Birthday— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer needs to be clearer and more natural. Try to use correct grammar and avoid redundancy. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas logically. For example, mention the sequence of activities clearly and use appropriate vocabulary like 'take a bath', 'have tea', and 'go for a morning walk'.

예시: On my birthday, I usually get up early and take a bath. Then, I have a cup of tea and go for a morning walk because the fresh air helps me feel relaxed. After that, I visit the temple to offer prayers to God.

제안: Please focus on using the correct past tense and avoid repetition. Also, structure your answer with a clear topic sentence followed by supporting details. Use linking words like 'then' and 'after that' to make your answer coherent.

예시: When I was young, I used to get up early and take a bath. Then, I would go to the temple to receive blessings from God. After returning home, I would get blessings from my parents and grandparents.

제안: Your answer is unclear and incomplete. Try to express your opinion clearly and support it with reasons. Use linking words like 'because' and avoid grammatical errors. Also, complete your sentences properly.

예시: Yes, I believe it is important to celebrate birthdays because they mark a special day in a person's life. Celebrations create happiness and bring people together.

제안: Your answer is confusing and lacks clarity. Focus on answering the question directly. Use correct sentence structure and provide specific reasons. Avoid unnecessary details that do not relate to the question.

예시: In my opinion, the most important birthdays to celebrate in China are those of close family members because family is highly valued in Chinese culture.

× Generally I get up early in the morning and take bath and after that I take a T and are going for a morning worker becauses in the morning there is fresh and released fresh from my mind and then I go to temple and praise from God.

✓ Generally I get up early in the morning and take a bath and after that I take tea and go for a morning walk because in the morning it is fresh and it refreshes my mind and then I go to the temple and pray to God.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'are going' instead of 'go' for the habitual action. 'Take bath' should be 'take a bath' as 'bath' is a countable noun here. 'Take a T' is unclear and corrected to 'take tea'. 'Morning worker' is a wrong phrase; it should be 'morning walk'. 'Praise from God' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'pray to God'. Also, 'released fresh from my mind' is unclear and corrected to 'it refreshes my mind'. These corrections improve clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× When I was young, I get up early in the morning and I take bath. After that I going to I went to temple and a blessing from God and then when I was coming home I I take class blessing from my parents and my grandparents.

✓ When I was young, I got up early in the morning and took a bath. After that, I went to the temple and received a blessing from God and then when I was coming home I took blessings from my parents and my grandparents.

The sentence is about past events, so verbs should be in past tense. 'Get up' and 'take' should be 'got up' and 'took'. 'I going to I went' is incorrect; 'I went' suffices. 'A blessing from God' needs a verb, so 'received a blessing' is correct. 'I take class blessing' is unclear and corrected to 'I took blessings'. These changes correct tense and improve sentence structure.

× Yes, in my viewpoint it is very important for everyone to celebrate their birthday be 'cause they were day. Create a hapiness day for everyone and people feel happy and.

✓ Yes, in my viewpoint it is very important for everyone to celebrate their birthday because it is their day. It creates a happy day for everyone and people feel happy.

The phrase 'be 'cause' is informal and incorrectly split; it should be 'because'. 'They were day' is incorrect; it should be 'it is their day'. 'Create a hapiness day' is a sentence fragment and should be connected properly. 'Hapiness' is misspelled; correct spelling is 'happy'. The sentence ending with 'and' is incomplete and needs completion. These corrections improve coherence and grammar.

× In my viewpoint, at the most important to celebrate birthday in China is my friend because of my friend went to China in 2015 and the China in the China, the birthday is very. Famous for everyone.

✓ In my viewpoint, the most important birthday to celebrate in China is my friend's because my friend went to China in 2015 and in China, birthdays are very famous for everyone.

'At the most important to celebrate birthday' is incorrect; it should be 'the most important birthday to celebrate'. 'My friend' needs possessive form 'my friend's' to indicate the birthday belongs to the friend. 'The China in the China' is redundant and incorrect; simplified to 'in China'. 'The birthday is very famous' is awkward; better to say 'birthdays are very famous'. These corrections fix singular/plural issues and improve clarity.