Computers— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答较自然且内容相关，但可以更简洁并使用更多连接词使表达更流畅。建议减少重复，使用连接词如“because”或“so”来连接句子。

예시: I use a computer mainly when tasks are difficult to do on a phone, such as editing files and writing essays, because the larger screen makes these activities easier. Additionally, I watch online lessons on my computer since the bigger display enhances my learning experience.

제안: 回答结构清晰，内容具体，但可以使用连接词如“and”或“which”来使句子更连贯。建议适当丰富词汇表达感受。

예시: I first used a computer when I was seven years old, mainly to play simple games and paint on Microsoft Paint, which I found very enjoyable and relaxing.

제안: 回答内容具体且结构合理，但可以使用更多连接词如“because”或“so”来增强逻辑性。建议增加具体例子说明依赖电脑的方面。

예시: Without a computer, my life would be less efficient because I rely on it for various tasks such as working, studying, and socializing, so managing these activities would become more challenging.

제안: 回答表达有些口语化且句子结构不够连贯。建议使用更正式的表达，避免重复，并用连接词如“when”或“if”连接条件。

예시: It is difficult to use a computer when there is no Wi-Fi or when the battery is low and no charger is available, which can be quite frustrating.

× Using a computer can be difficult where you have no Wi-Fi and where and when the power of the computer is really low without charger around.

✓ Using a computer can be difficult where you have no Wi-Fi and when the power of the computer is really low without a charger around.

句中“where and when”重复且不符合习惯表达，应去掉“where”只保留“when”。此外，“without charger around”缺少冠词，应为“without a charger around”。

× It's just like the world decide to test you how much frustration you can handle.

✓ It's just like the world decides to test how much frustration you can handle.

主语是单数“the world”，谓语动词应使用第三人称单数形式“decides”。此外，“test you how much frustration you can handle”结构不正确，应改为“test how much frustration you can handle”，去掉多余的“you”。