Advertisement— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答は質問に直接答えていますが、文法の誤りや不自然な表現が見られます。例えば、「advertisements by alcoholic beverages company」は「advertisements from alcoholic beverage companies」とする方が自然です。また、内容がやや曖昧で具体性に欠けています。より具体的な詳細や感情を加えると良いでしょう。

예시: When I was a child, I was impressed by advertisements from Japanese alcoholic beverage companies. They often showed people enjoying sake and beer, which made these drinks seem very appealing to me.

제안: 回答は質問に答えていますが、文法の誤りや不自然な表現があります。例えば、「the amount has decreased in these ten years」は「the amount has decreased over the past ten years」とすると自然です。また、理由の説明において接続詞を使い、文をつなげるとより論理的になります。

예시: Yes, I sometimes see advertisements on trains, but their number has decreased over the past ten years because more ads are now shown on websites and social media platforms.

제안: 回答はやや長く、文法的な誤りや不自然な表現が多いです。例えば、「which makes inspires me a lot of ideas about illustration」は不自然で、「which inspires me with many ideas about illustration」とすると良いでしょう。また、内容が少し曖昧なので、具体的な例を加えると効果的です。

예시: I like some advertisements because they use graphs, images, and videos effectively to explain products. For example, a well-designed ad can inspire me with new ideas for illustration.

제안: 回答は明確で内容も具体的ですが、「For that」という表現は不自然です。「So that」や「which helps me to」などの接続詞を使うと自然になります。また、もう少し詳細な説明を加えると良いでしょう。

예시: I prefer watching travel advertisements because they motivate me to work hard so that I can save money and visit beautiful tourist destinations.

× I liked to watch the advertisements by alcoholic beverages company, especially in Japan.

✓ I liked to watch the advertisements by alcoholic beverage companies, especially in Japan.

'Alcoholic beverages company' should be plural 'alcoholic beverage companies' because it refers to multiple companies producing alcoholic beverages. Also, 'beverages' is plural, so 'beverage' as an adjective should be singular.

× I remember that it seems that alcoholic beverages such as sake or beer is very delicious.

✓ I remember that it seemed that alcoholic beverages such as sake or beer were very delicious.

The subject 'alcoholic beverages' is plural, so the verb should be 'were' not 'is'. Also, the tense should be past 'seemed' to match 'I remember' referring to the past.

× Yes, I sometimes see the advertisements, especially in trains, but it seems that the amount has decreased in these ten years.

✓ Yes, I sometimes see advertisements, especially in trains, but it seems that the number has decreased in the past ten years.

'Advertisements' is plural and does not need 'the'. 'Amount' is used for uncountable nouns; for countable 'advertisements', use 'number'. Also, 'these ten years' is unnatural; 'the past ten years' is better.

× That's mainly because advertisements are on the website or social media has increased.

✓ That's mainly because advertisements on websites or social media have increased.

The sentence structure is incorrect. 'Advertisements are on the website or social media has increased' mixes plural and singular verbs. Correct structure is 'advertisements on websites or social media have increased'.

× I prefer advertisements because I can understand how to illustrate good items well by using graphs, images and videos, which makes inspires me a lot of ideas about illustration.

✓ I prefer advertisements because I can understand how to illustrate good items well by using graphs, images, and videos, which inspires me with a lot of ideas about illustration.

'Makes inspires me' is incorrect; it should be 'inspires me'. Also, 'a lot of ideas' is better preceded by 'with' to indicate what is inspired. Commas are added for clarity.

× I prefer watching traveling advertisements because it motivates me to work hard.

✓ I prefer watching travel advertisements because they motivate me to work hard.

'Traveling advertisements' is unnatural; 'travel advertisements' is the correct form. Also, 'it motivates' should be 'they motivate' to agree with plural 'advertisements'.

× For that, I can save money and go to beautiful tourist destinations.

✓ Because of that, I can save money and go to beautiful tourist destinations.

'For that' is not the correct phrase to express cause and effect here. 'Because of that' is appropriate to indicate the reason.