Teacher— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors and redundancy. Try to give a direct response first, then add specific details using linking words to improve coherence. Avoid repeating words and focus on clarity.

예시: Yes, I have a favorite teacher from my undergraduate studies. He was a biotechnology professor who was very understanding and always helped me with my questions. Because of his support, I enjoyed learning the subject a lot.

제안: Your answer is relevant but contains many fillers and hesitations which affect fluency. Try to speak more confidently and use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, be more concise and avoid unnecessary repetition.

예시: No, I am not currently in touch with my primary school teacher, but I hope to reconnect with her in the future. This would help me recall fond memories and seek advice about my future plans if needed.

제안: Your answer has relevant content but is filled with hesitations and lacks clear structure. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repeating words and fillers to improve fluency.

예시: My favorite teacher was my English teacher who not only improved my language skills but also guided me in making career choices. She was very understanding and always available to answer my questions about lessons and future plans.

제안: Your answer is clear but too short and contains hesitations. Try to give a complete response with reasons and use linking words to make your answer more coherent and natural.

예시: No, I do not want to be a teacher because I have decided to pursue a career as a scientist. I am passionate about research and believe this path suits my interests better.

× It was during my undergrad which for example one of my teacher was from biotechnology department who was satisfied he was my biotechnology teacher.

✓ It was during my undergrad when, for example, one of my teachers was from the biotechnology department; he was my biotechnology teacher.

The sentence has singular and plural issues: 'one of my teacher' should be 'one of my teachers' because 'one of' is followed by a plural noun. Also, 'biotechnology department' needs the definite article 'the' because it refers to a specific department. The sentence structure is also improved for clarity.

× It was during my undergrad which for example one of my teacher was from biotechnology department who was satisfied he was my biotechnology teacher.

✓ It was during my undergrad when, for example, one of my teachers was from the biotechnology department; he was my biotechnology teacher.

The conjunction 'which' is incorrectly used to introduce a time clause. The correct conjunction is 'when' to refer to a time period. Also, the sentence is complex and benefits from punctuation to separate ideas.

× He was very good, very understanding with the students and used to help me with all the queries.

✓ He was very good, very understanding towards the students and used to help me with all the queries.

The preposition 'with' is less appropriate here; 'understanding towards' is the correct collocation to express empathy or kindness directed at someone.

× She helped me with my, umm, English, umm, additionally, she also gave you uh, career choices that, uh, helped me a lot uh, to uh, choose my, uh, career in the future.

✓ She helped me with my English. Additionally, she also gave me career choices that helped me a lot to choose my career in the future.

The pronoun 'you' is incorrectly used instead of 'me' since the speaker is referring to herself. Also, the sentence is split for clarity and fluency.

× Also, uh, she, uh, she was, uh, very understandable and if I had any queries, I could ask her and umm, uh, regarding any lessons.

✓ Also, she was very understanding, and if I had any queries, I could ask her regarding any lessons.

'Understandable' means 'able to be understood,' but the intended meaning is 'showing understanding or empathy,' so the correct adjective is 'understanding.' The sentence is also streamlined for clarity.