Teacher— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答不够自然且表达不够清晰，句子结构混乱，存在语法错误。建议简化句子，直接回答问题，并用连贯的句子表达原因。

예시: Yes, my favourite teacher is my high school geography teacher because she was very passionate and inspired me to study geography as my major.

제안: 回答偏离问题，未直接回答是否与小学老师保持联系。建议直接回答问题，并补充相关细节。

예시: No, I am not in touch with my primary school teacher, but I still remember her kindness and the lessons she taught me.

제안: 回答中断且表达不完整，语法和用词错误较多。建议使用完整句子，清晰表达老师如何帮助自己。

예시: My favourite teacher helped me by carefully correcting my mistakes and providing extra exercises, which greatly improved my understanding of the subject.

제안: 回答表达不够流畅，存在重复和语法错误。建议简洁表达愿望，并说明原因。

예시: Yes, I want to be a teacher in the future because I enjoy helping others learn and sharing knowledge with my classmates.

× She did a good job in geography and because of her I studied this major and not only from her, not only I studied a lot of profession.

✓ She did a good job in geography, and because of her, I studied this major. Not only from her, but I also studied a lot of professional knowledge.

句子中时态使用不当，且句子结构混乱。应将句子拆分，使用过去时态描述过去的动作，并补充缺失的词汇，使表达更完整。

× Not only I learn a lot of professional knowledge from her, but also I learn a lot attitude to life.

✓ Not only did I learn a lot of professional knowledge from her, but I also learned a lot about attitude to life.

此句描述过去发生的事情，应使用过去时态。且'not only... but also'结构中，助动词应提前，动词用过去式。

× Help you My favorite teacher helped me a lot in my studies by a carefully correcting my mistakes and giving me extra practice exercises.

✓ My favorite teacher helped me a lot in my studies by carefully correcting my mistakes and giving me extra practice exercises.

句首多余的'Help you'导致句子结构错误，应删除。'a carefully correcting'中'a'不应与动名词连用，应直接使用副词'carefully'修饰动词。

× Umm, it's greatly improved my understanding in knowledge Uh, and she also cared about my.

✓ Umm, it greatly improved my understanding of the knowledge, and she also cared about me.

'it's greatly improved'时态错误，应为过去时'it greatly improved'。'understanding in knowledge'搭配错误，应为'understanding of the knowledge'。'cared about my'缺少宾语，应为'cared about me'。

× Definitely being a teacher is my dream.

✓ Definitely, being a teacher is my dream.

句首缺少逗号，导致语义不清。'Definitely'作为副词应与后句用逗号分开。

× I'm a very warm hearted person so I'm hugely willing to discuss with my classmates about some subject.

✓ I'm a very warm-hearted person, so I'm very willing to discuss some subjects with my classmates.

'warm hearted'应连写为'warm-hearted'。'hugely willing'搭配不当，应为'very willing'。'discuss with my classmates about some subject'结构重复，应为'discuss some subjects with my classmates'。

× So I think if if some if someone can learn a lot from me is a very promising and it's a nice thing.

✓ So I think if someone can learn a lot from me, it is very promising and a nice thing.

句中重复使用'if'，导致句子结构混乱，应删除多余的'if'。缺少主语和谓语的连接词，需添加逗号和'it is'使句子完整。