Teamwork— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is relevant but a bit repetitive and unclear in places. Try to make your sentences more concise and avoid redundancy. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. For example, start with a clear topic sentence, then add specific reasons with linking words like 'because' or 'and'.

예시: Yes, I enjoy teamwork because it allows us to share ideas and learn new skills. Moreover, working in a group improves our communication skills, which are essential for success.

제안: Your answer addresses the question but contains grammatical errors and lacks coherence. Use past tense correctly and link your ideas logically. Also, be more specific about the experience and what you learned.

예시: Yes, during university, I teamed up with classmates for many presentations. Although we had different opinions and sometimes disagreements, we eventually learned to accept each other's ideas and work effectively together.

제안: Your answer has good points but is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical mistakes. Try to organise your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details using linking words. Also, be precise and avoid vague phrases.

예시: From working in a team, I have learned to accept others' ideas, which helps me think creatively and broaden my horizons. Additionally, effective communication with team members boosts our morale and makes the work more enjoyable.

제안: Your answer is incomplete and contains grammatical errors. Try to complete your thoughts clearly and avoid repetition. Use linking words to explain your points logically and provide specific examples if possible.

예시: Sometimes, I dislike teamwork because it can be time-consuming; we often have to wait for others to complete their tasks, which slows down progress. However, this experience teaches patience and cooperation.

× Yes, I'm fond of working as a team because we can share our ideas, we can learn new skills when we work with others and it's a raise our information, our knowledge and our skills.

✓ Yes, I'm fond of working as a team because we can share our ideas, we can learn new skills when we work with others and it raises our information, our knowledge and our skills.

The phrase 'it's a raise' is incorrect because 'raise' is a verb and needs to be in the correct form to agree with the subject. The correct form is 'it raises' to indicate the present tense third person singular. Using 'it's a raise' is grammatically incorrect here.

× The other thing that I like to mention is really important is communication skills when we have to work as a group and teamwork raise.

✓ The other thing that I would like to mention, which is really important, is communication skills when we have to work as a group, and teamwork raises them.

The original sentence is structurally incorrect and confusing. Adding 'would like to mention' clarifies the intention. Also, 'teamwork raise' is incorrect; it should be 'teamwork raises' to agree with the singular subject. The sentence is restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Yes, I recall that during university time we had lots of presentation and we had to teamed up and work as a team.

✓ Yes, I recall that during university time we had lots of presentations and we had to team up and work as a team.

The phrase 'had lots of presentation' should be plural 'presentations' to match the plural quantifier 'lots of'. Also, 'had to teamed up' is incorrect because 'had to' is followed by the base form of the verb, so it should be 'had to team up'.

× It was really difficult for us because we had different views and ideas and on that time most of the US were really stubborn but we learn how to how accept others ideas.

✓ It was really difficult for us because we had different views and ideas, and at that time most of us were really stubborn, but we learned how to accept others' ideas.

'on that time' should be 'at that time' (preposition correction). 'most of the US' is incorrect; it should be 'most of us' (pronoun correction). 'we learn' should be past tense 'we learned' to match the past context. Also, 'how to how accept' is redundant; 'how to accept' is correct. 'others ideas' needs an apostrophe to show possession: 'others' ideas'.

× At first I learned to accept others ideas and it helps me to think out-of-the-box and also it's broaden my horizons.

✓ At first I learned to accept others' ideas and it helped me to think out-of-the-box and also it broadened my horizons.

The sentence mixes past and present tense incorrectly. Since the context is past, 'helps' should be 'helped' and 'it's broaden' should be 'it broadened'. Also, 'others ideas' needs an apostrophe: 'others' ideas'.

× The other thing that I like to mention is that I learned how we can communicate with other people around us and the result of this communication is lift our spirits and our mood compared to learning lots of thing.

✓ The other thing that I would like to mention is that I learned how we can communicate with other people around us, and the result of this communication is lifting our spirits and our mood compared to learning lots of things.

'I like to mention' is better as 'I would like to mention' for politeness and clarity. 'lift our spirits' should be 'lifting our spirits' to function as a noun phrase after 'is'. 'lots of thing' should be plural 'lots of things'.

× Teamwork is the sometimes is really time consuming because we have to wait for others to do lots of thing and we cannot do lots of things simultaneously because we have to wait for them.

✓ Sometimes teamwork is really time-consuming because we have to wait for others to do lots of things, and we cannot do many things simultaneously because we have to wait for them.

The phrase 'Teamwork is the sometimes is' is incorrect; it should be 'Sometimes teamwork is'. 'time consuming' should be hyphenated as 'time-consuming' when used as an adjective. 'lots of thing' should be plural 'lots of things'. Also, 'lots of things' is repeated; 'many things' is better for variety.

× And the benefit of this situation is we can learn how to wait for lots of things to do it.

✓ And the benefit of this situation is that we can learn how to wait for lots of things to be done.

The phrase 'wait for lots of things to do it' is unclear and ungrammatical. It should be 'wait for lots of things to be done' to express the idea that we wait for tasks to be completed. Also, adding 'that' after 'is' improves sentence flow.