Art— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains several hesitations and errors, such as confusing 'drawing' with 'driving'. To improve, focus on clear and accurate vocabulary, avoid redundancy, and structure your answer with a clear topic sentence followed by supporting details using linking words.

예시: Yes, I like drawing, although I'm not very skilled at it yet. Sometimes I struggle to create good pictures, but I enjoy practicing and improving my skills.

제안: Your answer shows enthusiasm but has some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. To improve, use correct prepositions and clearer expressions, and connect your ideas smoothly with linking words.

예시: Yes, I love going to art galleries because I find it very enjoyable. Besides that, I like to see people's artwork and observe how artists express their imagination on paper.

제안: Your answer repeats ideas and has some unclear phrases. To improve, avoid repetition, use precise vocabulary, and organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details linked logically.

예시: Yes, I would like to learn more about art, especially about different styles and techniques. I find it fascinating to understand how artists create their work and express their ideas.

제안: Your answer is somewhat disorganized and contains grammatical errors. To improve, use past tense correctly, avoid unnecessary fillers, and structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details using linking words.

예시: Actually, I didn't have many opportunities to learn drawing when I was a child. We had art classes once a week, but the teacher only gave us paper to draw freely without teaching any techniques.

× Yes, I like driving, but I'm not good at, uh, driving pictures.

✓ Yes, I like drawing, but I'm not good at, uh, drawing pictures.

The student confused 'driving' with 'drawing'. The verb 'like' is correctly followed by the gerund form, but the word should be 'drawing' when referring to making pictures, not 'driving'.

× Actually, umm, I'm struggle to sometimes to do a good picture.

✓ Actually, umm, I sometimes struggle to do a good picture.

The phrase 'I'm struggle' is incorrect because 'struggle' is a verb and should not be used with 'am' in this way. The correct form is 'I struggle'. Also, 'sometimes' should be placed before the verb for natural word order.

× So I love drawing, but I mean in the meantime I'm not good at driving.

✓ So I love drawing, but I mean in the meantime I'm not good at drawing.

Again, 'driving' is incorrectly used instead of 'drawing'. The correct gerund form related to making pictures is 'drawing'.

× Uh, yes, I'd love to go to art gallery, art galleries, uh, I find it so a pleasure and I want to, beside this, I want to see the people's, uh, art and how artists grow their imagination in onto a paper.

✓ Uh, yes, I'd love to go to an art gallery, art galleries, uh, I find it such a pleasure and I want to, besides this, I want to see people's, uh, art and how artists grow their imagination onto paper.

The phrase 'go to art gallery' needs an article 'an' before 'art gallery'. 'So a pleasure' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'such a pleasure'. 'Beside this' should be 'besides this'. 'The people's' should be 'people's' without 'the' because it refers generally. 'In onto a paper' should be 'onto paper' for natural expression.

× I'd love to uh, learn how different styles of art are and how painters, drawers, thinkers do their work as an artist, uh, just really enjoy enjoyable to learn about art.

✓ I'd love to, uh, learn how different styles of art are and how painters, drawers, thinkers do their work as artists, uh, it's just really enjoyable to learn about art.

The phrase 'just really enjoy enjoyable' is incorrect. 'Enjoyable' is an adjective and should be used with 'it's' or 'it is'. Also, 'as an artist' should be plural 'as artists' to agree with the plural subjects 'painters, drawers, thinkers'.

× Umm, actually I don't have many opportunity to learn drawing.

✓ Umm, actually I didn't have many opportunities to learn drawing.

The sentence refers to the past, so 'don't have' should be 'didn't have'. Also, 'opportunity' should be plural 'opportunities' to match 'many'.

× When I was a child and we had art once a week, but umm, our teacher just gave us a paper to work to do something as we want, but uh, he didn't taught us anything about how to draw.

✓ When I was a child, we had art once a week, but umm, our teacher just gave us paper to work on to do something as we wanted, but uh, he didn't teach us anything about how to draw.

'A paper' is incorrect; 'paper' is uncountable here. 'To work to do something' is awkward; 'to work on to do something' is better. 'As we want' should be past tense 'as we wanted' to match the past context. 'Didn't taught' is incorrect; after 'didn't' the base form 'teach' is used.

× Umm, so I haven't had the opportunity and I have no.

✓ Umm, so I haven't had the opportunity and I have none.

The phrase 'I have no' is incomplete; it should be 'I have none' to express the absence of opportunity properly.