Birthday— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 你的回答不够连贯，句子结构混乱，表达不清晰。建议练习使用简单明了的句子，避免语法错误，并且用连接词使句子更流畅。

예시: On my birthday, I usually celebrate with my close friends. We spend time together playing games and watching movies. This makes me feel happy and connected with the people I care about.

제안: 回答中有语法错误和用词不当，表达不够清晰。建议多练习正确的时态和词汇使用，并且用具体细节丰富内容。

예시: When I was young, my parents always celebrated my birthday with me. They prepared delicious food like chocolate cake and sweets. Sometimes, we all sat together and talked, which made the day very special and memorable.

제안: 回答中有很多不连贯和错误的表达，影响理解。建议使用简单句表达观点，并用具体理由支持。

예시: Yes, I think it is very important to celebrate my birthday. It is a special time to reflect on the past year and set new goals. Celebrating with my family and friends makes me feel happy and loved.

제안: 回答内容混乱，语法和词汇错误较多，难以理解。建议先理清思路，使用简单句表达观点，并用具体例子说明。

예시: In China, the most important birthdays to celebrate are those of elderly people. For example, the 60th birthday is very special because it symbolizes long life and wisdom in Chinese culture.

× On my birthday I only celebrated with my close friends because I enjoy sure special T-shirts so with his own.

✓ On my birthday, I only celebrate with my close friends because I enjoy sharing special T-shirts and spending time together.

句子中“celebrated”使用了过去时，但句意是描述通常的习惯，应使用一般现在时“celebrate”。另外，“enjoy sure special T-shirts so with his own”表达不清，推测为“enjoy sharing special T-shirts”，需改正。

× Voice coil corner time together and playing game and watching movies to make healthy fat and I enjoy what.

✓ We spend time together playing games and watching movies, which makes me happy.

原句结构混乱，词语搭配错误，需调整句子结构，使表达清晰通顺。

× When I was young, my parents always celebrate my birthday with me.

✓ When I was young, my parents always celebrated my birthday with me.

句子描述过去的习惯动作，谓语动词应使用过去时“celebrated”，而非现在时“celebrate”。

× The early prepared delicious photo such as a chocolate cake and the worry so sweet.

✓ They prepared delicious food such as a chocolate cake and other sweets early.

“photo”应为“food”，“the worry so sweet”表达错误，应为“other sweets”。另外，量词和词序需调整。

× Sometimes we also submit them all talk together, which made that even more special and memorable.

✓ Sometimes we also sit and talk together, which made it even more special and memorable.

“submit them all talk”表达错误，应为“sit and talk”，“that”指代不明，改为“it”更合适。

× Yes, Sir. I think it's very important for me to celebrate on my Presley 'cause it's a special thing to reflect on the past year under 7 new codes.

✓ Yes, Sir. I think it's very important for me to celebrate my birthday because it's a special time to reflect on the past year and set new goals.

“Presley”应为“birthday”，“'cause”应为“because”，且“under 7 new codes”表达不当，应为“set new goals”。

× I already celebrate her with my family and friends, which makes me feel happy and loved them.

✓ I always celebrate it with my family and friends, which makes me feel happy and loved.

“her”指代错误，应为“it”指代“birthday”；“loved them”语法错误，应为“loved”。

× The single most important birthdays. Celebrate the internal age to the elderly people, especially Wednesday Rich.

✓ The single most important birthdays are those of the elderly people, especially the seventy-eighth birthday.

句子不完整且表达不清，“internal age”应为“elderly age”，“Wednesday Rich”应为“seventy-eighth birthday”或类似表达。

× About 6 year old becaused to save your order in Chinese culture.

✓ About 60 years old because it is valued in Chinese culture.

“6 year old”应为“60 years old”，“becaused to save your order”表达错误，应为“because it is valued”。

× I was special means symbolise long cavity and wisdom.

✓ It is special because it symbolizes longevity and wisdom.

“I was special means”语法错误，应为“It is special because it symbolizes”，“long cavity”应为“longevity”。