Cakes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 句子较为自然，但有重复和语法不准确（如“and other like milk tea”）。回答较长，应更简洁并使用连接词使逻辑更清晰。建议开头直接回应问题，随后用一两句具体说明喜好并简短解释健康顾虑。注意动词时态和名词搭配（e.g. “other sweet foods”）。

예시: Yes, I do. I especially enjoy cakes on my birthday, and my favorite is tiramisu because of its creamy texture. However, I try not to eat too much sweet food like milk tea because it can make me gain weight.

제안: 回答含糊且有语法和用词错误（例如“they're Ting distinguished”）。内容不够具体且例子不恰当（饺子不是蛋糕）。建议直接说明几种具体的传统糕点并指出地区差异，使用连接词把句子衔接起来。

예시: Yes, there are many traditional Chinese cakes. For example, mooncakes are popular in the south during the Mid-Autumn Festival, while rice cakes such as niangao are commonly eaten in the north during Chinese New Year.

제안: 基本能回答，但有明显词汇和表达错误（如“buy the flowers”应为“flour”；步骤表达不够准确且句子结构混乱）。建议使用清晰的步骤描述，不要过多犹豫词，时态保持一致，并用连接词（first, then, finally）。

예시: Yes, I can. I learned to make cupcakes from YouTube. First, I mix flour, milk, butter and eggs into a batter. Then I pour the batter into a tray and bake it in the oven for about 15–20 minutes. Finally, I let them cool and add frosting.

제안: 时态混用且重复（多次使用“I like”），句子不够连贯，存在词汇错误（“I cream cakes”应为“ice cream cakes”）。建议使用过去时描述童年经历，并用一两句具体回忆或细节来丰富答案。

예시: Yes, I did. When I was a child I loved all kinds of sweets, especially cakes. On my birthday we always had an ice cream cake, and I remember feeling very excited when it arrived.

제안: 回答表达情感丰富但有些用词不自然（如“taste the dessert”，“it's sweet to my heart”）和语法小错误（单复数）。建议简洁直接回答并给出原因或习惯，使用自然的表达来描述感受。

예시: Yes, I usually enjoy a small dessert after dinner, especially tiramisu. It makes me feel happy and relaxed, so I often share a small portion with my family.

× I enjoy eating cakes especially on my birthday I like to eat all kinds of cakes.

✓ I enjoy eating cakes, especially on my birthday. I like to eat all kinds of cakes.

句子中缺少标点并且需要使用动名词短语。第一部分“I enjoy eating cakes”之后应加逗号并用独立句“I like to eat all kinds of cakes.”来避免run-on sentence（并列句未用连词或标点连接）。建议在句子间加入标点或连接词以分隔两个完整的句子。

× Tiramisu and other like milk tea or other kind of sweet food may make me fat.

✓ Tiramisu and other sweets like milk tea or other kinds of sweet food may make me fat.

原句中“other like milk tea”结构不正确，缺少名词“sweets”或“things”作为“other”的参照。同时“kind”应与复数搭配为“kinds”。建议补全名词并保持数一致。

× There are many traditional Chinese cakes, umm, they're Ting distinguished from the different parts, like from the North China and the South China.

✓ There are many traditional Chinese cakes. They are distinguished by different regions, such as North China and South China.

原句中“they're Ting distinguished”存在拼写和结构错误。应使用被动结构“are distinguished by”来表达“被不同地区区分”。另外“the North China”不自然，使用“North China”更常见。建议使用被动语态和正确的介词短语。

× Like in North China, we eat dumplings.

✓ In North China, we eat dumplings.

句首“Like”在这里多余，非必要口语填词，书面语中应去掉。建议直接以介词短语开头“In North China”。

× Yes I can make cakes, especially I can make cupcakes and learned from the YouTube.

✓ Yes, I can make cakes. Especially, I can make cupcakes and I learned from YouTube.

原句中缺少逗号分隔，并且时态混用：前半句用情态动词“can”，后半句“learned”应有主语“I”。此外，“the YouTube”冠词使用不当，应为“YouTube”。建议补全主语并修正冠词，保持时态一致。

× Uh, firstly you will buy the flowers and put the milk, butter and the eggs in it and the stir it and then put in the oven for several minutes.

✓ Firstly, you buy the flour and put the milk, butter, and eggs in it, then stir it and put it in the oven for several minutes.

原句有多处错误：1) “flowers”应为“flour”（面粉）；2) 不应使用“will”在制作步骤中（习惯上用一般现在时）；3) “the stir it”语序错误，应为“then stir it”；4) 缺少宾语“it”在“put in the oven”。建议用一般现在时描述步骤并改正词汇与语序。

× After that you will get the cupcake.

✓ After that, you get the cupcake.

描述食谱或步骤时通常使用一般现在时而非将来时，因此将“will get”改为一般现在时“get”。建议在说明程序时使用一般现在时以更自然地表达步骤。

× I like to eat cakes. When I was a child I like all kinds of sweet food, especially cakes and the on my birthday I liked to eat I cream cakes.

✓ I liked to eat cakes. When I was a child I liked all kinds of sweet food, especially cakes, and on my birthday I liked to eat ice cream cakes.

这里时态不一致：谈论过去应该用过去时“liked”。句子中还有拼写错误“I cream”应为“ice cream”，以及多余的“the”。建议统一使用过去时并修正拼写与多余词。

× That is delicious.

✓ They were delicious.

句子前文谈到的是“cakes”或“ice cream cakes”，属于复数，应用复数代词和谓语“they were delicious”。另外时态为过去，故用“were”。建议保持人称与数的一致。

× I like to have some desserts after meal, especially my favorite tiramisu.

✓ I like to have some desserts after a meal, especially my favorite tiramisu.

“after meal”缺少冠词，应该为“after a meal”或“after meals”。建议在可数名词前使用适当的冠词。

× After dinner, I taste the dessert. I feel it's sweet to my heart and make me joyful.

✓ After dinner, I have dessert. I feel it is sweet to my heart and makes me joyful.

“taste the dessert”在此上下文中不自然，用“have dessert”更通顺。主句主语是“It”，因此第二分句应使用第三人称单数动词“makes”。建议使用更自然的动词搭配并保证主谓一致。