Art— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to avoid unclear or incorrect phrases like 'I use my Arctic skills'. Instead, focus on clear and relevant vocabulary related to drawing. Also, keep your answer concise and avoid redundancy by combining similar ideas.

예시: Yes, I do. Drawing allows me to express my creativity and emotions. In my free time, I enjoy sketching various cartoons and comic characters, which helps me improve my artistic skills.

제안: Be careful with word choice and sentence structure. For example, 'wide range of varieties' is redundant; 'wide variety' or 'range' alone is better. Also, avoid repeating 'inspire me' twice. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

예시: I love going to galleries because they display a wide variety of artworks, including paintings and sculptures. Moreover, learning about different artists and their techniques always inspires me to improve my own skills.

제안: Avoid incorrect phrases like 'Polish my Arctic skill' and use correct vocabulary such as 'polish my artistic skills'. Also, ensure subject-verb agreement and use plural forms correctly. Try to make your answer more coherent with linking words.

예시: Yes, definitely. Learning more about art is useful to polish my artistic skills. I aspire to be a painter, so I want to learn new techniques and understand more about different artists.

제안: Use past tense consistently when talking about childhood. For example, 'I took classes' instead of 'I take classes'. Also, avoid vague phrases like 'draw the things' and be more specific. Use linking words to improve coherence.

예시: Yes, I developed an interest in drawing during my childhood. I took classes to improve my skills, and my parents encouraged me by providing all the necessary drawing supplies.

× I like to draw different kind of cartoons and comic characters in my free time.

✓ I like to draw different kinds of cartoons and comic characters in my free time.

The phrase 'different kind' should be pluralised to 'different kinds' when referring to multiple types. Also, 'kind' should be followed by 'of' plus plural noun. This corrects the singular/plural agreement.

× I love to go to the gallery because they have wide range of varieties such as paintings, sculptures and many more things.

✓ I love to go to the gallery because they have a wide range of varieties such as paintings, sculptures and many more things.

The phrase 'wide range' requires the article 'a' before it. Without 'a', the phrase is grammatically incorrect.

× They always inspire me and I love to know about different artists and their techniques which inspire me a lot.

✓ They always inspire me and I love to learn about different artists and their techniques which inspire me a lot.

The verb 'know' is incorrectly used here; 'learn about' is more appropriate when referring to gaining knowledge about artists and techniques.

× It's very useful to Polish my Arctic skill.

✓ It's very useful to polish my artistic skills.

'Polish' should not be capitalised here. Also, 'Arctic skill' is incorrect; likely intended 'artistic skills' which is plural and more appropriate.

× I always want to be a painter and to learn new techniques.

✓ I always want to be a painter and learn new techniques.

The phrase 'to be a painter and to learn' is acceptable but the second 'to' is unnecessary and can be omitted for smoother sentence flow.

× I have to learn more and more about art and their artist.

✓ I have to learn more and more about art and its artists.

'Art' is singular and should be paired with 'its' not 'their'. Also, 'artist' should be plural 'artists' to match the context.

× Yes, in my childhood I have gained interest in drawing.

✓ Yes, in my childhood I gained interest in drawing.

The present perfect tense 'have gained' is incorrect when referring to a specific past time 'in my childhood'. Simple past 'gained' is appropriate.

× I take classes for that.

✓ I took classes for that.

Since the context is past ('in my childhood'), the verb should be in past tense 'took' instead of present 'take'.

× Also my parents encouraged me to to draw the things.

✓ Also my parents encouraged me to draw things.

The phrase 'to to' is a typographical error; one 'to' should be removed. Also, 'the things' is vague; 'things' without 'the' is more natural here.

× They help me and provide me all drawing supplies.

✓ They helped me and provided me with all drawing supplies.

Since the context is past, verbs should be past tense 'helped' and 'provided'. Also, 'provide me all' is incorrect; it should be 'provided me with all'.