Advertisement— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不够清晰，建议简化句子结构，使用正确的时态和词汇，避免重复。可以先直接回答问题，然后用一两句具体描述广告内容。

예시: Yes, there was an advertisement that impressed me a lot when I was a child. It was for a medical product and showed a woman being chased by a tiger, and finally she found shelter in a storm.

제안: 回答中语法和表达不够准确，建议使用连贯的句子，避免重复，注意时态和单复数形式。可以先直接回答，然后用具体原因支持观点。

예시: Yes, I see many advertisements on trains and other public transport. This is because many people use public transportation every day, so companies advertise there to reach a large audience.

제안: 回答不够流畅，表达重复且结构混乱。建议先明确表达喜欢与否，再用具体例子支持观点，注意语法和词汇的准确使用。

예시: It depends on the type of advertisements. For example, I like ads about new clothing and watch brands, so I often watch these ads on my phone or websites.

제안: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不清晰，建议简化句子，明确表达喜欢的广告类型和原因，避免使用不恰当的词汇。

예시: I like advertisements for new clothing and watch brands because I enjoy buying clothes. Shopping helps me relax and feel happy.

제안: 回答中语法和表达不够准确，建议简洁明了地回答问题，并用具体细节支持观点，避免冗长和重复。

예시: Yes, I often see advertisements on my phone and computer because technology has advanced rapidly. Ads are very common and appear everywhere on these devices.

× Yes, there is an advertisement impressed me a lot.

✓ Yes, there is an advertisement that impressed me a lot.

这里缺少关系代词"that"，导致句子结构不完整。应加上"that"引导定语从句，修饰前面的"advertisement"。

× That is a medical product and the screen is a tiger and a woman which is which is chased, chased by the tiger and finally they find a storm to stay there.

✓ That is a medical product and the screen shows a tiger and a woman who is chased by the tiger, and finally they find a storm to stay there.

"which is chased"用于指代人时不合适，应使用"who is chased"。另外，句子结构混乱，需调整使表达更清晰。

× Yes, there are many advertisement on trains and other transport because maybe the company because every day the public transportation have many people.

✓ Yes, there are many advertisements on trains and other transport because maybe the company, because every day the public transportation has many people.

"advertisement"应为复数形式"advertisements"，因为前面用了"many"。"public transportation"作为不可数名词，谓语动词应使用单数"has"。

× So if they have advertisement, people can saw it when they're when they go to school.

✓ So if they have advertisements, people can see it when they go to school.

"can saw"时态错误，情态动词"can"后应接动词原形"see"。另外，"advertisement"应为复数"advertisements"。

× Well it's depends on what kind of advertisements.

✓ Well, it depends on what kind of advertisements.

"it's depends"中"it's"是不正确的，应为"it depends"，因为"depends"是动词，主语是"it"。

× For example, I like the brand, I like the new brands, about the clothes, the watch.

✓ For example, I like brands, especially new brands, about clothes and watches.

"the brand"和"the new brands"用法不当，且"the clothes, the watch"应改为复数形式"clothes and watches"，更符合习惯表达。

× So I I always watch the advertisement and the website on my phone.

✓ So I always watch advertisements and websites on my phone.

"watch"通常用于观看视频或电视节目，广告和网站更适合用"see"或"look at"。此外，"advertisement"和"website"应使用复数形式。

× I like the new brand about the clothes and the watch because I'm I really like buy the clothes whatever it looks like it melt.

✓ I like new brands about clothes and watches because I really like buying clothes no matter how they look; they make me feel relaxed.

"the new brand about the clothes and the watch"表达不自然，应去掉定冠词并使用复数。"I'm I really like buy"语法错误，应为"I really like buying"。"whatever it looks like it melt"表达不清，应改为"no matter how they look; they make me feel relaxed"。

× It's make me feel relaxing and buying things is a way to relax myself.

✓ It makes me feel relaxed, and buying things is a way to relax myself.

"It's make"主谓不一致，应为"It makes"。"relaxing"是现在分词，形容词应为"relaxed"。

× Yes, I often see the advertisement when my phone and computer with the rapidly with the advantage about the technology.

✓ Yes, I often see advertisements on my phone and computer because of the rapid development of technology.

"see the advertisement when my phone and computer with the rapidly with the advantage about the technology"结构混乱，缺少介词和连词。应改为"see advertisements on my phone and computer because of the rapid development of technology"。

× I think advertisement in my phone or computer is very common, I can see it everywhere.

✓ I think advertisements on my phone or computer are very common; I can see them everywhere.

"advertisement"应为复数"advertisements"，谓语动词也应改为复数"are"。代词"it"应改为复数"them"，与前文复数保持一致。