Advertisement— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer lacks clarity and coherence. Try to respond directly to the question with a clear topic sentence, then add specific supporting details using correct grammar and linking words. Avoid redundancy and ensure your sentences are complete and natural.

예시: Yes, one advertisement that impressed me as a child was for Kinder chocolate. I remember it looked very sweet and appealing, which made me want to try it.

제안: Your answer does not directly address the question and lacks coherence. Begin with a clear topic sentence answering the question, then provide specific examples with linking words to make your response logical and natural.

예시: Yes, I often see many advertisements on trains and other transport. For example, when I flew to Jeju Island at age 11, I noticed numerous movie advertisements inside the airplane.

제안: Your answer is somewhat clear but contains grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Use correct grammar and more precise vocabulary. Start with a clear topic sentence, then explain your opinion with specific reasons and linking words.

예시: I like some advertisements, especially the fun ones because they attract people's attention. However, I dislike others that can have a negative impact, especially on children.

제안: Your answer is vague and lacks a clear topic sentence. Provide a direct answer to the question, then add specific details with linking words to make your response coherent and natural. Also, improve sentence structure and vocabulary.

예시: I like advertisements that are entertaining and memorable. For instance, there is a vitamin advertisement featuring John Hanu, a famous and funny Korean entertainer, which I find very enjoyable.

× To be honest, I don't remember that advertisement that I saw when I was young about especially I saw some chocolate advertisements.

✓ To be honest, I don't remember that advertisement I saw when I was young, but I especially remember some chocolate advertisements.

The original sentence is confusing and lacks proper structure. The phrase 'about especially I saw some chocolate advertisements' is awkward and unclear. The correction separates the ideas clearly and uses proper conjunctions to improve clarity.

× It is Kinder chocolate.

✓ It was Kinder chocolate.

The question refers to an advertisement from the past ('when you were a child'), so the verb tense should be past ('was') instead of present ('is').

× Maybe it's really it's it looks looked like really sweet.

✓ Maybe it really looked really sweet.

The original sentence has redundant and mixed verb forms ('it's', 'it looks', 'looked'). Since the advertisement is in the past, 'looked' is appropriate. The correction removes redundancy and clarifies the sentence.

× And when I was 11 years old, I I traveled Jeju Island taking an airplane.

✓ When I was 11 years old, I traveled to Jeju Island by airplane.

The original sentence has repetition ('I I') and awkward phrasing ('traveled Jeju Island taking an airplane'). The correction removes repetition and uses the correct preposition 'to' with 'traveled' and 'by' with 'airplane' for clarity.

× And in airplane I saw a lot of advertising related to movies.

✓ And in the airplane, I saw a lot of advertising related to movies.

The noun 'airplane' requires the definite article 'the' when referring to a specific airplane. Adding 'the' makes the sentence grammatically correct.

× It depends on the what kind of advertisements.

✓ It depends on what kind of advertisements.

The phrase 'the what kind of' is incorrect. The article 'the' should be removed to form the correct phrase 'depends on what kind of'.

× Some advertisements are very fun, so I feel all that advertisement really good for attracts people.

✓ Some advertisements are very fun, so I feel all those advertisements are really good at attracting people.

'All that advertisement' is incorrect; it should be 'all those advertisements' to match plural form. Also, 'for attracts' is incorrect; the correct form is 'attracting' after 'good at'.

× But other advertisements really is all really bad to people especially children so.

✓ But other advertisements are really bad for people, especially children.

The sentence has subject-verb agreement errors ('advertisements is') and awkward phrasing ('really is all really bad to people'). The correction fixes the verb agreement and uses 'bad for people' which is the correct preposition.

× Maybe. I remember very fantastic advertising, that is vitamin advertisement.

✓ Maybe. I remember a very fantastic advertisement, which is a vitamin advertisement.

The original sentence is awkward and lacks articles. 'Advertising' should be 'advertisement' as a countable noun here, and the relative clause is better introduced with 'which is'.

× Its main character is a famous entertainment in Korean, John Hanu.

✓ Its main character is a famous entertainer in Korea, John Hanu.

'Entertainment' is incorrect here; the correct noun is 'entertainer' to refer to a person. Also, 'in Korean' should be 'in Korea' to refer to the country.

× He's a very fun person in the world.

✓ He's a very funny person in the world.

'Fun' is used to describe enjoyable activities, while 'funny' describes a person who makes others laugh. The correct adjective here is 'funny'.