Emails— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and use a clearer topic sentence, then add one or two specific examples with linking words. Avoid filler words like "umm" and repetition.

예시: Yes, I send emails regularly, mainly for university and administrative matters. For example, I email my professors about assignments and I send documents to the university office when required.

제안: Start with a clear topic sentence and use linking words (for example, for instance, because) to organise details. Give one concise, specific example and avoid repeating the same idea.

예시: I usually send emails when I need to share files or important information. For instance, last month I emailed my doctor's office to send test results because they requested my medical files.

제안: Be confident and avoid uncertain phrases like "I don't have a clue." Use a clear opinion and support it with a reason or brief example. Remove repeated words and hesitations.

예시: I believe emailing is popular in China as it is worldwide, especially in business. For example, companies and universities commonly use email to send official documents and arrange meetings.

제안: Give a clear prediction with logical reasons and avoid repeated words. Use linking words such as "because" and "however" and contrast email with other communication methods succinctly.

예시: I think email will remain popular and possibly grow in professional use because it is more formal and suitable for sending documents. However, instant messaging may increase for casual conversations, while email stays dominant for official communication.

× Yes, I do send emails to my university or if I have to send any particular data to anybody so I send it through e-mail.

✓ Yes, I send emails to my university, or if I have to send particular data to anyone, I send it by email.

Redundant 'do' is unnecessary in simple present affirmative sentences (use 'do' only for emphasis or questions/negatives). 'Anybody' is better as 'anyone' in this context. Use 'by email' as the common prepositional phrase. Combine clauses with commas and a clearer connector for fluency. Grammar Problem Type ID: 10

× First I would umm send emails to others when like there's something or some files to share.

✓ First, I would send emails to others when there is something or some files to share.

The filler 'umm' and 'like' are informal hesitations and should be removed in corrected speech. Use 'there is' rather than contraction 'there's' in formal corrections if needed; modal 'would' is acceptable to indicate typical action in hypothetical or habitual past contexts, but here it fits as a polite habitual marker. Ensure punctuation for clarity. Grammar Problem Type ID: 4

× Like last time I sent an e-mail to my doctor, doctor office.

✓ For example, last time I sent an email to my doctor's office.

Repeating 'doctor' is redundant; use the possessive form 'doctor's office' to show location. Replace 'Like' with 'For example' for formal clarity. Use 'email' as single word. Grammar Problem Type ID: 26

× So because I have some data to share with him so I send it through e-mail.

✓ Because I had some data to share with him, I sent it by email.

The sentence refers to a past event ('last time') so verbs should be in the past tense: 'had' and 'sent'. Remove duplicate 'so' and use 'by email' as the preferred phrase. Grammar Problem Type ID: 5

× So if there is something personal or something important I have to share files or send it through emails.

✓ So if there is something personal or important that I have to share, I send files or send them by email.

Pronoun agreement error: 'it' does not agree with plural 'files'; use 'them' for plural. Also add 'that' to introduce the relative clause and choose consistent verb tense (present simple for habitual action). Use 'by email' and avoid pluralizing 'email' unnecessarily. Grammar Problem Type ID: 12

× I don't have a particular clue or a particular idea about this cushion.

✓ I don't have a clear idea about this question.

Likely mispronunciation or wrong word 'cushion' should be 'question'. 'A particular clue or a particular idea' is awkward; 'a clear idea' is concise and natural. Retain negative present simple for current lack of knowledge. Grammar Problem Type ID: 12

× But yes, I think that sending an e-mail not only in China but like in every country is quite popular because because like every in like in business, mostly people, people have to send emails and.

✓ But yes, I think that sending emails is quite popular not only in China but in every country, because in business most people have to send emails.

Remove repeated words ('because because', duplicate 'people') and informal fillers ('like'). Place 'not only... but' correctly and simplify word order. Use plural 'emails' for general reference and 'in business' as the correct prepositional phrase. End sentence with a complete clause rather than trailing 'and'. Grammar Problem Type ID: 26

× In my opinion, sending an e-mail will be like more popular, uh popular in like coming years because emails are just getting the way through.

✓ In my opinion, sending email will become more popular in the coming years because emails are becoming more common.

Avoid filler words ('like', 'uh') and awkward phrasing 'will be like more popular'; use 'will become more popular' for future change. 'Getting the way through' is nonstandard; use 'becoming more common'. Use 'email' as uncountable here. Grammar Problem Type ID: 7},{