Teamwork— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答は内容がやや冗長で、文法的な誤りもあります。例えば、"prefer teamwork than working alone"は"prefer teamwork to working alone"が正しい表現です。また、話の流れが少し不自然なので、より簡潔で自然な表現を心がけましょう。

예시: Yes, I prefer teamwork to working alone because I learned the importance of collaboration and leadership when I played baseball as a child. Currently, I often work with my colleagues to gain valuable experience and improve my skills.

제안: 回答は質問に直接答えていますが、文法の誤りや不自然な表現があります。例えば、"which is one of my colleagues"は"who is one of my colleagues"が正しいです。また、"how the importance of the team work is"は"how important teamwork is"と表現すると自然です。

예시: Yes, two years ago I worked with my colleague, Mr. Kawahara, to write several articles about space exploration. This experience helped me realize how important teamwork is.

제안: 回答は内容が少し曖昧で、文法的な誤りも多いです。例えば、"By working on team"は"By working in a team"が正しいです。また、"organize A-Team"の意味が不明瞭で、"run a lot about how to get the teamwork"も意味が伝わりにくいです。より具体的で明確な表現を心がけましょう。

예시: By working in a team, I have learned how to demonstrate leadership and collaborate effectively with others. For example, watching rugby games has taught me the importance of coordination and teamwork.

제안: 回答は意味が伝わりますが、文法の誤りや不自然な表現があります。例えば、"it's a very complicated and time consuming"は"it's very complicated and time-consuming"が正しいです。また、"education for my younger colleagues are"は"education for my younger colleagues is"が正しいです。より簡潔で自然な表現を目指しましょう。

예시: Sometimes, I feel that I can complete tasks faster on my own because teamwork can be complicated and time-consuming. However, I believe it's important to support and train my younger colleagues, so I always participate in teamwork.

× I prefer teamwork than working alone because when I was a child I played baseball and I understood a lot about the teamwork and the leadership.

✓ I prefer teamwork to working alone because when I was a child I played baseball and I understood a lot about teamwork and leadership.

The correct preposition to use after 'prefer' when comparing two things is 'to', not 'than'. Also, 'the teamwork' and 'the leadership' are incorrect here because these are general concepts and do not require the definite article 'the'.

× I understood a lot about the teamwork and the leadership.

✓ I understood a lot about teamwork and leadership.

The definite article 'the' is not needed before uncountable nouns like 'teamwork' and 'leadership' when speaking generally.

× I tried to work with other members in my company right now so that I can get a good job and getting a lot of experiences about the teamwork.

✓ I try to work with other members in my company right now so that I can get a good job and gain a lot of experience about teamwork.

The phrase 'tried to work' conflicts with 'right now' which indicates present tense, so 'try' is more appropriate. Also, 'getting' should be 'gain' to match the verb form. 'Experiences' should be singular 'experience' when referring to uncountable knowledge. 'About the teamwork' should be 'about teamwork' without 'the'.

× Yes, two years ago I had to work with Mr. Kawahara, which is one of my colleagues, to write many articles about the space explorations.

✓ Yes, two years ago I worked with Mr. Kawahara, who is one of my colleagues, to write many articles about space exploration.

'Had to work' implies obligation which may not be intended; simple past 'worked' is better. 'Which' is incorrect for people; 'who' should be used. 'The space explorations' should be 'space exploration' without 'the' and in singular form as a general field.

× That experience made me understand how the importance of the team work is.

✓ That experience made me understand how important teamwork is.

The phrase 'how the importance of the team work is' is awkward and incorrect. It should be 'how important teamwork is'. Also, 'team work' is one word: 'teamwork'.

× By working on team, I can get a lot of experience about how to show the leadership and how to collaborate with each other and organize A-Team.

✓ By working on a team, I can gain a lot of experience in how to show leadership, collaborate with others, and organize a team.

'Working on team' needs the article 'a' before 'team'. 'Experience about' should be 'experience in'. 'The leadership' should be 'leadership' without 'the'. 'Collaborate with each other' is redundant; 'collaborate with others' is better. 'Organize A-Team' should be 'organize a team' unless 'A-Team' is a proper noun, which is unclear.

× It's very important and I always watch a rugby game and run a lot about how to get the teamwork.

✓ It's very important, and I always watch rugby games and run a lot to learn how to build teamwork.

'A rugby game' should be plural 'rugby games' if general. 'Run a lot about how to get the teamwork' is incorrect; 'run a lot to learn how to build teamwork' is clearer. 'The teamwork' should be 'teamwork' without 'the'.

× In many cases, a lot of work can be done by me alone.

✓ In many cases, a lot of work can be done by me alone.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no change needed.

× I'm sorry it's a very complicated and time consuming to collaborate with others, but I think the education for my younger colleagues are very important, so I always do my teamwork.

✓ I'm sorry, it's very complicated and time-consuming to collaborate with others, but I think educating my younger colleagues is very important, so I always do my teamwork.

'I'm sorry it's a very complicated and time consuming' needs a comma after 'sorry' and 'time consuming' should be hyphenated as 'time-consuming'. 'The education for my younger colleagues are' is incorrect; 'education' is singular, so 'is' should be used. 'I always do my teamwork' is awkward; better to say 'I always do my part in teamwork' or 'I always participate in teamwork'.