Birthday— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but it could be more natural and coherent by avoiding redundancy and completing the last sentence properly. Try to use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and ensure your sentences are complete.

예시: On my birthday, I usually host a small gathering at home with my closest family and friends. We cook some of our favorite dishes and enjoy a special dinner together. After that, we often play games or listen to music to keep everyone entertained and make the celebration lively.

제안: Your answer has some grammatical errors and unclear phrases that affect clarity. Focus on using correct verb tenses and clearer expressions. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas logically and provide more specific details.

예시: When I was younger, my parents usually prepared a small celebration for me. They baked a cake, decorated the room with balloons, and invited other children to join the party. Although it was a small gathering, it made me feel very special and loved.

제안: Your answer conveys good ideas but contains some grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing. Try to use plural forms correctly and improve sentence structure. Use linking words to make your answer more coherent and add specific examples if possible.

예시: I believe celebrating birthdays is very important because it brings family members together and helps us stay connected. Moreover, it is a way to show gratitude for another year of life. For example, during my birthday, I often reflect on my achievements and appreciate the support from my loved ones.

제안: Your answer is unclear and fragmented, which affects communication. Try to form complete sentences and avoid pauses or incomplete thoughts. Even if you are unsure, you can express your opinion clearly and logically using linking words.

예시: I am not very familiar with birthday customs or important dates in China. However, I think that if there is a birthday that is most important to celebrate, it would probably be that of the king or the ruler of the nation, as they hold a significant position.

× After that, we often have a little program like games or music to keep us entertained and make it.

✓ After that, we often have a little program like games or music to keep us entertained and make it enjoyable.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'make it' which is incomplete. The verb 'make' should be followed by an object and an adjective or verb in -ing form to complete the meaning. Adding 'enjoyable' clarifies what 'make it' refers to, improving sentence completeness and clarity.

× When I was younger, my parents would usually prepare a small celebration to me.

✓ When I was younger, my parents would usually prepare a small celebration for me.

The preposition 'to' is incorrectly used here. The correct preposition to indicate the beneficiary of an action is 'for'. Using 'for me' correctly shows that the celebration is prepared on the student's behalf.

× They will bake a cake by some balloons and invite other children to celebrate with me.

✓ They would bake a cake with some balloons and invite other children to celebrate with me.

The sentence describes a habitual past action, so 'would' is appropriate instead of 'will'. Also, the preposition 'by' is incorrect here; 'with' is the correct preposition to indicate accompaniment or decoration.

× It's usually a small covering, but I felt like I'm very important for them for doing so.

✓ It's usually a small gathering, but I felt like I was very important to them for doing so.

The word 'covering' is incorrect; the intended word is 'gathering' which means a social meeting. Also, tense consistency is needed: 'felt' (past) should be matched with 'was' instead of 'I'm'. The preposition 'for' should be 'to' when expressing importance to someone.

× They will bake a cake by some balloons and invite other children to celebrate with me.

✓ They would bake a cake with some balloons and invite other children to celebrate with me.

The use of 'will' is incorrect for past habitual actions; 'would' is the correct modal verb to express repeated past actions.

× I think celebrating birthdays is very important because it brings family together and help us stay connected.

✓ I think celebrating birthdays is very important because it brings family together and helps us stay connected.

The subject 'it' is singular, so the verb should be 'helps' instead of 'help' to maintain subject-verb agreement in present tense.

× Additionally, it is a one way of being grateful.

✓ Additionally, it is one way of being grateful.

The article 'a' is unnecessary before 'one way' because 'one way' is a fixed expression. Removing 'a' corrects the phrase.

× For another year of life that is given to you, I see this a special way to appreciate and express my gratitude.

✓ For another year of life that is given to you, I see this as a special way to appreciate and express my gratitude.

The verb 'see' requires the preposition 'as' when followed by a noun phrase. Adding 'as' corrects the sentence structure.

× I don't really know anything about customs or traditions in China, not alone the important dates or birthday celebration, but I think.

✓ I don't really know anything about customs or traditions in China, let alone the important dates or birthday celebrations, but I think.

The phrase 'not alone' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'let alone' to indicate something even less likely. Also, 'birthday celebration' should be plural to match 'important dates'. The sentence was incomplete and is corrected for clarity.

× Given that. Someone is important.

✓ Given that someone is important,

The original sentences are fragments and incomplete. Combining them into a single clause improves sentence structure and clarity.