Teacher— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and fix tense/word choice errors (e.g., “didn't teach me anymore” -> “no longer teaches me”).

예시: My favourite teacher is Dr Chin, who taught me biochemistry. Although she no longer teaches my class, she has continued to support me; for example, we often meet to talk about my studies and she gives me encouragement and advice.

제안: Give a direct answer, then one or two specific details with clearer linking words and correct phrasing. Remove redundancy and fix awkward phrases (e.g., “through the messenger” -> “via Messenger” or “by message”).

예시: Yes, I am still in touch with my primary school teacher, Ms Wong, via Messenger. For instance, she often sends me a ‘good morning’ sticker, and we sometimes chat about how we are doing.

제안: Organise the reply: state the main ways they helped, then give specific examples with linking words. Correct grammar (singular/plural, verb forms) and avoid filler words. Be specific about the kind of academic help and career advice.

예시: She helped me in two main ways. First, academically: whenever I struggled with a topic, she would patiently explain it and give extra examples. Second, she advised me on career choices by discussing possible specialisations and the steps to become a doctor.

제안: Provide a clear topic sentence then a concise reason with one specific plan. Fix grammar and word choice (e.g., “interested to become” -> “interested in becoming”; “a doctor's who can save even more life” -> “doctors who can save more lives”). Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

예시: Yes, I would like to be a teacher in the future. After I specialise clinically, I plan to return to university to teach medical students because sharing my knowledge can help train doctors who save more lives.

× When I was in the first year of my university, even until now, she didn't teach me anymore but she always encouraged me and we always hang out to talk about our daily life and which is like my close friend and my favorite teacher that's always encouraged me.

✓ When I was in the first year of university, and even now, she no longer teaches me, but she always encourages me and we often hang out to talk about our daily lives; she is like a close friend and my favorite teacher who has always encouraged me.

This sentence has multiple structure and tense issues (Grammar problem type ID 26). Problems include inconsistent tense (past 'didn't teach' with 'even until now'), incorrect relative clause 'which is like', missing articles, and awkward phrasing. Suggestions: use consistent present or present perfect for ongoing relationships ('she no longer teaches me' or 'she hasn't taught me for some time'), replace 'which is like' with 'she is like' or 'who is', pluralize 'daily life' to 'daily lives' for two people, and combine clauses with punctuation or conjunctions to improve clarity.

× I still keep in touch with my primary school teacher, Teacher Wong through the messenger.

✓ I still keep in touch with my primary school teacher, Teacher Wong, through Messenger.

Preposition and proper noun capitalization issue (Grammar problem type ID 11). 'Messenger' is a platform name and should be capitalized; add commas to set off the name. Use 'through Messenger' to indicate the channel.

× So every morning she will send me a good morning sticker and sometimes and she will just message me and keep in touch with me and same I always keep in touch with her through online.

✓ Every morning she sends me a good morning sticker, and sometimes she messages me to keep in touch; I also keep in contact with her online.

Run-on sentence and awkward phrasing (Grammar problem type ID 26). Remove extra 'and' and 'just', use consistent verb tense ('sends' and 'messages'), and use 'keep in contact online' for natural phrasing.

× My favorite teachers help me in a lot of ways, so first academically.

✓ My favorite teachers help me in a lot of ways, first academically.

Minor structural issue and unnecessary comma (Grammar problem type ID 27). The sentence is acceptable but cleaner without 'so'. Keep plural 'teachers' with 'help'.

× So whenever I have some difficulty or mis or don't understand some certain aspect of the study, I will seek for their help to explain more detail and they will always answer me with a lot of patience.

✓ Whenever I have difficulty or don't understand a certain aspect of my studies, I seek their help to explain in more detail, and they always answer me patiently.

Multiple grammar issues including verb form and preposition use (Grammar problem type ID 8). Use 'have difficulty' not 'have some difficulty or mis', remove 'seek for' (use 'seek their help' or 'ask for their help'), use 'explain in more detail' and 'answer me patiently' (adverb placement). Present tense fits recurring action.

× Other than that, they also give me advice about my future careers and my career pathway in.

✓ Other than that, they also give me advice about my future career and my career pathway.

Preposition and noun number issues (Grammar problem type ID 11). Use singular 'career' for the general concept, and remove the stray 'in' at the end. 'Careers' could be used if discussing multiple options, but keep consistent.

× Yes, I'm interested to become a teacher in the future, so after I become a specialist, I plan to return to the university to teach the future medical student because by teaching them, I can also help to shape a doctor's who can save even more life in the future by sharing my knowledge with them.

✓ Yes, I'm interested in becoming a teacher in the future. After I become a specialist, I plan to return to the university to teach future medical students because by teaching them I can help train doctors who can save even more lives in the future by sharing my knowledge.

Multiple issues including verb form and modal/infinitive use (Grammar problem type ID 4). Use 'interested in becoming' (correct collocation), 'teach future medical students' (plural), remove incorrect articles and apostrophes ('a doctor's' is wrong), and use 'save more lives' (plural). Break into two sentences for clarity.