Teacher— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn có ý tưởng tốt nhưng cần chú ý ngữ pháp và cách dùng từ để tự nhiên hơn. Ví dụ, "meet" nên dùng thì quá khứ "met". Từ "vocabularies" không cần số nhiều, chỉ dùng "vocabulary". Ngoài ra, câu trả lời hơi dài và có phần lặp lại, bạn nên dùng câu ngắn gọn, rõ ràng và tránh lặp từ.

예시: Yes, I have a favourite teacher. In grade 8, I met my English teacher who was very energetic and upbeat. She taught me a lot about vocabulary and grammar, and showed me effective ways to learn new words.

제안: Bạn cần chú ý ngữ pháp và cách diễn đạt để câu trả lời tự nhiên hơn. Ví dụ, "keep in touch" nên dùng thì hiện tại hoàn thành "have kept in touch" nếu còn liên lạc. Câu "I usually updated about her information" không đúng ngữ pháp và không rõ nghĩa, nên sửa lại. Ngoài ra, tránh lặp từ như "role model model".

예시: Not really, but I have kept in touch with my math teacher from grade 5 because I admired her. She was my role model back then, and I often ask her about how she is doing.

제안: Câu trả lời có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không phù hợp, khiến ý không rõ ràng. Ví dụ, "In my great night" không đúng, có thể bạn muốn nói "In my grade eight" hoặc "In my school years". Câu dài và lặp từ "myself" nhiều lần. Bạn nên dùng câu ngắn gọn, rõ ràng và dùng từ phù hợp hơn.

예시: During my school years, my math teacher always encouraged me to improve and be confident. I admired her positive energy and happiness, which motivated me a lot.

제안: Câu trả lời thiếu cấu trúc rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp. Ví dụ, câu đầu thiếu chủ ngữ và động từ chính. Câu thứ hai cũng không rõ nghĩa và thiếu liên kết. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, dùng câu hoàn chỉnh và giải thích rõ ràng hơn.

예시: Honestly, I would like to be a part-time tutor rather than a full-time teacher. Being a full-time teacher involves many deadlines and responsibilities, which can be overwhelming without enough experience.

× In my grade 8 I meet my English teacher who was a really energetic and upbeat person.

✓ In my grade 8 I met my English teacher who was a really energetic and upbeat person.

The verb 'meet' should be in the past tense 'met' because the action happened in the past (grade 8). Using present tense here is incorrect.

× She taught me a lot about vocabularies and grammar and showed me the instructions in the way to learn vocabularies effectively.

✓ She taught me a lot about vocabulary and grammar and showed me instructions on how to learn vocabulary effectively.

The word 'vocabularies' is incorrect because 'vocabulary' is an uncountable noun and should not be pluralized. Also, 'the instructions in the way to learn' is awkward; 'instructions on how to learn' is more natural.

× Not really, but I just keep in touch with my math teacher in grade 5 since I admired her and she was my role model model at that time that I usually updated about her information.

✓ Not really, but I have kept in touch with my math teacher from grade 5 since I admired her and she was my role model at that time; I usually get updates about her.

The phrase 'I just keep in touch' should be present perfect 'I have kept in touch' to indicate an action continuing from past to present. Also, 'updated about her information' is incorrect; 'get updates about her' is better.

× In my great night, I met my math teacher who always encouraged me to improve myself and be confident in myself, that I was admired her confidence and her vibes that was really energetic and always happy.

✓ One great night, I met my math teacher who always encouraged me to improve myself and be confident, and I admired her confidence and her vibes, which were really energetic and always happy.

'In my great night' is incorrect; 'One great night' is better. 'I was admired' is wrong; it should be 'I admired'. Also, 'vibes that was' should be 'vibes which were' to agree in number.

× Honestly just want to be a part time tutor as a full time teacher. Makes me deal with deadlines in work in schools which are really overwhelming to me and it needs hands on experiences.

✓ Honestly, I just want to be a part-time tutor rather than a full-time teacher. Being a full-time teacher means dealing with deadlines at school, which is really overwhelming for me and requires hands-on experience.

The original sentences lack subjects and proper structure. 'Honestly just want' needs 'I' as subject. 'Makes me deal' is a fragment; it should be rephrased. Also, 'hands on experiences' should be 'hands-on experience'.