Teamwork— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to make your answer more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy by combining ideas smoothly and using linking words. For example, instead of repeating 'I like', you can say 'I enjoy teamwork, especially when I can choose members who share similar ideas, as this helps avoid conflicts.'

예시: Yes, I enjoy teamwork, especially when I can choose members who share similar ideas, as this helps avoid conflicts.

제안: Improve clarity and structure by directly answering and then adding details with linking words. For example, say 'Yes, I have teamed up with others; for instance, I was a coaching member in several projects and also played basketball on my school team.'

예시: Yes, I have teamed up with others; for instance, I was a coaching member in several projects and also played basketball on my school team.

제안: Make your answer clearer and more natural by using correct grammar and linking words. For example, 'Working in a team improves communication skills because it involves sharing ideas and receiving feedback from others.'

예시: Working in a team improves communication skills because it involves sharing ideas and receiving feedback from others.

제안: Make your answer more coherent by using linking words and clearer phrasing. For example, 'What I dislike about teamwork is time management, because each person has their own tasks and may not be available when I am free to discuss or solve issues.'

예시: What I dislike about teamwork is time management, because each person has their own tasks and may not be available when I am free to discuss or solve issues.

× I don't like to be forced in working with team that we don't share similar ideas together and then we have conflicting matters arising.

✓ I don't like to be forced to work with a team that we don't share similar ideas with, and then we have conflicting matters arising.

The word 'team' is a singular countable noun and requires an article 'a' before it. Also, the phrase 'forced in working' is incorrect; it should be 'forced to work'. Additionally, 'share similar ideas together' is redundant; 'share similar ideas' suffices. The preposition 'with' is needed after 'share similar ideas'. These corrections improve clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× Yes, I was a coaching member in many projects as well as I was a basketball player inside the school team.

✓ Yes, I was a coaching member in many projects as well as a basketball player on the school team.

The phrase 'inside the school team' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'on' when referring to being part of a team. Also, 'I was' is repeated unnecessarily; it can be omitted in the second clause for smoother flow. The sentence is in past tense and should maintain consistency.

× Being a team member enhances this cause and the communication of a person.

✓ Being a team member enhances cooperation and a person's communication skills.

The phrase 'enhances this cause' is vague and unclear. It is better to specify what 'this cause' refers to. Also, 'the communication of a person' is awkward; 'a person's communication skills' is clearer and more natural. The sentence structure is improved for clarity and meaning.

× It's also aids and sharing ideas and receiving criticism and feedback from other team members.

✓ It also aids in sharing ideas and receiving criticism and feedback from other team members.

The phrase 'It's also aids' is grammatically incorrect; 'It also aids' is correct. Additionally, 'aids and sharing' is incorrect; the verb 'aids' should be followed by 'in' plus the gerund form 'sharing'. This correction fixes verb agreement and preposition usage.

× The only thing that I dislike about teamwork is time management because every person has her or his own designated work that he might not be free at the time.

✓ The only thing that I dislike about teamwork is time management because every person has their own designated work and might not be free at the time.

Using 'her or his' is wordy and less natural; 'their' is commonly used as a singular gender-neutral pronoun. Also, 'that he might not be free at the time' is awkward; 'and might not be free at the time' is clearer. These changes improve pronoun usage and sentence flow.

× At the same time when I'm free to discuss or solve some matters.

✓ At the same time, I might be free to discuss or solve some matters.

The original sentence is a fragment lacking a main verb and subject in the second clause. Adding 'I might be' completes the sentence and clarifies the meaning. Also, a comma after 'At the same time' improves readability.