Birthday— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to make your answer more natural and clear by correcting grammar mistakes and avoiding redundancy. For example, instead of saying "becauses I don't go outside with my friends a lot and for me it was a old habit," you can say "because I don't often go out with my friends anymore, so celebrating has become an old habit." Also, keep your answer concise and directly related to the question.

예시: When I was younger, I used to celebrate my birthday by going out with friends. However, now I rarely do because I don't go out much, so celebrating has become less important to me.

제안: Focus on structuring your answer clearly with correct grammar and linking words. Avoid incomplete sentences and unclear phrases like "after bids are." Also, provide specific details and use linking words to make your answer coherent.

예시: When I was young, my friends and I used to go to a restaurant where we always ate pizza. After that, we would drink soft drinks because we are Muslims and do not consume alcohol.

제안: Improve clarity by correcting word choice and sentence structure. For example, "I love column" is unclear; you might mean "I love calm" or "quiet". Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and avoid short, incomplete sentences.

예시: No, I don't think it's important for me to celebrate my birthday because I prefer calm and quiet situations. Actually, I am an introverted person and don't enjoy large gatherings.

제안: Try to understand the question fully before answering. Avoid guessing or providing unclear information. If unsure, you can say so politely and give a general answer. Also, use correct vocabulary and names to avoid confusion.

예시: I'm not sure about the most important birthday to celebrate in China, but I know that many people celebrate the Chinese New Year, which is a very important festival there.

× When I was younger I used to celebrate my birthday but nowadays I don't celebrate my birthday becauses I don't go outside with my friends a lot and for me it was a old habit.

✓ When I was younger, I used to celebrate my birthday, but nowadays I don't celebrate my birthday because I don't go outside with my friends a lot, and for me it was an old habit.

The word 'becauses' is incorrect; it should be 'because'. Also, 'a old habit' is wrong because 'old' starts with a vowel sound, so the article should be 'an'. These are article errors (ID 22). Adding commas improves sentence clarity but is not a grammar problem listed.

× Me and my friends we were going to on the restaurant and we always ate a pizza and after bids are we drink a lot of course original drinks not alcohol because we are Muslims and.

✓ My friends and I used to go to the restaurant, and we always ate pizza. After that, we drank a lot of original drinks, not alcohol, because we are Muslims.

The phrase 'Me and my friends we' is incorrect; the subject pronoun 'I' should be used and 'we' is redundant. Also, 'going to on the restaurant' is incorrect preposition usage (ID 11). 'A pizza' is incorrect when referring to pizza in general; no article is needed (ID 22). 'After bids are' is unclear and likely a mishearing; corrected to 'After that'. 'We drink' should be past tense 'we drank' to match past context (ID 5). The sentence was fragmented and needed restructuring for clarity (ID 26).

× No, no, because I love column and I love quiet situations. Actually, I don't like to gather with people a lot because I'm an introverted person, so. It is not important for me to celebrate my birthday.

✓ No, because I love calm and quiet situations. Actually, I don't like to gather with people a lot because I'm an introverted person. So, it is not important for me to celebrate my birthday.

The word 'column' is incorrect; likely intended 'calm' (ID 13). The sentence 'so.' is incomplete and should be connected properly (ID 23). The rest is grammatically correct.

× Actually, I don't understand your question, but I think people in China would celebrate the birthday or the first day of Mousey Tongue. I think because Marcie Tongue is the most popular person in China.

✓ Actually, I don't understand your question, but I think people in China would celebrate the birthday or the first day of the Mousey Tongue. I think this because Mousey Tongue is the most popular person in China.

The phrase 'I think because Marcie Tongue' is incomplete; it should be 'I think this because...'. Also, 'Marcie Tongue' and 'Mousey Tongue' seem to be mispronunciations or misspellings, but as proper nouns, they are kept. The definite article 'the' is needed before 'Mousey Tongue' if it is a specific event (ID 17).