Art— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to make your answer more concise and natural by avoiding redundancy and unclear comparisons. Use clear linking words and complete sentences to express your ideas effectively.

예시: Yes, I really enjoy drawing because, like driving, the more you practice, the better you become. Practicing regularly helps me improve my skills and create better artwork.

제안: Avoid repeating phrases and improve sentence structure for clarity. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and provide specific details about what you enjoy in galleries.

예시: Absolutely, I love visiting galleries, especially on weekends. I enjoy discovering new artists and paintings because galleries have a vibrant atmosphere that inspires me.

제안: Avoid negative self-descriptions and improve grammar. Use clear and positive language with proper linking words to explain your motivation to learn more about art.

예시: Yes, I want to learn more about art because I plan to pursue a master's degree at a good university. Although it requires effort, I am motivated to study hard to become an expert.

제안: Make your answer more concise and natural by avoiding redundancy. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific details about your experience.

예시: Yes, I took painting classes near my house when I was a child. I really enjoyed those classes, especially because of my excellent teacher who made learning fun.

× Oh, actually, I'm a painter and for sure I like drawing and I think it's like driving. And however you practice more, how much you practice more, you can be a better artist and you can draw better and.

✓ Oh, actually, I'm a painter and for sure I like drawing and I think it's like driving. The more you practice, the better you can be as an artist and the better you can draw.

The original sentence uses 'And however you practice more, how much you practice more' which is incorrect. The correct structure to express this idea is 'The more you practice, the better you can be.' This is a comparative correlative structure that requires 'the more... the better...' pattern. Also, the sentence was incomplete and had unnecessary conjunctions.

× Absolutely. I love to go to galleries most of the days and and in the weekends I like to go to the galleries and see what's new in art, new art painters and new paintings.

✓ Absolutely. I love to go to galleries most days and on weekends I like to go to galleries and see what's new in art, new artists and new paintings.

The phrase 'most of the days' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'most days'. Also, 'in the weekends' should be 'on weekends' because we use 'on' with days and weekends. Additionally, 'new art painters' is better expressed as 'new artists'.

× I think everyone want to know more about arts but I am a lazy person and I can't study enough for being an expert in art but I have to because I want to learning master in a good university and I have to do it.

✓ I think everyone wants to know more about art but I am a lazy person and I can't study enough to become an expert in art but I have to because I want to study for a master's degree at a good university and I have to do it.

The verb 'want' should be 'wants' to agree with the singular subject 'everyone' (subject-verb agreement). 'Arts' should be 'art' as an uncountable noun here. 'I want to learning master' is incorrect; it should be 'I want to study for a master's degree'. Also, 'for being an expert' should be 'to become an expert'.

× I can remember when I was a kid I went to a painting class near my house and I really enjoyed my childhood with painting classes and with my absolutely great teacher.

✓ I remember when I was a kid I went to a painting class near my house and I really enjoyed my childhood with painting classes and with my absolutely great teacher.

The phrase 'I can remember' is grammatically correct but 'I remember' is more natural when recalling past events. The rest of the sentence is correct in past tense usage.