Birthday— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is a bit unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to make your response more natural and direct by clearly stating what you do on your birthday. Also, avoid redundancy and keep your answer within 5 sentences.

예시: I usually celebrate my birthday by cutting a cake with my family. We gather together, share some food, and enjoy each other's company. It's a simple but joyful occasion for me.

제안: Your answer has some incomplete sentences and unclear expressions. Try to use linking words to make your answer coherent and provide more specific details about how you celebrated your birthday when you were young.

예시: When I was young, I used to celebrate my birthday with neighbours and relatives. My mother would invite them to our house, and we would have a small party with games and food. It was always a fun and memorable day for me.

제안: Your answer conveys your opinion but has some grammatical mistakes and unclear phrases. Try to organise your ideas logically using linking words and be more specific about why birthday celebrations are important to you.

예시: Yes, I believe celebrating birthdays is important because it brings joy and happiness. Moreover, life can be busy, so birthdays give us a chance to pause and appreciate special moments. Therefore, celebrating birthdays helps me feel grateful and connected with loved ones.

제안: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and lacks clarity. Try to express your ideas more clearly and use appropriate linking words. Also, avoid informal language like 'cause' and improve sentence structure for better coherence.

예시: In China, I think the birthdays of famous personalities are important to celebrate because many people admire them. Celebrating their birthdays allows fans to show respect and feel connected to their idols, which creates a joyful atmosphere.

× On my birthdays are usually celebrated by having a birthday cake by my side and I used to cut it with my family and celebrate my boy.

✓ On my birthdays, I usually celebrate by having a birthday cake by my side, cutting it with my family, and celebrating my birthday.

The original sentence has incorrect sentence structure and unclear meaning. 'On my birthdays are usually celebrated' is passive and awkward. Also, 'celebrate my boy' seems to be a mistake for 'celebrate my birthday'. The corrected sentence uses active voice and clearer phrasing to express the intended meaning.

× When I was young, I used to celebrate my birthday with our neighbors and relatives.

✓ When I was young, I used to celebrate my birthday with my neighbors and relatives.

The use of 'our neighbors' is incorrect here because the speaker is referring to their own birthday celebrations, so 'my neighbors' is appropriate. This is an issue of pronoun use, but since it relates to possession in past context, it fits better as a pronoun correction.

× My mom used to call them on the occasion of my birthday and we celebrated it like. Never before.

✓ My mom used to invite them on the occasion of my birthday, and we celebrated it like never before.

The phrase 'call them' is incorrect in this context; 'invite them' is more appropriate. Also, 'we celebrated it like. Never before.' is fragmented and unclear. Combining into one sentence improves clarity and correctness.

× I think it is very important for celebrating my birthday because birthday celebrations brings you a joy and happiness that you want in your life.

✓ I think it is very important to celebrate my birthday because birthday celebrations bring you the joy and happiness that you want in your life.

'Birthday celebrations brings' is incorrect subject-verb agreement; it should be 'bring'. Also, 'a joy and happiness' is incorrect; 'joy and happiness' are uncountable and do not need 'a'. The corrected sentence fixes these quantifier and agreement issues.

× Because sometimes life gets very busy and you don't get text time to celebrate any small things.

✓ Because sometimes life gets very busy and you don't get enough time to celebrate even small things.

'Text time' is incorrect; likely a typo or misuse. The correct phrase is 'enough time'. Also, 'any small things' is better expressed as 'even small things' to emphasize the point.

× So birthday celebration is a good way to celebrate a great big inning.

✓ So birthday celebration is a good way to celebrate a great big beginning.

The word 'inning' is incorrect in this context; it should be 'beginning'. This is a vocabulary error affecting sentence meaning and structure.

× Famous personality birthdays are most important to celebrate 'cause they are famous for a reason and people used to follow them and they celebrate it like it's their own birthday an they will joyful and enthusiastic by celebrating their birthday.

✓ Famous personalities' birthdays are the most important to celebrate because they are famous for a reason, and people follow them and celebrate it like it's their own birthday, and they feel joyful and enthusiastic celebrating their birthday.

'Famous personality birthdays' should be 'Famous personalities' birthdays' to show possession and plural form. Also, 'used to follow' is incorrect here; present tense 'follow' fits better. 'An they will joyful' is grammatically incorrect; it should be 'and they feel joyful'. The corrected sentence addresses pluralization, possession, verb tense, and sentence clarity.