Art— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Améliorez la fluidité et la clarté de votre réponse en évitant les hésitations et en structurant mieux vos phrases. Par exemple, évitez les répétitions et les phrases incomplètes, et utilisez des mots de liaison pour rendre votre discours plus naturel.

예시: I don't consider myself talented at drawing, so it's not my favorite activity. However, when I was a child, I really enjoyed drawing gardens, houses, and animals because it was a fun hobby for me.

제안: Travaillez sur la cohérence et la structure de vos phrases. Évitez les phrases courtes et déconnectées, et utilisez des mots de liaison pour connecter vos idées. Aussi, faites attention à la grammaire et à la formulation correcte des phrases.

예시: Although I'm not talented at drawing, I enjoy visiting art galleries with my friends because I find it interesting and relaxing to look at the paintings. I also like reading about their meanings.

제안: Améliorez la fluidité en évitant les pauses inutiles et en corrigeant les erreurs grammaticales. Utilisez des phrases complètes et des mots de liaison pour exprimer clairement vos idées.

예시: Yes, if I have the chance, I would definitely like to learn more about art because many artworks come from the past. Learning about art can help me gain a deeper understanding of the world and its aesthetics.

제안: Travaillez sur la structure de vos phrases et évitez les phrases incomplètes. Utilisez des mots de liaison pour rendre votre réponse plus cohérente et naturelle.

예시: No, I didn't attend any drawing classes. I used to draw animals, gardens, and houses as a hobby when I was a kid. I also enjoyed drawing competitions with my friends because it was interesting and fun.

× But back then, when I was a child, I I enjoy drawing.

✓ But back then, when I was a child, I enjoyed drawing.

The sentence refers to a past time ('back then, when I was a child'), so the verb should be in the past tense 'enjoyed' instead of the present tense 'enjoy'. This ensures tense consistency.

× Gardens houses animals because.

✓ I enjoyed drawing gardens, houses, and animals because it was really a hobby of mine back then.

The original sentence is incomplete and lacks a clear subject and verb. Adding 'I enjoyed drawing' and connecting the objects with commas and 'and' creates a complete and clear sentence.

× Author I don't have talent in drawing.

✓ Although I don't have talent in drawing,

The word 'Author' is incorrect here. The correct conjunction to express contrast is 'Although'. This improves sentence coherence.

× Because it's really interesting and comforting looking to the pictures and I love read the meanings of it too.

✓ Because it's really interesting and comforting to look at the pictures, and I love to read their meanings too.

The phrase 'looking to the pictures' is incorrect; it should be 'to look at the pictures'. Also, 'I love read' should be 'I love to read'. The sentence is restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Yes, if I have the chance I would definitely go learn more about arts because there is.

✓ Yes, if I have the chance, I would definitely go learn more about art because there are

The word 'arts' should be singular 'art' when referring to the subject in general. Also, 'there is' should be 'there are' to agree with the plural noun 'artworks' in the next sentence.

× There are many artworks that comes from the past,

✓ There are many artworks that come from the past,

The verb 'comes' should be 'come' to agree with the plural subject 'artworks'.

× I just draught animals, garden houses as one of my hobbies when I was a kid.

✓ I just drew animals, garden houses as one of my hobbies when I was a kid.

The verb 'draught' is incorrect here; the past tense of 'draw' is 'drew'. This corrects the past tense usage.

× I love to. Draw in competition with my friends because it's really interesting and fascinating.

✓ I loved to draw in competitions with my friends because it was really interesting and fascinating.

The sentence is fragmented and inconsistent in tense. 'I love to. Draw' should be 'I loved to draw'. Also, 'competition' should be plural 'competitions' to match the context. The tense is adjusted to past to match 'when I was a kid'.