Advertisement— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: คำตอบของคุณควรชัดเจนและเป็นธรรมชาติมากขึ้น ควรเริ่มด้วยประโยคที่ตอบตรงคำถามและตามด้วยรายละเอียดที่สนับสนุนโดยใช้โครงสร้างประโยคที่ถูกต้องและคำเชื่อมเพื่อความลื่นไหล

예시: When I was a child, the advertisements that impressed me the most were those shown on television after school. They were colorful and catchy, which made them memorable.

제안: ควรตอบคำถามอย่างตรงประเด็นและใช้คำศัพท์ที่ถูกต้อง เช่น 'trains' แทน 'trends' และใช้ประโยคที่สมบูรณ์พร้อมคำเชื่อมเพื่อให้คำตอบมีความชัดเจนและเป็นธรรมชาติ

예시: No, I don't see many advertisements on trains or other public transport because I usually fly business class, where there are fewer ads.

제안: คำตอบควรมีความชัดเจนและสมบูรณ์ ควรหลีกเลี่ยงคำพูดที่ไม่สมบูรณ์และใช้ประโยคที่สื่อความหมายได้ชัดเจน

예시: Yes, I like advertisements because they can be interesting and informative.

제안: ควรใช้โครงสร้างประโยคที่ถูกต้องและคำศัพท์ที่เหมาะสม รวมถึงใช้คำเชื่อมเพื่อให้คำตอบสมบูรณ์และชัดเจน

예시: I like advertisements on TV shows that promote products such as cosmetics or fast food because they are easy to understand.

제안: ควรใช้ประโยคที่ถูกต้องและคำเชื่อมเพื่อให้คำตอบมีความลื่นไหลและชัดเจนมากขึ้น รวมถึงใช้คำศัพท์ที่เหมาะสมกับบริบท

예시: Yes, nowadays advertisements automatically pop up on my phone when I scroll through social media, so I don't need to look for them myself.

× Yet when I was younger, the advertisement that impressed me on television because that period when finished school, every advertisement will run on television.

✓ When I was younger, the advertisements impressed me on television because at that period, after finishing school, every advertisement would run on television.

The original sentence has tense inconsistency and awkward phrasing. 'Will run' should be 'would run' to match the past context. Also, 'that period when finished school' is unclear and should be rephrased to 'at that period, after finishing school' for clarity and correct tense usage.

× Yet when I was younger, the advertisement that impressed me on television because that period when finished school, every advertisement will run on television.

✓ When I was younger, the advertisements impressed me on television because at that period, after finishing school, every advertisement would run on television.

The word 'advertisement' should be plural 'advertisements' to agree with the context of multiple ads running on television.

× I would say no, I didn't really see advertising on trends or auto transport because of when I take a airplane, I really book, uh, business class. So I rally to see.

✓ I would say no, I didn't really see advertising on trains or other transport because when I take an airplane, I usually book business class. So I rarely see it.

'Trends' should be 'trains'. 'Auto transport' is better expressed as 'other transport'. 'Take a airplane' should be 'take an airplane' due to vowel sound. 'Really book' should be 'usually book' for clarity. 'Rally to see' should be 'rarely see'. Prepositions and articles are corrected for proper usage.

× I would say no, I didn't really see advertising on trends or auto transport because of when I take a airplane, I really book, uh, business class. So I rally to see.

✓ I would say no, I didn't really see advertising on trains or other transport because when I take an airplane, I usually book business class. So I rarely see it.

The article 'a' before 'airplane' is incorrect; it should be 'an' because 'airplane' starts with a vowel sound.

× Yes, I like at white at at what I advertisement because is a.

✓ Yes, I like advertisements because they are interesting.

The original sentence is unclear and contains incorrect prepositions and incomplete thoughts. 'At white at at what I advertisement because is a' is nonsensical. The correction provides a clear, grammatically correct sentence that fits the context.

× Yes, I like at white at at what I advertisement because is a.

✓ Yes, I like advertisements because they are interesting.

The original sentence lacks proper pronouns and subject-verb agreement. 'They' is used to refer to 'advertisements' correctly.

× I like advertising on TV show that they are promote, uh, goods or product that such as, uh, cosmetic or S. Eat food.

✓ I like advertising on TV shows that promote goods or products such as cosmetics or ready-to-eat food.

'On TV show' should be 'on TV shows'. 'They are promote' should be 'that promote'. 'Product that such as' should be 'products such as'. 'S. Eat food' is corrected to 'ready-to-eat food'. Prepositions and article usage are corrected.

× I like advertising on TV show that they are promote, uh, goods or product that such as, uh, cosmetic or S. Eat food.

✓ I like advertising on TV shows that promote goods or products such as cosmetics or ready-to-eat food.

'TV show' should be plural 'TV shows' and 'product' should be plural 'products' to match the context.

× Yes, nowadays the advertising really automatically pop up on my phone when I scrolling on social media Is no, not necessary to find advertising by myself is automatically served on your screen.

✓ Yes, nowadays advertisements automatically pop up on my phone when I scroll on social media. It is not necessary to find advertisements by myself; they are automatically served on the screen.

'Advertising' should be plural 'advertisements'. 'Pop up' should be 'pop up' (present tense plural). 'I scrolling' should be 'I scroll'. 'Is no' should be 'It is not'. Sentence structure is improved for clarity.