Computers— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is clear but slightly repetitive and could be more concise. Try to avoid redundancy by combining similar ideas and use linking words to improve flow. Also, include more specific examples of the types of work or studies you do on the computer.

예시: I use my computer mainly for important work and studies, such as writing reports and researching topics. Therefore, I prefer to buy new computers directly from the store to ensure they run smoothly without any issues.

제안: Good answer with clear structure and relevant details. To improve, try to use more varied vocabulary and linking words to connect your ideas more smoothly.

예시: I first used my own laptop at the age of 14 when I became the chief editor of my school newspaper. This laptop was essential for managing articles and ensuring everything ran smoothly, which helped me fulfill my responsibilities more efficiently.

제안: Your answer has good ideas but contains some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Try to use complete sentences and linking words to make your answer more coherent. Also, avoid repeating the same idea and be more specific about how the computer helps you.

예시: Without a computer, my life would be much more complicated because I wouldn't be able to access information quickly. Nowadays, I rely on my computer for work and studies, which makes many tasks easier and more efficient.

제안: Your answer addresses the question but could be clearer and more concise. Pay attention to grammar and sentence structure, and use linking words to connect your ideas. Also, specify what you mean by 'simple tasks' to add detail.

예시: It would be difficult for me to use a computer if it were completely damaged or not operating properly. Although I don't require a brand new computer, it needs to run well enough for me to complete basic tasks like browsing the internet or writing documents.

× Like computer allows me to do that and access it.

✓ Like a computer allows me to do that and access it.

The sentence is missing the indefinite article 'a' before 'computer'. In English, singular countable nouns require an article or determiner. Adding 'a' makes the sentence grammatically correct.

× And nowadays for I use computer for my work and studies and it actually makes my life easier in every aspect.

✓ And nowadays I use a computer for my work and studies and it actually makes my life easier in every aspect.

The phrase 'for I use computer' is incorrect. The preposition 'for' is unnecessary here and should be removed. Also, 'computer' is a singular countable noun and requires the article 'a'. The corrected sentence is clearer and grammatically correct.

× I would say if computer is totally damaged and it's not operating properly, I wouldn't be able to use it or it would be difficult for me to use it.

✓ I would say if the computer is totally damaged and it's not operating properly, I wouldn't be able to use it or it would be difficult for me to use it.

The singular countable noun 'computer' requires the definite article 'the' when referring to a specific computer. Adding 'the' clarifies the meaning and corrects the grammar.

× I'm not very picky when it comes to computer to be a brand new, but I needed to run at least good in order to me to complete like simple tasks.

✓ I'm not very picky when it comes to computers being brand new, but I need it to run at least well in order for me to complete simple tasks.

Several issues here: 'computer' should be plural 'computers' to match the general statement; 'to be a brand new' is incorrect, it should be 'being brand new'; 'needed' should be present tense 'need' to match the context; 'good' should be 'well' as an adverb modifying 'run'; 'in order to me' should be 'in order for me'; 'like simple tasks' should be 'simple tasks' without 'like'. These corrections improve grammar and clarity.