Coins— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the answer more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one brief reason with a specific example. Avoid repeating words and correct small grammar errors (e.g., 'We are a cashless society' and 'QR scans' → 'QR codes').

예시: I rarely use coins now because most payments in Thailand are done with QR codes. For example, I scan a code with my phone to pay for street food or taxi fares, so I hardly ever need cash.

제안: Give one clear reason and support it with a specific detail, using correct grammar and linking words. Avoid vague phrases and repetition. Say 'dirty' or 'unsanitary' and correct verb forms (e.g., 'collect many germs' and 'everyone touches them').

예시: Not really — coins are inconvenient because they are heavy and often feel unhygienic; for instance, many people handle them, so they can carry germs and make me reluctant to use them.

제안: Provide a clearer, grammatically correct explanation with a short supporting detail or example. Use past tense consistently ('when I was a kid') and explain motivation specifically rather than vague phrases. Keep it within three sentences.

예시: Yes, I collected coins when I was a kid because I wanted to save money for small treats. For example, I kept coins in a tin and used them to buy snacks or toys at the market.

제안: Answer directly and correct facts and vocabulary. Use 'rarely' not 'rally', and say 'cashless transactions' or 'card and mobile payments' instead of 'payless'. Give one brief specific situation showing when you might still carry a coin.

예시: I rarely carry coins these days because most payments are cashless, using cards or mobile apps. However, I sometimes bring a few coins for small vendors or parking meters that only accept cash.

× I rarely use coins now because we use QR scans currently in Thailand.

✓ I rarely use coins now because we use QR codes in Thailand.

The sentence uses 'QR scans' awkwardly; 'QR codes' is the correct noun. Also 'currently' is redundant with 'now'; remove redundancy to improve clarity. Maintain present simple for habitual actions.

× We are cashless society now.

✓ We are a cashless society now.

Missing article 'a' before 'cashless society' makes the noun phrase incorrect. Use 'a' to form a proper singular count noun phrase.

× Definitely not because it is heavy and I feel it dirty sometimes.

✓ Definitely not, because they are heavy and I sometimes find them dirty.

Pronoun/number mismatch and awkward adjective use: 'coins' is plural so use 'they are heavy'. 'I feel it dirty' is ungrammatical; use 'I find them dirty' or 'they feel dirty to me'. Also move adverb 'sometimes' to a natural position.

× I think that coins collect many of germs because everybody touches touch.

✓ I think that coins collect many germs because everybody touches them.

Remove unnecessary preposition 'of' after 'many'; use 'many germs'. Replace the duplicated verb 'touch' and use the pronoun 'them' to refer to 'coins'.

× Have you collected coins when you were a kid?

✓ Did you collect coins when you were a kid?

Use simple past 'Did you collect' for actions at a specific time in the past ('when you were a kid') rather than present perfect 'Have you collected' which implies relevance to the present.

× Yes, I love collecting coins because I want to increase my money and then I could pay for my once at things.

✓ Yes, I loved collecting coins because I wanted to increase my money and then I could pay for small things.

Tense consistency: the question asks about childhood, so use past tense 'loved' and 'wanted'. The phrase 'once at things' is unclear; likely 'small things' or 'occasional purchases'. Adjust to 'small things' for clarity.

× I rally carry coins these days because in Thailand there are a lot of payless transactions, so we don't need to carry coins.

✓ I rarely carry coins these days because in Thailand there are a lot of cashless transactions, so we don't need to carry coins.

Spelling error 'rally' should be 'rarely'. 'Payless transactions' is incorrect; the intended term is 'cashless transactions'. This keeps present simple to describe habitual present situation.