Teacher— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains redundancy. Try to start directly with your topic sentence, avoid filler words like 'uh', and use clearer sentence structures. Also, provide more specific details about why you like this teacher and how he helps you.

예시: Yes, my favourite teacher is my high school history teacher. He is very disciplined and always prepares thorough exams that help me understand the important events in history better.

제안: Your answer is confusing and repetitive. Avoid repeating phrases and filler words. Use linking words to make your answer coherent. Also, clarify your intentions with specific details.

예시: No, I am not in touch with my primary school teacher because I don't have his contact information. However, if I have free time, I would try to find him on social media because I think reconnecting would be meaningful.

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details using linking words. Also, be specific about how the teacher helped you.

예시: My favourite teacher, who is also the basketball coach, helped me by demonstrating techniques instead of just explaining them verbally. This hands-on approach made it easier for me to learn.

제안: Your answer has unclear phrases and grammatical mistakes. Avoid filler words and organize your ideas clearly. Use linking words to contrast your ideas and provide specific reasons.

예시: I don't want to be a physical education teacher because it's very challenging and I am not good at communicating with students. However, if possible, I would like to be an English teacher because I enjoy learning English and want to share how fun it is with others.

× Yes, you do. I have a favorite teacher who is, uh, who is a history teacher in my high school.

✓ Yes, I do. I have a favorite teacher who is, uh, a history teacher in my high school.

The pronoun 'you' is incorrectly used instead of 'I' when the student is referring to themselves. The correct pronoun should be 'I' to indicate the student's own experience.

× He is really disciplined person and I think he got up early in the morning to commute school and he makes an examination for us and it's really helpful to understand what is important for history.

✓ He is a really disciplined person and I think he gets up early in the morning to commute to school and he makes an examination for us and it's really helpful to understand what is important in history.

The sentence is missing the article 'a' before 'really disciplined person'. Also, 'got up' should be 'gets up' to match present tense. The phrase 'commute school' is missing the preposition 'to'. 'Important for history' should be 'important in history' to correctly express the context.

× No, I don't, I didn't, I don't, uh, keep in touch with primary school teacher because I don't have any address of him.

✓ No, I don't keep in touch with my primary school teacher because I don't have any address for him.

The sentence has redundant auxiliary verbs and incorrect pronoun usage. 'I don't, I didn't, I don't' is confusing and should be simplified to 'I don't'. Also, 'address of him' should be 'address for him' and 'primary school teacher' should have the possessive 'my'.

× Uh, but if I have, if I have a free time, uh, I want to know about addressed him.

✓ Uh, but if I have free time, uh, I want to know about him.

The phrase 'a free time' is incorrect; 'free time' is uncountable and does not need an article. 'Know about addressed him' is incorrect; it should be 'know about him' or 'get in touch with him'.

× So I will explore the social media to find their accounts and I think it's really helpful, uh, meaningful things.

✓ So I will explore social media to find his accounts and I think it's really helpful and meaningful.

'The social media' is incorrect; 'social media' is uncountable and does not need 'the'. 'Their accounts' is incorrect because it refers to one teacher; it should be 'his accounts'. The phrase 'helpful, uh, meaningful things' is awkward; it should be 'helpful and meaningful'.

× One of my teacher who is a coach of basketball team is really good way too good way to help me because they he couldn't, he couldn't teach by vocal, but he show us how to do in action, so it's really easy to understand for.

✓ One of my teachers who is the coach of the basketball team is a really good way to help me because he couldn't teach by voice, but he showed us how to do it in action, so it's really easy to understand.

'One of my teacher' should be 'One of my teachers' because 'one of' requires plural. 'Coach of basketball team' needs 'the' before 'basketball team'. 'They he couldn't' is incorrect; 'he couldn't' is correct. 'Teach by vocal' should be 'teach by voice'. 'He show' should be 'he showed' to match past tense. The sentence ending 'easy to understand for' is incomplete and should be 'easy to understand'.

× I don't want to be a teacher, a fabric teacher because it's really tough thing I'm not a good at to communicate with the students.

✓ I don't want to be a teacher, a physical education teacher, because it's really a tough job and I'm not good at communicating with students.

'Fabric teacher' is incorrect; likely meant 'physical education teacher'. 'Tough thing' should be 'tough job'. 'I'm not a good at to communicate' is incorrect; correct form is 'I'm not good at communicating'. 'The students' can be simplified to 'students'.

× But if I can, I want to be a teacher of English because I'm learning into English and I also want to uh, know them how fun it is.

✓ But if I can, I want to be an English teacher because I'm learning English and I also want to show them how fun it is.

'Teacher of English' is better as 'English teacher'. 'Learning into English' is incorrect; correct is 'learning English'. 'Know them how fun it is' is incorrect; it should be 'show them how fun it is'.