Perfume— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more grammatical, concise and coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms and avoid confusing metaphors. Use one or two supporting reasons with linking words. Keep it under five sentences.

예시: Yes, I do. I wear perfume almost every day because it makes me feel more confident and boosts my mood. For example, a light floral scent helps me feel fresh when I go to work or meet friends.

제안: Clarify frequency and reasons with correct grammar and linking words. Avoid repetition and fix awkward phrasing. Provide a concise topic sentence then one specific example or reason.

예시: I often wear perfume, but not every day. If I'm just stepping out for a quick meal nearby, I usually skip it because I don't feel it's necessary.

제안: Answer directly, use correct modal verbs and smoother phrasing. Give one reason and, if possible, an alternative gift choice to enrich the response. Use linking words like 'because' and 'so'.

예시: I probably wouldn't buy perfume as a gift because fragrance preferences are very personal and hard to predict. Instead, I would choose a gift card or a neutral item like a scented candle that is safer.

제안: Make your viewpoint clearer and correct collocations. Use linking words to show contrast and give a specific example (brand, price or longevity) to support your claim. Avoid vague phrases.

예시: It depends on the brand and ingredients. Although high-end perfumes can be costly, they often last longer and require only small amounts, so in the long run they can be value for money—for example, a 50ml bottle can last several months.

× I like perfume and I use it daily because it make me more confident and it's for me.

✓ I like perfume and I use it daily because it makes me more confident and it suits me.

Subject-verb agreement error: 'make' should be 'makes' to agree with singular subject 'it'. Also 'it's for me' is awkward; use 'it suits me' for natural English. Grammar problem type ID:27

× I think it's like such a other office that I always put on when I go out.

✓ I think it's like another kind of accessory that I always put on when I go out.

Incorrect phrase 'such a other office' is ungrammatical and uses wrong words. 'Another' not 'a other', and 'office' is wrong word; 'accessory' fits context. Use 'kind of' to clarify comparison. Grammar problem type ID:26

× I often use perfume in my daily life but I would say it is not everyday because sometimes I just go out like a quick for a quick meal like restaurant near my house.

✓ I often use perfume in my daily life but I would say not every day because sometimes I just go out for a quick meal at a restaurant near my house.

Errors: 'everyday' (adjective) vs 'every day' (adverbial phrase) — use 'every day'. 'like a quick for a quick meal like restaurant' is repetitive and incorrect preposition use; use 'for a quick meal at a restaurant'. Grammar problem type ID:20

× So it I think it not just necessary to put on perfume like to go.

✓ So I think it is not always necessary to put on perfume just to go out.

Multiple issues: word order and missing auxiliary 'is'. 'not just necessary' is awkward; 'not always necessary' is clearer. Add 'to go out' to complete the idea. Grammar problem type ID:26

× I won't because I think it hard to select the sense of fragrance that that person like because it's kind of personal preference for the sense.

✓ I wouldn't because I think it's hard to choose a fragrance that the person likes, since scent is a personal preference.

Modal verb: 'I won't' (refusal) is less appropriate than 'I wouldn't' for a hypothetical preference. 'hard to select the sense of fragrance' should be 'hard to choose a fragrance'. Fix pronoun repetition 'that that' and verb agreement 'person like' -> 'person likes'. Grammar problem type ID:4

× So if I buy for someone else, I'm not sure that.

✓ So if I buy for someone else, I'm not sure it will suit them.

Sentence ends unclearly: 'I'm not sure that' is a fragment. Provide an object and clarify pronoun: 'it will suit them' or 'they will like it'. Grammar problem type ID:23

× I think it depends on branding, but actually I think the expensive perfume followed by the high quality.

✓ I think it depends on the brand, but actually I think expensive perfumes tend to be higher quality.

Use 'brand' not 'branding' here. 'the expensive perfume followed by the high quality' is incorrect structure; use 'expensive perfumes tend to be higher quality'. Also plural agreement with 'perfumes'. Grammar problem type ID:11

× So I think it is not expensive because it can use for a long term like one perfume bottle I can wear.

✓ So I don't think they are expensive because they last a long time; one bottle can be used for a long time.

Issues: pronoun/verb agreement ('it can use' incorrect — passive/active confusion), singular/plural mismatch ('perfume' vs 'they'), awkward phrase 'for a long term' -> 'for a long time' or 'last a long time'. Rephrase for clarity. Grammar problem type ID:1