Dreams— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make your answer more concise, grammatically correct and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail. Avoid redundancy and unfinished clauses. Use linking words like 'because' or 'and' correctly, and keep the response under five sentences.

예시: Yes. When I was a child I dreamed of becoming a master chef because cooking has always been my passion. I practised baking and trying new recipes every weekend, and I would love to meet Gordon Ramsay one day to learn advanced techniques.

제안: Improve grammar and clarity: use a clear topic sentence, then give a specific example with proper tense and linking words (for example, 'for instance' or 'for example'). Correct phrases like 'keep belief in myself' to 'believe in me' and 'when I was hard' to 'when I was going through a hard time.'

예시: I usually only share my dreams with close friends because they encourage me and give practical advice. For example, when I was going through a difficult period last year, my friends reminded me to believe in myself and helped me stay motivated.

제안: Clarify meaning and use specific reasoning. Begin with a clear opinion, then explain logically with linking words like 'because' and 'as a result'. Avoid unclear phrases such as 'simplifies for their lifetime their hobbies'—instead say 'reflect a person’s interests or goals.'

예시: Yes, I think dreams often have special meanings because they can reflect a person’s interests and long-term goals. As a result, those dreams can motivate people to work harder and stay focused on what matters to them.

제안: Answer directly about your own desire first, then support with specific reasons. Fix grammar and word choice: use 'make my dreams come true', 'dreams simplify life' is unclear—prefer 'dreams give life direction.' Keep sentences short and coherent, and use linking words like 'because' and 'so'.

예시: Yes, I definitely want to make my dreams come true because they give my life direction and keep me motivated. For example, wanting to be a chef helps me set concrete goals like taking cooking classes and practising regularly.

× A dream I had when I was a child is to become a master chef because cooking is my cup of tea and moreover a day I really want to meet Gordon Ramsay, who is really good at cooking and.

✓ A dream I had when I was a child was to become a master chef because cooking is my cup of tea; moreover, I really want to meet Gordon Ramsay, who is really good at cooking.

The sentence mixes tenses and uses awkward phrasing. 'A dream I had... is' should use past tense 'was' to match 'had'. 'A day I really want to meet' is ungrammatical; change to 'I really want to meet'. Also remove the trailing 'and' and link ideas clearly with a semicolon or conjunction. Suggestion: keep consistent tense and use clear clause structure. Grammar problem type ID: 10

× I only share my dreams with my close friends who always encourage me to keep belief in myself.

✓ I only share my dreams with my close friends who always encourage me to keep believing in myself.

The phrase 'keep belief in myself' is incorrect word choice and form. Use the verb form 'keep believing' or the noun phrase 'maintain belief in myself.' 'Keep believing in myself' is natural. Ensure the gerund form after 'keep'. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× For example, when I was hard, they tell me.

✓ For example, when I was struggling, they told me.

'Was hard' is incorrect to express having difficulty; use 'was struggling' or 'had a hard time.' Also tense consistency: 'tell me' should be past 'told me' because the time marker 'when I was...' refers to the past. Use appropriate vocabulary for clarity. Grammar problem type ID: 5

× They told me no matter what life takes on me, keep going.

✓ They told me no matter what life throws at me, keep going.

The idiomatic expression is 'throws at me' not 'takes on me.' Also this is a direct reported imperative; keep the original 'keep going' is fine. Use idiomatic phrasal verbs for clarity. Grammar problem type ID: 11

× I think each dream has special meanings because it simplifies for their lifetime their hobbies.

✓ I think each dream has a special meaning because it reflects a person's lifelong hobbies.

Pronoun reference is unclear: 'it' and 'their' clash with 'each dream' (singular). Use singular agreement: 'a special meaning' and 'a person's' or rephrase to plural consistently. Also 'simplifies for their lifetime their hobbies' is awkward; use 'reflects a person's lifelong hobbies.' Grammar problem type ID: 12

× As a result, the dreams can motivate them to keep belief in their self.

✓ As a result, the dreams can motivate them to keep belief in themselves.

Use the reflexive pronoun 'themselves' (one word) not 'their self.' Also consider 'maintain belief in themselves' or 'keep believing in themselves' for natural phrasing. Grammar problem type ID: 15

× Yes, all people want their dreams come true, not only me, because the dreams simple life for their hobbies, for their lifetime and it can motivate them to keep hard, keep working and believe in.

✓ Yes, everyone wants their dreams to come true, not only me, because dreams simplify life for their hobbies and can motivate people to work hard, keep working, and believe in themselves.

Multiple issues: 'all people' is better as 'everyone.' Need infinitive 'to come true.' 'The dreams simple life' should be 'dreams simplify life' (verb form). 'Keep hard' is incorrect; use 'work hard.' 'Believe in' is incomplete—'believe in themselves.' Ensure subject-verb agreement and correct verb forms and pronouns. Use parallel structure for the list of actions. Grammar problem type ID: 27