Computers— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答中专业名称表达不清晰，且部分词汇使用不准确，影响表达的自然性和有效性。建议明确专业名称，使用准确的动词，并避免语法错误，使回答更流畅自然。

예시: As a student majoring in Drama, Cinema, Television, and Literature, I often use a computer to edit videos after shooting. For example, I add effects and finalize the footage using editing software.

제안: 回答语法混乱，表达不清晰，缺乏连贯性。建议理清时间顺序，使用正确的时态和句子结构，避免重复和无意义的词汇，使回答更自然流畅。

예시: I started using a computer when I was very young. I remember one afternoon when I came home, my mom told me she had bought a computer to help me with my studies.

제안: 回答结构较好，但表达略显重复，且专业名称仍不够准确。建议简化表达，避免重复，并准确描述专业名称，使回答更简洁有效。

예시: Without a computer, my life would be very difficult because my major in Drama, Cinema, Television, and Literature requires me to complete many tasks using a computer.

제안: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，且逻辑连接词使用不当。建议使用正确的句式和连接词，表达更连贯，避免重复词汇。

예시: It would be difficult for me to use a computer if there is no Wi-Fi because most applications require an internet connection, and I need to connect with others online.

× Well, actually, as a student majoring Jamal Cinnamon Television and literature, it is very important for us to learn how to use the computer.

✓ Well, actually, as a student majoring in Jamal Cinnamon Television and Literature, it is very important for us to learn how to use the computer.

这里缺少介词'in'，表示“主修于某专业”，正确用法是'majoring in'。建议记住动词'major'后面通常接介词'in'。

× For example, after shooting some videos, we have to use the computer to add, dated and finally finished this task.

✓ For example, after shooting some videos, we have to use the computer to edit, date, and finally finish this task.

原句中'add, dated and finally finished'用词不当，应该用动词原形'edit, date, and finish'来表达动作。建议注意动词形式的一致性。

× I still remember it was a common afternoon after I come back to the whole my phone computer just to put on my table and my mom told me she bought it for me to help me improve my study.

✓ I still remember it was a common afternoon after I came back home; my phone and computer were just put on my table, and my mom told me she bought them for me to help me improve my studies.

这里动词时态错误，'come back'应为过去式'came back'；'put'应改为被动语态'were put'；'study'应为复数形式'studies'。建议注意时态一致和名词复数形式。

× I still remember it was a common afternoon after I come back to the whole my phone computer just to put on my table and my mom told me she bought it for me to help me improve my study.

✓ I still remember it was a common afternoon after I came back home; my phone and computer were just put on my table, and my mom told me she bought them for me to help me improve my studies.

'come back to the whole'表达不正确，应为'came back home'。建议学习常用短语'come back home'。

× my mom told me she bought it for me to help me improve my study.

✓ my mom told me she bought them for me to help me improve my studies.

这里指代多个物品（phone和computer），应使用复数代词'them'，而不是单数'it'。建议注意代词与先行词的数一致。

× As I said, my major is called drama, cinema, television, the literature.

✓ As I said, my major is called drama, cinema, television, and literature.

'the literature'中不需要定冠词'the'，且缺少连接词'and'。建议注意列举时的连接词和冠词使用。

× Well actually if there is not to have a Wi-Fi, I will come to use the computer because nowadays almost all the apps need the Wi-Fi and we need to connect with others by network.

✓ Well actually, if there is no Wi-Fi, I will find it difficult to use the computer because nowadays almost all the apps need Wi-Fi and we need to connect with others through the network.

'if there is not to have a Wi-Fi'表达错误，应为'if there is no Wi-Fi'；'come to use'不合适，应改为'find it difficult to use'；'by network'应为'through the network'。建议学习正确的介词搭配和表达方式。

× So if we don't have Wi-Fi it it will be very difficult for me to use it.

✓ So if we don't have Wi-Fi, it will be very difficult for me to use the computer.

句中重复出现'it it'，且最后的'it'指代不明，改为明确指代'computer'。建议注意代词的重复和明确指代。