Art— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答较为完整，但语言表达不够自然，句子结构略显重复，且有语法错误。建议简化句子结构，使用更地道的表达方式，并注意冠词和时态的正确使用。

예시: Yes, I really enjoy drawing. I've been practicing it for about seven years, starting from kindergarten until I entered senior high school. During this time, I earned several certificates in sketching and traditional painting.

제안: 回答内容表达清晰，但用词不够准确，且有口语填充词“uh”，影响流畅度。建议避免使用口语填充词，使用更准确的词汇表达观点，并丰富细节。

예시: No, I don't enjoy visiting galleries because I find the paintings a bit old-fashioned. Instead, I prefer viewing artwork on social media, especially drawings of ACG characters, which are my favorites.

제안: 回答表达了观点，但句子结构不够清晰，语法错误较多，且表达略显重复。建议理清句子结构，避免重复，使用更准确的表达方式。

예시: No, I don't want to study art further because I don't plan to pursue it as a career. For me, art is a way to relax, and if it became my job, I might lose interest in it.

제안: 回答内容较好，但存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题。建议注意时态一致性，避免重复表达，并使用更自然的句式。

예시: Yes, as I mentioned, I learned drawing from kindergarten until I entered senior high school. Those were the best times of my childhood because drawing helped me forget all my worries; it was just me and my painting.

× I learned how to draw for around 7 years since I was kindergarten and until I entered Senior High School.

✓ I learned how to draw for around 7 years from kindergarten until I entered Senior High School.

句中使用了“since”和“for”混合表达时间段，且“since I was kindergarten”表达不正确，应改为“from kindergarten”。“since”通常用于表示从某一时间点开始持续到现在的动作，而这里描述的是过去一段时间，应该用“for”或“from...until...”结构。建议使用“from kindergarten until I entered Senior High School”来表达时间段。

× Also I have got many certificate on drawing including sketching and traditional painting.

✓ Also I have got many certificates in drawing including sketching and traditional painting.

“certificate”是可数名词，复数形式应为“certificates”。此外，介词应为“in”而非“on”，表示在某个领域获得证书。

× I learned how to draw for around 7 years since I was kindergarten and until I entered Senior High School.

✓ I learned how to draw for around 7 years from kindergarten until I entered Senior High School.

“since”用于表示从某一具体时间点开始持续到现在的动作，而这里描述的是过去一段时间，应该用“from...until...”结构。

× The only thing is my me and my painting.

✓ The only thing is me and my painting.

“my me”是错误的重复，正确用法是直接使用“me”作为宾语。

× These are my best time in the childhood because when I was drawing I leave all the worries behind.

✓ These were my best times in childhood because when I was drawing I left all the worries behind.

“time”应使用复数形式“times”，因为指的是多段美好时光。同时，“in the childhood”应改为“in childhood”，更符合习惯表达。

× These are my best time in the childhood because when I was drawing I leave all the worries behind.

✓ These were my best times in childhood because when I was drawing I left all the worries behind.

描述过去的经历时，谓语动词应使用过去时态，“are”应改为“were”，“leave”应改为“left”。