Birthday— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 你的回答表达了基本意思，但存在语法错误和用词不当，如“older birthdate cake”应为“order a birthday cake”。建议注意动词时态和词汇的准确使用，同时避免重复表达。

예시: On my birthday, I usually organize a celebration party and invite all my friends to join. I also order a birthday cake to share with everyone.

제안: 回答中有语法错误和表达不清，如“in white eat my classmates”不合适。建议使用正确的句子结构和词汇，表达更清晰。

예시: When I was a child, my parents always organized a birthday party and invited my classmates to join. We sang songs and danced to celebrate.

제안: 回答表达了观点，但存在语法错误，如“becauses”和“will makes”。建议注意语法和句子结构，使表达更自然流畅。

예시: Yes, I think it is important to celebrate my birthday because it is a memorable day to spend with my loved ones. It also makes me very happy.

제안: 回答中有拼写错误和表达不准确，如“80s a big day”应为“is a big day”。建议注意拼写和句子完整性，表达更清晰。

예시: I believe my mother's birthday is the most important because she is very important to everyone. It is a big day for my family to gather and celebrate together.

× Oh my birthday I will organize a birthday celebration party an invite all my friends to come celebrate for my birthday.

✓ Oh, on my birthday I will organize a birthday celebration party and invite all my friends to come celebrate my birthday.

句中缺少介词'on'来表示时间，且连词'an'应为'and'。需要使用正确的连词连接两个动作。

× Also I will older birthdate cake for sharing to everyone.

✓ Also, I will order a birthday cake to share with everyone.

单词'older'用错，应为'order'表示订购。'birthdate cake'应为'birthday cake'。'for sharing to everyone'表达不自然，应改为'to share with everyone'。

× When I was a child, my parents always organized a birthday party for me and in white eat my classmates to join my birthday party.

✓ When I was a child, my parents always organized a birthday party for me and invited my classmates to join my birthday party.

句中'in white eat'无意义，应为'invited'，表示过去动作。

× We were doing some singing and dancing to celebrate.

✓ We sang and danced to celebrate.

此处描述过去习惯性动作，使用一般过去时更合适，'were doing'不符合语境。

× Yes, it is important for me to celebrate my birthday becauses birthday is a memorable day to celebrate with my loved ones.

✓ Yes, it is important for me to celebrate my birthday because birthday is a memorable day to celebrate with my loved ones.

单词'becauses'拼写错误，应为'because'。

× It also will makes me very happy.

✓ It will also make me very happy.

助动词'will'后动词应为原形，'makes'应改为'make'。

× I believe it should be my mother's birthday 'cause mom is always important to everyone and 80s a big day for me and my family to gather together to celebrate with each other.

✓ I believe it should be my mother's birthday because mom is always important to everyone and it is a big day for me and my family to gather together to celebrate with each other.

'80s'应为'it is'，缩写为'it's'，表示'这是'。'cause'口语中可用，但正式表达应为'because'。