Art— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn hơi dài và có một số lỗi ngữ pháp cũng như cách dùng từ chưa chính xác. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi với câu chủ đề rõ ràng, tránh lặp từ và sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp hơn. Ngoài ra, hãy dùng câu ngắn gọn, mạch lạc và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp để câu trả lời tự nhiên hơn.

예시: No, I don't like drawing because I find it difficult and time-consuming. Instead, I prefer activities like listening to music or watching my favorite movies, which I enjoy more.

제안: Bạn cần chú ý ngữ pháp và cách dùng từ để câu trả lời rõ ràng và chính xác hơn. Ví dụ, dùng đúng thì và giới từ. Ngoài ra, hãy sử dụng các từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc và tránh lỗi phát âm hoặc từ sai (như 'calorie' thay vì 'gallery').

예시: Although I don't enjoy drawing, I often visit galleries because I am curious about the meanings behind the paintings. Moreover, going to galleries helps me feel peaceful and relaxed after busy days.

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn cần rõ ràng hơn và tránh lặp từ. Hãy sử dụng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, kết hợp các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc. Ngoài ra, nên dùng từ vựng phù hợp và chính xác hơn để thể hiện ý kiến cá nhân.

예시: No, I don't want to learn more about art because I find it abstract and difficult to understand. Also, since I'm not interested in drawing, I think learning more about art would be a waste of time for me.

제안: Bạn nên chú ý ngữ pháp, đặc biệt là thì và số nhiều/số ít. Câu trả lời nên rõ ràng, tránh lặp từ và dùng từ vựng chính xác. Hãy sử dụng câu chủ đề và các chi tiết hỗ trợ một cách mạch lạc, có liên kết.

예시: Yes, I learned drawing when I was in sixth or seventh grade. I only learned the basics, not professionally. I didn't enjoy it much because I didn't have much talent in this subject, and I found it quite boring.

× Actually not, because I'm not really good at drawing and for me drawing is a quite time consuming and waste of time.

✓ Actually, no, because I'm not really good at drawing and for me drawing is quite time-consuming and a waste of time.

The modal verb 'not' is incorrectly used alone; it should be 'no' to answer negatively. Also, 'a quite time consuming' is incorrect; 'quite' should not be preceded by 'a' and 'time consuming' should be hyphenated as 'time-consuming'. Additionally, 'waste of time' needs the article 'a' before it.

× In this time I can do a lot of thing which I think is fun like listen to music or watch a my favorite movies.

✓ At this time, I can do a lot of things which I think are fun like listening to music or watching my favorite movies.

'A lot of thing' should be plural 'things'. 'Which I think is fun' should be 'which I think are fun' to agree with plural 'things'. Also, 'listen' and 'watch' should be in gerund form after 'like'. The article 'a' before 'my favorite movies' is incorrect and should be removed.

× Although I'm not enjoy drawing, I usually visit the gallery because I really curious about the meanings behind the picture and also going to calorie is make me feel peaceful and relax after the busy days.

✓ Although I don't enjoy drawing, I usually visit the gallery because I am really curious about the meanings behind the pictures and also going to the gallery makes me feel peaceful and relaxed after busy days.

'I'm not enjoy' is incorrect; it should be 'I don't enjoy' to express negation in present tense. 'I really curious' lacks the verb 'am'. 'The picture' should be plural 'pictures' to match 'meanings'. 'Going to calorie' is a typo and should be 'going to the gallery'. 'Is make' should be 'makes' to agree with singular subject. 'Relax' should be 'relaxed' as an adjective describing the feeling.

× It's helped me to hectic the, uh, busy pain.

✓ It has helped me to relieve the hectic, uh, busy pain.

'It's helped' is a contraction of 'it is helped' which is incorrect here; it should be 'it has helped' to indicate present perfect tense. 'Hectic the busy pain' is incorrect; 'hectic' is an adjective and cannot modify 'pain' directly. The phrase is unclear; 'relieve' is a better verb to express reducing pain or stress.

× Definitely not for me art is an abstract meanings and it's really hard for me to absorb the knowledge related to the subjects.

✓ Definitely not; for me, art has abstract meanings and it's really hard for me to absorb the knowledge related to the subject.

'Definitely not for me art is' is awkward; a semicolon or period improves clarity. 'An abstract meanings' mixes singular article 'an' with plural noun 'meanings'; it should be 'abstract meanings' without 'an'. 'Subjects' should be singular 'subject' to match 'art'.

× And also as I said before I'm not really keen on drawing so I think it's quite time consuming for me to learn about learn more about it.

✓ Also, as I said before, I'm not really keen on drawing so I think it's quite time-consuming for me to learn more about it.

'Time consuming' should be hyphenated as 'time-consuming'. The phrase 'learn about learn more about it' is redundant; 'learn more about it' is correct.

× Yes I did. I had a chance to learn drawings when I was grade sevens or six.

✓ Yes, I did. I had a chance to learn drawing when I was in grade six or seven.

'Learn drawings' is incorrect; 'learn drawing' or 'learn how to draw' is correct. 'Grade sevens or six' should be 'grade six or seven' and include 'in' before grade.

× I'm not really sure about it but I'm not. I'm just learn about the basic one, not the professional and I'm not really enjoy this subject because as I said before I do not have talented in this subjects and is quite boring.

✓ I'm not really sure about it, but I'm not. I just learned the basics, not professionally, and I don't really enjoy this subject because, as I said before, I am not talented in this subject and it is quite boring.

'I'm just learn' should be past tense 'I just learned'. 'The basic one' should be 'the basics'. 'Not the professional' is unclear; 'not professionally' clarifies. 'I'm not really enjoy' should be 'I don't really enjoy'. 'I do not have talented' is incorrect; it should be 'I am not talented'. 'In this subjects' should be singular 'in this subject'. 'Is quite boring' needs subject 'it'.