Birthday— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and lacks coherence. Try to avoid repeating phrases like 'I used to' and use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. Also, be more specific about the activities you do and keep your answer within 5 sentences.

예시: On my birthday, I usually plan a small party in advance. I spend quality time with my family and close friends, enjoying activities like playing games and sharing a meal. We cut a cake together and exchange gifts, which makes the day special and memorable.

제안: Your answer has some grammatical errors and unclear phrases like 'A surplus surprised me'. Try to use clear and correct expressions, avoid repetition, and use linking words to make your answer coherent. Also, keep your answer concise and specific.

예시: When I was young, I celebrated my birthday quietly by inviting close friends over. My parents would organize a small party where we cut a cake and played games together. I always enjoyed receiving gifts and spending quality time with my loved ones.

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical mistakes and incomplete thoughts. Try to express your ideas clearly and logically, using proper linking words. Avoid filler words and ensure your sentences are complete and meaningful.

예시: Yes, I believe celebrating birthdays is important because it gives us a chance to spend quality time with family and friends. Additionally, it reminds us to appreciate growing older and the experiences we gain each year.

제안: Your answer is repetitive and lacks clarity. Avoid repeating words like 'development' and use linking words to connect your ideas. Also, be more specific about the person and explain why their birthday is important clearly and concisely.

예시: I think the most important birthday to celebrate in China is that of the former president because his leadership brought significant development and positive changes to the country. Honouring his birthday recognises his contributions to China's progress.

× I mostly prefer to give gifts to.

✓ I mostly prefer to give gifts.

The sentence ends with a preposition 'to' without an object, which is incorrect. The verb 'prefer to give gifts' does not require 'to' at the end. Removing 'to' corrects the sentence structure.

× my parents used to.

✓ my parents used to as well.

The sentence fragment 'my parents used to.' is incomplete and lacks an object or verb phrase. Adding 'as well' completes the thought, indicating that parents also used to do the same.

× A surplus surprised me with a lot of gifts and we often cut a cake together and enjoy variety of fun activities like playing games and spending some quality time together.

✓ My parents surprised me with a lot of gifts and we often cut a cake together and enjoyed a variety of fun activities like playing games and spending some quality time together.

The phrase 'A surplus surprised me' is incorrect; likely intended 'My parents surprised me'. Also, 'enjoy variety' lacks an article; it should be 'enjoyed a variety'. Correcting these improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Moreover, I think but they is something which should be celebrated Erbie 'cause we are getting older day by day.

✓ Moreover, I think there is something which should be celebrated every year because we are getting older day by day.

The sentence has multiple errors: 'but they is' is incorrect; it should be 'there is'. 'Erbie' is likely a misspelling of 'every'. Correcting these errors makes the sentence grammatically correct and meaningful.

× I believe that is the birthday of former president of China should be celebrated in good way because the developments made in China are due to his his deeds and he has made a lot of development and changes in China.

✓ I believe that the birthday of the former president of China should be celebrated in a good way because the developments made in China are due to his deeds and he has made a lot of development and changes in China.

The sentence misses the definite article 'the' before 'former president' and 'good way'. Adding 'the' and 'a' makes the sentence grammatically correct and clearer.