Advertisement— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 답변이 자연스럽고 효과적이지만, 'prayerful'이라는 단어 사용이 문맥에 맞지 않아 의미 전달에 혼란을 줄 수 있습니다. 또한, 문장 연결이 조금 더 명확하면 좋겠습니다. 예를 들어, 'because it was both catchy and memorable'와 같이 단어 선택을 개선하고, 연결어를 사용해 문장 간 논리적 흐름을 강화하세요.

예시: Yes, I still remember a TV commercial for a chocolate brand that had a catchy jingle. Because it was both catchy and memorable, I couldn't resist singing along whenever it came on. As a result, it influenced me to ask my parents to buy the product. Looking back, I think this advertisement impressed me because it combined music and fun effectively.

제안: 답변이 전반적으로 자연스럽고 구체적이지만, 'distress screens'와 'full body wipes'라는 표현이 부적절하거나 오해를 일으킬 수 있습니다. 정확한 단어 선택과 문장 연결어 사용으로 명확성을 높이세요.

예시: Absolutely. In big cities, it's almost impossible to ignore advertisements on public transport. For example, subways and buses are often covered with posters, digital screens, or even full-body wraps promoting everything from new movies to mobile apps. Although sometimes I find it overwhelming, I think it's quite effective because commuters have plenty of time to notice and absorb these ads.

제안: 답변이 의도를 전달하지만 문법적 오류와 어색한 표현이 있습니다. 예를 들어, 'they have mixed feelings' 대신 'I have mixed feelings about them'이 자연스럽습니다. 또한, 문장 구조를 명확히 하고 연결어를 사용해 흐름을 개선하세요.

예시: To be honest, I have mixed feelings about advertisements. On one hand, they can be really creative and entertaining, almost like short films. On the other hand, there are too many repetitive or exaggerated ads that feel intrusive. Therefore, while I appreciate the artistic side of advertising, I don't enjoy being bombarded with it everywhere.

제안: 답변이 전반적으로 좋으나, 첫 문장의 문법 오류('have a story will have')를 수정하고, 문장 간 연결어를 추가해 자연스러운 흐름을 만드세요.

예시: I prefer advertisements that tell a story and have a touch of humor rather than just pushing a product. For example, commercials focusing on emotions like family, bonds, or friendship usually stay in my memory much longer. Additionally, I like ads that are informative, especially if they introduce me to something genuinely useful.

제안: 답변에 문법적 오류와 어색한 표현이 많아 의미 전달이 어렵습니다. 예를 들어, 'targeted as power based on my recent searches' 대신 'targeted ads based on my recent searches'가 적절합니다. 문장을 명확히 하고 구체적인 예시를 자연스럽게 연결하세요.

예시: Yes, I see advertisements almost all the time when I use social media or browse the Internet. These ads are often targeted based on my recent searches. For example, if I recently looked at clothes online, I suddenly see ads for fashion brands. Although it can be a bit annoying, sometimes it's useful because it introduces me to products I didn't know about.

× I want you to do the correction under following 5 steps:

✓ I want you to do the correction under the following 5 steps:

'following' is a determiner here and should be preceded by the definite article 'the' to specify the particular steps. In English, 'the following' is the correct phrase to introduce a list or sequence.

× To be honest, they have mixed feelings.

✓ To be honest, I have mixed feelings.

The pronoun 'they' incorrectly refers to 'advertisements' but the speaker is expressing their own feelings, so the correct pronoun is 'I'. This is a pronoun reference error.

× On one hand just as a really creative and entertaining, almost like short films.

✓ On one hand, they are really creative and entertaining, almost like short films.

The original sentence lacks a subject and verb, making it a fragment. Adding 'they are' completes the sentence structure and clarifies the subject.

× So while I appreciate to the artistic side of advertising, I don't enjoy being bombarded with it everywhere.

✓ So while I appreciate the artistic side of advertising, I don't enjoy being bombarded with it everywhere.

The verb 'appreciate' is not followed by the preposition 'to'. The correct form is 'appreciate the artistic side', without 'to'.

× I prefer advertisements that have a story will have a touch of humor rather than just pushing a product.

✓ I prefer advertisements that have a story and a touch of humor rather than just pushing a product.

The original sentence incorrectly combines two clauses without a conjunction, causing confusion. Adding 'and' properly connects the ideas.

× Yes, almost all the time whenever I use social media or browse the Internet targeted as power based on my recent searches.

✓ Yes, almost all the time whenever I use social media or browse the Internet, I am targeted based on my recent searches.

The phrase 'targeted as power' is incorrect and unclear. The correct expression is 'I am targeted based on my recent searches', which properly uses the passive voice and prepositions.

× For example, if I look at close online, I suddenly see a interest as fashion brands.

✓ For example, if I look at clothes online, I suddenly see an interest in fashion brands.

The original sentence has multiple errors: 'look at close' should be 'look at clothes'; 'a interest' should be 'an interest'; and 'as fashion brands' should be 'in fashion brands'. These corrections fix article usage and prepositions.

× It can be a bit annoying, but sometimes it's useful because it introduced me to products I didn't know about.

✓ It can be a bit annoying, but sometimes it's useful because it introduces me to products I didn't know about.

The verb 'introduced' is in past tense, but the context requires present tense 'introduces' to indicate a general or ongoing effect.