Art— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer has some good ideas but contains several grammar and vocabulary errors that affect clarity. Try to use correct verb forms and clearer sentence structures. Also, avoid redundancy and keep your answer concise within 5 sentences. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

예시: Yes, I like drawing a lot because my subject is geology, which involves many illustrations of animals, including fish and extinct species. When I was a child, I enjoyed drawing various things, especially helicopters and different animals. Drawing helps me understand my studies better.

제안: Your answer addresses the question but has some grammatical mistakes and unclear phrases like 'deep words which is indulged'. Try to use simpler, clearer expressions and correct grammar. Also, avoid repeating phrases like 'I like the gallery a lot' twice. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

예시: Yes, I enjoy going to galleries because they display various kinds of paintings, and each painting tells a different story. I find it fascinating to interpret the deeper meanings behind the artwork, which makes visiting galleries very enjoyable.

제안: Your answer shows enthusiasm but is somewhat repetitive and contains awkward phrasing like 'I want to learn more about the art and to learn more' and 'I really like you know about the arts.' Try to be more concise and use clearer expressions. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

예시: Yes, I want to learn more about art. At my university, there is an Arts and Crafts department, and I often discuss art theories with my friends there. Their ideas inspire me, and I enjoy expanding my knowledge about art.

제안: Your answer is unclear due to repetition and grammatical errors. Avoid repeating words unnecessarily and try to form complete, clear sentences. Also, provide specific details about your learning experience and use linking words to improve coherence.

예시: Yes, I learned drawing when I was a kid. It was a specific subject at school, and we had teachers who carefully taught us proper techniques. Drawing was very relaxing and enjoyable for me.

× Yes, I like drying a lot.

✓ Yes, I like drawing a lot.

The word 'drying' is incorrect here; the correct noun is 'drawing'. This is a vocabulary error rather than a grammar problem, but correcting it is necessary for clarity.

× There are a lot of drawings of different kinds of animals, including fishes and forfeited animals, including humans.

✓ There are a lot of drawings of different kinds of animals, including fish and extinct animals, including humans.

The plural of 'fish' is usually 'fish' when referring to multiple animals of the same species. 'Forfeited' is incorrect; the intended word is likely 'extinct'. This correction improves accuracy and clarity.

× And when I was a child I was a very good I draw.

✓ And when I was a child, I was very good at drawing.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and incomplete. The correction uses the correct phrase 'good at drawing' to express ability, fixing sentence structure errors.

× I've drawn A various kinds of things, especially the helicopters and against animals.

✓ I've drawn various kinds of things, especially helicopters and wild animals.

The article 'A' is incorrectly used before 'various kinds'. Also, 'against animals' is incorrect; likely intended 'wild animals'. Removing the article and correcting the noun phrase improves grammar and meaning.

× Yes, I like to go to the gallery a lot because they displace various kinds of paintings and every paintings tell us different stories and there are some deep words which is indulged, which is indulged in the paintings.

✓ Yes, I like to go to the gallery a lot because they display various kinds of paintings and every painting tells us different stories, and there are some deep words which are included in the paintings.

'Displace' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'display'. 'Every paintings' should be 'every painting' (singular). 'Which is indulged' is incorrect; 'which are included' fits better. These corrections fix verb choice, subject-verb agreement, and phrase usage.

× So I like the gallery a lot.

✓ So I like the gallery a lot.

No grammatical error detected in this sentence.

× Yes, I want to learn more about the art and to learn more.

✓ Yes, I want to learn more about art and to learn more.

The word 'art' is an uncountable noun here and does not require the definite article 'the' when speaking generally.

× There is a department which is called the Arts and Crafts in my university, Jagannath University, and I have a lot of friends.

✓ There is a department called Arts and Crafts at my university, Jagannath University, and I have a lot of friends there.

The phrase 'which is called' can be simplified to 'called'. Also, 'in my university' should be 'at my university'. Adding 'there' clarifies the location of friends.

× Most of the time I try to know their hypothesis about their arts and other works, and it's really inspiring to me.

✓ Most of the time, I try to learn their opinions about their art and other works, and it's really inspiring to me.

'Try to know' is unnatural; 'try to learn' is better. 'Hypothesis' is not appropriate here; 'opinions' or 'ideas' fits better. 'Arts' should be singular 'art' when referring generally.

× And I really like you know about the arts.

✓ And I really like to know about art.

The phrase 'you know' is incorrect here; it should be 'to know'. Also, 'arts' should be singular 'art' when speaking generally.

× Yes, I learned drawing drawing when I was a kid and when I was a kid there were in specific subject on this that arts and drawings and we have some teachers and they are very carefully learned as teaches us how to do the proper art and it was so much relaxation and very, very.

✓ Yes, I learned drawing when I was a kid. When I was a kid, there was a specific subject on arts and drawings, and we had some teachers who carefully taught us how to do proper art. It was very relaxing and enjoyable.

The original sentence has multiple errors: repetition ('drawing drawing'), incorrect verb forms ('were in specific subject' should be 'was a specific subject'), tense inconsistency ('have' should be 'had'), and awkward phrasing ('carefully learned as teaches us' should be 'carefully taught us'). Breaking into sentences improves clarity.