Art— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: In English (Cambodia), you should focus on using correct grammar and clearer sentence structure. For example, use 'allows me to feel relaxed and relieved from stress' instead of 'allow me to feel relaxed and really stressed'. Also, avoid redundancy and keep sentences concise. Try to use linking words like 'because' or 'so' to connect ideas smoothly.

예시: I definitely love drawing because it allows me to feel relaxed and relieved from stress after my busy classes. In my free time, I usually draw pictures with my friends and family, which creates a positive atmosphere and makes my day more enjoyable.

제안: In English (Cambodia), try to improve sentence clarity and grammar. For example, say 'I usually spend a lot of time looking at paintings or seeing unique artworks' instead of 'spend so many time for touring the picture'. Also, use linking words like 'because' and 'so' to make your answer more coherent.

예시: Yes, I enjoy going to the gallery with my friends and family because I like drawing. I usually spend a lot of time looking at paintings or seeing unique artworks, which makes me feel excited and comfortable.

제안: In English (Cambodia), focus on clearer expression and correct word usage. For example, clarify 'AD' (probably 'art design') and use proper phrases like 'I enjoy drawing unique and beautiful things'. Also, avoid confusing sentences and use linking words like 'because' and 'so' to connect ideas logically.

예시: Yes, I definitely want to learn more about art design, especially traditional art. I enjoy drawing unique and beautiful things, so I think traditional art is very important for me. It challenges me and helps me feel more creative and appreciated when I create art.

제안: In English (Cambodia), improve grammar and sentence flow. For example, say 'the teacher always taught us how to draw' instead of 'teach us how to draws'. Also, avoid redundancy and use linking words like 'because' and 'so' to make your answer clearer and more natural.

예시: Yes, I used to learn drawing when I was in primary school because the teacher always taught us how to draw. Drawing brought me happiness during my childhood, and I really enjoyed it. So, I like drawing very much.

× I definitely love drawing because it allow me to feel relaxed and really stressed after my busy class.

✓ I definitely love drawing because it allows me to feel relaxed and less stressed after my busy class.

The verb 'allow' must agree with the singular subject 'it', so it should be 'allows'. Also, 'really stressed' is incorrect in this context; it should be 'less stressed' to express relief from stress.

× I would say on in the free time I usually draw a picture with my friends and family.

✓ I would say in my free time I usually draw pictures with my friends and family.

The phrase 'on in the free time' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'in' for 'in my free time'. Also, 'a picture' should be plural 'pictures' to match the habitual action.

× I usually spend so many time for touring the picture or go to see something unique like the pictures.

✓ I usually spend a lot of time touring the pictures or going to see something unique like the paintings.

'So many time' is incorrect; 'time' is uncountable, so 'a lot of time' is correct. Also, 'touring the picture' should be plural 'pictures'. The verb form after 'or' should be parallel: 'touring' and 'going'.

× I usually spend so many time for touring the picture or go to see something unique like the pictures.

✓ I usually spend a lot of time touring the pictures or going to see something unique like the paintings.

The preposition 'for' is unnecessary after 'spend time'. The correct structure is 'spend time doing something'.

× I would say I like drawing something unique and look great.

✓ I would say I like drawing something unique that looks great.

The verb 'look' should agree with the singular noun 'something', so it should be 'looks'. Also, a relative pronoun 'that' is needed to connect the clauses.

× But I feel appreciated and creativity for creating the art.

✓ But I feel appreciated and creative when creating art.

'Creativity' is a noun, but the sentence needs an adjective 'creative' to describe the feeling. Also, 'for creating the art' is better expressed as 'when creating art'.

× Yes, I used to learn drawing when I was in primary school because at school the teacher always teach us how to draws.

✓ Yes, I used to learn drawing when I was in primary school because at school the teacher always taught us how to draw.

The verb 'teach' should be in past tense 'taught' to match the past context. Also, 'draws' is incorrect; after 'how to' the base form 'draw' is used.

× It was like a childhood because drawing can bring me happiness and and I was so enjoyable at that time.

✓ It was like childhood because drawing brought me happiness and I enjoyed it a lot at that time.

'A childhood' is incorrect; 'childhood' is uncountable and does not need an article. 'Was so enjoyable' is incorrect; the subject 'I' should be followed by 'enjoyed' to express feeling enjoyment.