Art— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer shows enthusiasm but lacks clarity and natural phrasing. Try to respond directly with a clear topic sentence, avoid redundancy, and use linking words to connect ideas logically. Also, keep your answer concise within 5 sentences.

예시: Yes, I really enjoy drawing because it allows me to express my creativity. I have been interested in it since I was in sixth grade, when it was part of my school curriculum. That experience helped me develop my skills and passion for art.

제안: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to give a direct response, explain your opinion clearly with specific reasons, and use linking words to make your answer coherent. Avoid vague phrases and keep sentences concise.

예시: No, I don't enjoy going to galleries because I find them boring. They usually display only paintings or sculptures without much interaction. I prefer places that combine history with sound and visual effects, which are more engaging and memorable.

제안: Your answer is positive but could be clearer and more natural. Use a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and connect your ideas logically with linking words. Also, be careful with word choice and grammar to improve clarity.

예시: Yes, I would love to learn more about art in the future because I have a strong interest in drawing. Many artists express their emotions through their work, and studying art would help me understand their messages better. I wouldn't want to miss such an opportunity.

제안: Your answer contains useful information but is difficult to understand due to grammar and structure issues. Try to answer directly, use clear sentences, and connect ideas with linking words. Keep your response concise and avoid unnecessary repetition.

예시: Yes, I learned drawing when I was a child because it was a required subject at my school. Since then, I have developed a strong interest in it. Our school also held art exhibitions where local artists displayed their work, which helped me learn more about art.

× Yes. Yes, I really like drawing and I have a lot of interest in creativity because in this way I can show my talent in front of anybody.

✓ Yes. Yes, I really like drawing and I have a lot of interest in creativity because in this way I can show my talent to anybody.

The phrase 'in front of anybody' is awkward and incorrect in this context. The correct preposition is 'to' when expressing showing talent to someone. This is an incorrect use of prepositions (ID 11), but since the instruction is to correct only grammar problems listed, and preposition errors are ID 11, this correction is made here for clarity.

× I really remember that when I was studying 6th standard at the time.

✓ I really remember that when I was studying in 6th standard at that time.

The phrase 'at the time' is vague and awkward here; 'at that time' is more appropriate. Also, 'studying 6th standard' should be 'studying in 6th standard' to be grammatically correct. This is an incorrect use of prepositions (ID 11).

× This subject is quite mentoring for me and from such such a time period it relegated interest in me related to a drawing.

✓ This subject was quite motivating for me and from that time period, it generated interest in me related to drawing.

The sentence has multiple issues: 'mentoring' is incorrect here; 'motivating' fits better. 'Relegated interest' is incorrect; 'generated interest' is correct. Also, 'such such a time period' is redundant and incorrect; 'that time period' is better. The phrase 'related to a drawing' should be 'related to drawing' without 'a'. These are sentence structure errors (ID 26) and incorrect use of adjectives (ID 13).

× No I don't like because the place till now I have visited a bit boring.

✓ No, I don't like it because the places I have visited so far are a bit boring.

The sentence lacks proper conjunctions and articles. 'No I don't like because' is incomplete; it should be 'No, I don't like it because'. 'The place till now I have visited' is awkward; 'the places I have visited so far' is correct. This is an incorrect conjunction use (ID 16) and article error (ID 22).

× There is only just your models and they type something.

✓ There are only just your models and they type something.

'There is' should be 'There are' because 'models' is plural. This is a singular and plural issue (ID 1).

× I really want to explore such type of places where they show the histories by a mixture of sound, audio and visuals.

✓ I really want to explore places where they show history through a mixture of sound, audio, and visuals.

The phrase 'such type of places' is awkward; 'places' suffices. 'The histories' should be 'history' as an uncountable noun here. 'By a mixture' should be 'through a mixture'. These are sentence structure errors (ID 26) and incorrect use of articles (ID 22).

× It really captivating to more and but I have a great experience.

✓ It is really captivating, and I have had a great experience.

The sentence is missing the verb 'is' after 'It'. 'Captivating to more' is incorrect; 'captivating' alone suffices. 'But' is misplaced and unnecessary. This is an incorrect use of adjectives (ID 13) and sentence structure error (ID 26).

× Yes, of course, if in future if I got a chance to learn about a part, I definitely attain it because I have a great interest in drawing and and through art.

✓ Yes, of course, if in the future I get a chance to learn about art, I will definitely take it because I have a great interest in drawing and through art.

The sentence mixes past tense 'got' with future context; it should be 'get'. 'Attain it' is incorrect; 'take it' or 'attend it' is better. 'A part' should be 'art'. This is a future tense issue (ID 7) and past tense issue (ID 5).

× So many authors have expressed their emotions and by learning the art I can also understand it.

✓ Many artists have expressed their emotions, and by learning art, I can also understand them.

'Authors' is incorrect; 'artists' is appropriate. 'The art' should be 'art' without 'the'. 'Understand it' should be 'understand them' referring to emotions. This is incorrect use of conjunctions (ID 16) and pronouns (ID 12).

× And I really I didn't want to split such an opportunity in my life.

✓ And I really don't want to miss such an opportunity in my life.

'Didn't want to split' is incorrect; 'don't want to miss' is correct. The tense should be present to match the context. This is an incorrect use of pronouns (ID 12) and past tense issue (ID 5).

× Yes, I as I mentioned it, when I was studying this extender, this subject was mandatory for me and since then I got a lot of interest in drawings and apart from it there is also some exhibitions was mainly held by our school where different art workers have shown their talent and so a lot of things I come to know from such time.

✓ Yes, as I mentioned, when I was studying in this standard, this subject was mandatory for me and since then I have had a lot of interest in drawing. Apart from that, some exhibitions were mainly held by our school where different artists showed their talent, and I learned a lot from that time.

Multiple errors: 'this extender' should be 'this standard'; 'got a lot of interest' should be 'have had a lot of interest' to indicate ongoing interest; 'drawings' should be 'drawing' as a general activity; 'there is also some exhibitions was' is incorrect, should be 'some exhibitions were'; 'art workers' should be 'artists'; 'I come to know' should be 'I learned'. These are past tense issues (ID 5), singular/plural issues (ID 1), and sentence structure errors (ID 26).