfortunately I frequently see advertisements when I'm on my phone or on a tablet.

The phrase 'on phone' is missing the possessive pronoun 'my'. It should be 'on my phone'.

× But it also depends on what ad app I use, because when I have uh subscription or parti in a particular uh app, there is no ads in the app when you use subscription.

✓ But it also depends on what ad app I use, because when I have a subscription or participate in a particular app, there are no ads in the app when you use a subscription.

'Uh subscription or parti' is unclear; 'subscription' needs the article 'a'. 'Parti' seems to be a mispronunciation of 'participate'. 'There is no ads' is incorrect; 'ads' is plural, so it should be 'there are no ads'. Also, 'when you use subscription' needs 'a' before 'subscription'.