Cakes— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more fluent and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid hesitations (uh, mm), and complete the reason with a cohesive clause. Use linking words and more natural phrasing (e.g., "because they contain too much sugar, which is bad for my health").

예시: No, I don't really like sweet foods because they contain a lot of sugar, which I think is bad for my health.

제안: Give a direct answer then add a brief specific detail. Avoid hesitations and incomplete sentences. Use the correct name and describe key ingredients or occasions (linking with 'for example' or 'for instance').

예시: Yes. We have mooncakes, which are traditionally filled with sweet bean paste or lotus seed paste and are eaten during the Mid-Autumn Festival.

제안: Answer directly and expand with clear reasons using linking words. Avoid fragmented or unclear phrases (e.g., "the most difficult phrase"). Be specific about which part you find difficult (kneading, smashing, baking).

예시: No, I can't make cakes. I think baking requires several skills, such as measuring ingredients accurately and kneading or mixing batter properly, which I find difficult.

제안: Combine short sentences into a single coherent answer and add a brief detail using a linking word. Avoid starting a sentence with a fragment. Provide a small example or comparison to enrich the response.

예시: Yes, when I was a child I enjoyed sweet snacks like cakes and candy because they tasted good, and I especially liked birthday cakes.

제안: Be more natural and reduce hesitations. Give a concise topic sentence then add a specific habit using a linking word. Make the list fluid (use 'and' properly) and avoid trailing stops.

예시: Yes, I usually have a dessert after meals; for example, I often have a slice of cake and a cup of milk tea.

× No, I don't like sweet foods because they are. MMM or they contain too much sugar which is harmful to body health.

✓ No, I don't like sweet foods because they think they contain too much sugar, which is harmful to health.

Original sentence is fragmented and unclear ('because they are. MMM or they contain...'). This is a sentence structure error: clauses are incomplete and disconnected. Also 'harmful to body health' is awkward; use 'harmful to health'. Suggestion: combine clauses into a single clear sentence and remove filler sounds like 'MMM'. Use correct noun phrase 'health'. Note: if speaker meant 'they are sweet' then: '...because they are sweet and contain too much sugar, which is harmful to health.'

× Yes, and we have moon case which is made of. Uh. In the.

✓ Yes, we have moon cakes, which are made of [ingredients].

The original has fragments and wrong word forms: 'moon case' should be 'moon cake', and 'which is made of' is incomplete. This is a problem with past participle usage in passive ('which are made of') and sentence structure. Suggestion: use plural agreement 'cakes' and complete the passive phrase with the ingredients (e.g., 'which are made of flour and sweet bean paste').

× No, I don't know how to make cakes. I think it requires too many skills. Which I think the most difficult phrase is how to smash the.

✓ No, I don't know how to make cakes. I think it requires many skills; the most difficult part, I think, is how to knead or shape the dough.

Original contains sentence fragments ('Which I think...') and wrong word choice ('smash the' is vague). This is sentence structure error and wording. Suggestions: connect ideas properly (use a semicolon or subordinate clause) and use accurate verbs for baking ('knead', 'shape', 'roll').

× When I was a child, I enjoyed eating sweet snacks such as cakes and sugar. Because they tasted good.

✓ When I was a child, I enjoyed eating sweet snacks such as cakes and candy because they tasted good.

Starting a sentence with 'Because' creates a sentence fragment; combine the clauses into one complete sentence. Also 'sugar' is not a snack; 'candy' is more natural. This is a past tense context but mainly sentence structure; ensure clauses are joined to avoid fragments.

× Yes, I would like to have some dessert after the meal. MMM. I usually have some cakes and. Milk tea.

✓ Yes, I would like to have some dessert after the meal. I usually have some cake and milk tea.

Original has unnecessary filler ('MMM') and a fragment ('and. Milk tea'). Also 'cakes' is plural but 'some cake' or 'some cakes' both possible; use 'some cake' or 'some cakes and milk tea' without a break. This is present tense / sentence structure issue: keep sentences complete and fluent.