Perfume— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more grammatical, concise and clear. Start with a direct topic sentence (Yes/No + brief reason), then add one specific supporting detail. Avoid repetition and filler words. Use correct prepositions and verb forms (e.g., interested in, sold).

예시: Yes, I like perfume, but I rarely buy it because I have sinus problems and cannot smell well. However, I enjoy the scent of a particular cologne sold locally, which has a light citrus note that I find pleasant.

제안: Answer directly and avoid long conditional clauses. Give one clear hypothetical and a concise reason. Correct word order and article use, and avoid repeating brand names and phrases. Keep to 2–4 sentences maximum.

예시: No, I don't usually wear perfume because my sinus problems make scents unpleasant for me. If my symptoms improve, I would consider buying a popular scent like Victoria's Secret because it is light and lasts all day.

제안: Be concise and use correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons and an example. Use correct tense and structure (e.g., 'able to use' → 'use', 'if they wearing' → 'when they wear').

예시: Yes, I often buy perfume as a gift for my parents because they like Victoria's Secret scents. They use it at work and say it helps them feel fresher and more confident during the day.

제안: Give a clear opinion then support it with one or two specific points. Avoid hesitant language and repetition. Use comparative language correctly (e.g., 'some are affordable, but branded ones are expensive because of quality and brand reputation').

예시: I think it depends: some perfumes are affordable, but branded or designer perfumes tend to be expensive because of their higher quality ingredients and brand reputation. Many people choose to pay more for popular brands because they trust the scent and longevity.

× I'm interested of perfume but since I can't that smell properly because of my sinus issues, I don't normally buy perfume but uh I love the the smell of a different Cologne that was also sell in the market.

✓ I'm interested in perfume, but since I can't smell it properly because of my sinus issues, I don't normally buy perfume. However, I love the smell of a different cologne that is also sold in the market.

Multiple errors: incorrect preposition 'interested of' (use 'interested in') — Grammar Problem Type ID 11; incorrect verb phrase 'can't that smell' should be 'can't smell it' (sentence structure and pronoun placement) — Grammar Problem Type ID 26 and 12; 'the the' is a typo/redundant definite article — Grammar Problem Type ID 22; 'Cologne' should be lowercased unless brand and 'that was also sell' wrong tense and voice, needs passive 'is also sold' — Grammar Problem Type ID 9 (past participle) and 6 (present tense). Suggestions: use 'interested in', place pronoun after verb ('smell it'), remove duplicate 'the', write 'cologne' lowercase, and use 'is also sold' to show present passive.

× I don't normally use perfume or Cologne since I have sinus problems, but if I'm given a chance, if I don't have any issues, I would like to buy a perfume or Cologne or Victoria's Secret because it's a very popular perfume to the market as well and hopefully I can use that in the.

✓ I don't normally use perfume or cologne because I have sinus problems, but if I had the chance and did not have any issues, I would like to buy a perfume or cologne such as Victoria's Secret, because it is very popular in the market, and hopefully I could use it sometimes.

Errors: 'since' is acceptable but 'because' is clearer here (style) — not in list; 'Cologne' capitalization should be lowercase — Grammar Problem Type ID 13 (adjective/capitalization) or 22; conditional phrasing mixed tenses: 'if I'm given a chance, if I don't have any issues, I would like' should use consistent second conditional 'if I had... I would' — Grammar Problem Type ID 7 (future tense/conditional) and 6 (present tense). 'a perfume or Cologne or Victoria's Secret' is awkward; 'such as Victoria's Secret' clarifies — Grammar Problem Type ID 26. 'popular perfume to the market' incorrect preposition use, should be 'popular in the market' — Grammar Problem Type ID 11. 'use that in the.' incomplete sentence, missing noun after 'the' — Grammar Problem Type ID 23 (sentence without a verb/completion) and 22 (article error). Suggestions: use consistent conditional ('if I had the chance'), correct prepositions, remove unnecessary articles, complete the final noun or remove 'the'.

× Yes, I would like to buy a perfume as a specific gift to my special one especially my parents because they love the scent of Victoria's Secret as well as they can able to use it in their everyday work as well as it makes them feel comfortable and fresh if they wearing perfume.

✓ Yes, I would like to buy perfume as a special gift for my loved ones, especially my parents, because they love the scent of Victoria's Secret. They can use it at work every day, and it makes them feel comfortable and fresh when they wear perfume.

Errors: 'a perfume as a specific gift to my special one' — awkward articles and phrases; use 'perfume' without 'a' when speaking generally and 'for my loved ones' or 'for my special one' — Grammar Problem Type ID 22 (article errors) and 26 (sentence structure). 'they can able to use' is incorrect; use either 'can use' or 'are able to use' — Grammar Problem Type ID 4 (modal verb usage) and 26. 'everyday work' should be 'at work every day' (adverb/adjective order) — Grammar Problem Type ID 20. 'if they wearing perfume' missing auxiliary verb: should be 'when they wear perfume' — Grammar Problem Type ID 10 (present participle) and 6 (present tense). Suggestions: remove unnecessary articles, choose 'can' or 'able to' correctly, fix word order, and use correct verb form after time conjunctions ('when they wear').

× There is a specific, uh, Cologne or perfume that is not that to expensive to the in the market, but it's really a branded name and it's popular to to the consumer is a bit expensive, and that is the the product quality that most people will want to buy the popular item.

✓ There is a specific cologne or perfume that is not too expensive in the market, but branded items that are popular with consumers can be a bit expensive. The product quality of popular items is why most people want to buy them.

Errors: 'to expensive' should be 'too expensive' (adverb vs preposition) — Grammar Problem Type ID 13 (adjective/adverb misuse). 'to the in the market' has extra articles and prepositions; correct is 'in the market' — Grammar Problem Type ID 11 and 22. 'it's really a branded name and it's popular to to the consumer' incorrect phrasing: use 'branded items that are popular with consumers' — Grammar Problem Type ID 26 and 11. Duplicate 'to to' and 'the the' are typos — Grammar Problem Type ID 26. 'is a bit expensive, and that is the the product quality that most people will want to buy the popular item' unclear structure; separate ideas and use plural 'them' — Grammar Problem Type ID 26 and 27 (subject-verb agreement). Suggestions: use 'too' for degree, correct prepositions ('in the market', 'popular with consumers'), remove duplicates, and simplify sentences to match singular/plural nouns.