Art— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答は直接的ですが、文法的な誤りや不自然な表現が多く、内容もやや否定的で冗長です。例えば、「I couldn't do that skills」は不自然で、「I didn't have the skills」などが適切です。また、「I don't have a sense of the humor and skills about doing so」は意味が不明瞭です。より自然で効果的な表現を心がけ、具体的な理由や感情を簡潔に述べると良いでしょう。

예시: No, I don't like drawing because I never developed the skills when I was a child. Instead, I preferred playing outdoor sports like baseball and football, which I enjoyed much more.

제안: 回答は質問に答えていますが、文法ミスや不自然な表現が目立ちます。例えば、「watches」は過去形の「watched」が正しいですし、「drawing for money season」は意味が不明瞭です。具体的な作品名や感想を加え、文をつなぐ接続詞を使うとより自然で効果的になります。

예시: Yes, I enjoy visiting galleries to see masterpieces. For instance, I once visited a gallery in Okayama Prefecture where I saw famous European paintings. It was a very memorable experience for me.

제안: 回答は意図が伝わりますが、文法的な誤りや冗長な表現があります。例えば、「I want to get much more knowledge about the art」は「I want to learn more about art」が自然です。また、「I don't have not so many ideas」は二重否定で誤りです。具体的な興味や理由を明確にし、接続詞を使って文をつなげると良いでしょう。

예시: Yes, I want to learn more about art, especially its history, because I currently don't know much about it. I also enjoy classical music, which often relates to art history.

제안: 回答は意味が伝わりますが、過度の「あー」や「うー」が多く、流暢さに欠けます。また、「that's one of my regret for because I want to have」は不自然な表現です。簡潔で明確な文を作り、流暢さを意識して練習すると良いでしょう。

예시: Yes, I learned some drawing when I was a child, but I wasn't very good at it because I lacked both talent and interest. I regret not practicing more because I wish I had improved.

× When I was a child, I couldn't do that skills and instead I always, uh, went to outside and played, uh, baseball, football and Rugby Football.

✓ When I was a child, I couldn't do those skills and instead I always went outside and played baseball, football, and rugby football.

The phrase 'that skills' is incorrect because 'skills' is plural and should be preceded by 'those' instead of 'that'. Also, 'went to outside' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'went outside' without 'to'. Additionally, 'Rugby Football' should not be capitalized as a proper noun here.

× I always, uh, went to outside and played, uh, baseball, football and Rugby Football.

✓ I always went outside and played baseball, football, and rugby football.

The preposition 'to' is unnecessary before 'outside'. The correct expression is 'went outside' without 'to'.

× I don't have a sense of the humor and skills about doing so.

✓ I don't have a sense of humor or the skills to do so.

The phrase 'a sense of the humor' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'a sense of humor' without 'the'. Also, 'skills about doing so' is awkward; 'skills to do so' is more natural.

× Yes, I like to go there and watch some masterpieces.

✓ Yes, I like to go there and see some masterpieces.

The verb 'watch' is generally used for moving images or performances, not for viewing artworks. 'See' or 'look at' is more appropriate for masterpieces.

× For example, I went to Oka, Yama Prefecture and watches some drawing for money season and other very famous people in the Europe.

✓ For example, I went to Okayama Prefecture and saw some drawings for the money season and other very famous people in Europe.

The verb 'watches' should be in past tense 'saw' to match 'went'. 'Oka, Yama' should be 'Okayama'. 'The Europe' is incorrect; 'Europe' does not need 'the'. Also, 'drawing' should be plural 'drawings'.

× and other very famous people in the Europe.

✓ and other very famous people in Europe.

'Europe' is a continent name and does not require the definite article 'the'.

× That was very good experience for me.

✓ That was a very good experience for me.

The sentence is past tense and correct in tense, but missing the indefinite article 'a' before 'very good experience'.

× Yes, I want to get much more knowledge about the art.

✓ Yes, I want to gain much more knowledge about art.

'Get' is less formal than 'gain' when talking about knowledge. Also, 'the art' is incorrect; 'art' as a general concept does not need 'the'.

× I want to know about the history of the art.

✓ I want to know about the history of art.

'Art' as a general concept does not require the definite article 'the'.

× I don't have not so many ideas about that.

✓ I don't have many ideas about that.

Double negation 'don't have not' is incorrect. The correct form is 'don't have many ideas'.

× I like to listen to the classical music and I want to get the history of art.

✓ I like to listen to classical music and I want to learn the history of art.

'Classical music' as a genre does not require 'the'. Also, 'get the history' is awkward; 'learn the history' is better.

× Uh, yes, in my memory, uh, I have learned uh, something about drawing, uh, but uh, I couldn't uh, do well, umm, because, uh, I didn't have uh, enough talent and uh, uh, interest, uh, in that, umm, that's one of my regret for because I want to have.

✓ Uh, yes, I remember learning something about drawing, but I couldn't do well because I didn't have enough talent or interest in it. That's one of my regrets because I wish I had.

The original sentence has tense inconsistency and awkward phrasing. 'I have learned' is better as 'I remember learning'. 'Couldn't do well' is correct but needs to be connected properly. 'One of my regret for because I want to have' is ungrammatical; correct form is 'one of my regrets because I wish I had'.