Computers— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答は質問に直接答えていますが、文法の誤りや冗長な表現が見られます。より自然で効果的な英語表現を使い、文を簡潔にまとめることが必要です。例えば、"I have to use a computer for my work as a scientific writer because I write several articles. I especially recommend a laptop since I often go out to conduct interviews and write articles."のようにすると良いでしょう。

예시: I use a computer mainly for my work as a scientific writer because I need to write several articles. I prefer using a laptop since I often go outside to conduct interviews and write on the go.

제안: 回答は内容が伝わりますが、文法の誤りや不自然な表現が多いです。より正確で自然な表現を心がけ、具体的な詳細を整理して述べると良いでしょう。例えば、"I first used a computer when I was 10 years old. My father bought me a Windows 98 PC, and I used it to play games like chess and card games, which helped improve my memory."のように。

예시: I first used a computer when I was 10 years old. My father bought me a Windows 98 computer, and I often played games like chess and card games on it, which helped improve my memory.

제안: 回答は意味が伝わりにくく、文法や語彙の誤りが多いです。より明確で自然な表現を使い、具体的な理由や影響を述べることが重要です。例えば、"It is hard to imagine life without a computer because I am very dependent on computers and smartphones for communication and entertainment."のように表現すると良いでしょう。

예시: It is hard to imagine life without a computer because I rely on computers and smartphones for communication and entertainment every day.

제안: 回答は意味が不明瞭で、文法や語彙の誤りが多いです。質問に直接答え、理由を明確に述べることが必要です。例えば、"It is difficult for me to use a computer when I am sick because I cannot concentrate well. In such cases, I prefer to rest and avoid using computers."のように表現すると良いでしょう。

예시: It is difficult for me to use a computer when I am sick because I cannot concentrate well. Therefore, I usually take a break from using computers until I feel better.

× I have to use the computer on my work because I am a scientific writer and have to write several articles by using a computer.

✓ I have to use the computer at my work because I am a scientific writer and have to write several articles by using a computer.

The preposition 'on' is incorrectly used with 'work'. The correct preposition to indicate location or place of employment is 'at'. Therefore, 'on my work' should be corrected to 'at my work'. This improves the naturalness and correctness of the sentence.

× And especially I always recommend a laptop because I have to go out and conduct interviews and write some articles outside.

✓ Especially, I always recommend a laptop because I have to go out, conduct interviews, and write some articles outside.

The phrase 'And especially' is awkward and unnecessary. Starting the sentence with 'Especially' is more natural. Also, the conjunctions should be used properly to list activities. This correction improves sentence flow and clarity.

× The first time I used the computer was when I was 10 years old.

✓ The first time I used a computer was when I was 10 years old.

The article 'the' before 'computer' is unnecessary here because it refers to the first experience with any computer, not a specific one. Using 'a computer' is more appropriate in this context.

× At that time my father bought me a Windows 99 for me and I always used it for playing such as chess or card game like a trump which makes my memory better.

✓ At that time, my father bought me a Windows 99 computer, and I always used it for playing games such as chess or card games like trump, which improved my memory.

The phrase 'bought me a Windows 99 for me' is redundant; 'for me' is unnecessary. Also, 'card game like a trump' is awkward; it should be 'card games like trump'. The verb tense 'makes' should be past tense 'improved' to match the past context. These corrections improve clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× It's very difficult to imagine the life without a computer because I always addicted by computers, including smart phones, because we have to communicate what is using such tools and make some playing on the screen.

✓ It's very difficult to imagine life without a computer because I am always addicted to computers, including smartphones, since we have to communicate using such tools and play games on the screen.

The phrase 'I always addicted by computers' is incorrect; it should be 'I am always addicted to computers'. 'Smart phones' should be one word 'smartphones'. 'Because we have to communicate what is using such tools' is unclear and corrected to 'since we have to communicate using such tools'. 'Make some playing' is incorrect; 'play games' is appropriate. These corrections fix pronoun and verb usage and improve sentence clarity.

× When I get sick, it is a very difficult difficulty for me to use computer well because we need a concentration on the focus when I do something on computers.

✓ When I get sick, it is very difficult for me to use the computer well because I need concentration and focus when I do something on computers.

The phrase 'a very difficult difficulty' is redundant; 'very difficult' suffices. 'Use computer well' needs the definite article 'the computer'. 'We need a concentration on the focus' is incorrect; it should be 'I need concentration and focus'. These corrections improve grammatical correctness and clarity.

× So I think we have to get a list when I'm not going to go.

✓ So I think I have to rest when I'm not feeling well.

The original sentence is unclear and contains incorrect pronoun and phrase usage. 'Get a list' is likely a mistranslation or error; 'rest' fits the context better. 'When I'm not going to go' is awkward; 'when I'm not feeling well' is clearer. These corrections improve meaning and grammatical accuracy.