Birthday— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，例如“wish my wish me have a better age”表达不清晰。建议简化句子结构，避免重复，使用更自然的表达方式。

예시: On my birthday, I usually sing songs with my friends and family. We also share delicious birthday cakes to celebrate and wish each other happiness for the coming year.

제안: 回答中有语法错误和表达不完整的问题，如“eating birthday”不明确。建议使用完整句子，明确描述活动内容，并避免重复。

예시: When I was young, I often invited my friends and family to my birthday parties. We enjoyed playing games and eating delicious food together, which made the time very special.

제안: 回答句子结构混乱，表达不完整，缺少连贯性。建议分句表达观点，使用连接词使内容更连贯，完整表达感受和理由。

예시: Yes, I think celebrating my birthday is important because it makes me feel loved and appreciated by my friends and family. Also, it symbolizes growing up and reflecting on the past year.

제안: 回答中有语法错误和重复，如“who who”，表达不够简洁。建议使用更准确的词汇，避免重复，表达更清晰。

예시: In China, besides celebrating birthdays of family and friends, we also honor the birthdays of celebrities who have contributed greatly to our country's development. This is a way to remember and respect them.

× Well, there are plenty of things that I can do during my birthday times.

✓ Well, there are plenty of things that I can do during my birthday time.

“birthday times”中的“times”不合适，通常说“birthday time”表示生日这段时间，复数形式不正确。

× we always share some really delicious birthday cakes to wish my wish me have a better age.

✓ we always share some really delicious birthday cakes to wish me a better age.

“to wish my wish me have a better age”结构混乱，正确表达应为“to wish me a better age”，去掉多余的词语。

× Well, when I was young, I frequently invited my friends and my family to my birthday party.

✓ Well, when I was young, I frequently invited my friends and my family to my birthday parties.

“birthday party”应与“frequently”搭配使用复数形式“birthday parties”，表示多次生日聚会。

× We always had really valuable time among my birthday parties.

✓ We always had really valuable times during my birthday parties.

“valuable time”应使用复数“valuable times”，因为指多次生日聚会中的宝贵时光。

× We can do, we can do a lot of things such as eating birthday.

✓ We can do a lot of things such as eating birthday cake.

句子结构不完整且缺少宾语，“eating birthday”不完整，应补充“cake”使句子完整。

× birthday always plays an important role in our daily in my daily life as when I have a birthday parties I usually feel appreciated and loved by my friends and my family and also birthday can be a symbol of growing up so I really.

✓ Birthday always plays an important role in my daily life, as when I have birthday parties, I usually feel appreciated and loved by my friends and my family. Also, birthday can be a symbol of growing up.

句子中“in our daily in my daily life”重复且混乱，应改为“in my daily life”；“a birthday parties”中“a”与复数不符，应去掉“a”；句子过长，需分句使表达清晰。

× except our families and friends birthday, we frequently celebrate some celebrities birthdays who who do a lot of contribution to our country's development.

✓ except our families' and friends' birthdays, we frequently celebrate some celebrities' birthdays who do a lot of contribution to our country's development.

“families and friends birthday”应为复数所有格“families' and friends' birthdays”；“celebrities birthdays”应为“celebrities' birthdays”；“who who”重复，应去掉一个“who”。

× who who do a lot of contribution to our country's development.

✓ who do a lot of contribution to our country's development.

“who who”重复，应去掉一个“who”。